Why Does He Love Me?
Rarity ran into her room on the verge of tears. As sad as she was though, there was no anger within her; to her it was just a matter of time before the truth revealed itself.
The door slammed shut from her magic as she jumped back first onto her bed. Water was built up over her eyes, but it didn't flow; she still had that much strength left, "S-Spikey Wikey..." The sunlight poured in through her window, revealing the crowd of ponies gathered on the streets; they were still there, enjoying the celebration.
Rarity opened up a nearby drawer and out of it grabbed a photo album; the album had a white cover but no title or any word written on it; all that it had was a red heart that stretched from edge to edge and corner to corner. It had been years since she had opened it, and years more since she had talked about it. Today however, she needed it again, regardless of how much it would hurt.
Inside the book were a collection of photos of herself ranging from when she was a filly to just a few years prior. In all these photos a stallion stood beside her, either hugging her, holding her in his arms, him in her arms or staring into her eyes with a romantic bliss as she did into his. The stallions were earth pony, pegasus and unicorn, of all different sizes and colors, and all stood beside Rarity like the two were the happiest couple anypony could meet. Memories came flooding back, as did the first trickle over her cheeks, but the one memory that couldn't escape her mind was of the incident that caused her to be here, alone in her room with her past, while the rest of Ponyville cheered outside.
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It happened just a few minutes prior, when the streets were still empty. Cheers began to erupt as Apple Bloom walked on the road; she had just earned her cutie mark, and not just one, but two. Naturally such a rare incident was cause for celebration, and as Apple Bloom continued her show the celebration reached Rarity, who stood with her sister and Twilight on a road.
Not wanting to waste a chance to show off her new skills, Apple Bloom tossed a plate at Twilight, causing the unicorn's mane to transform into a shape Rarity knew all too well. Rarity filled with glee from the sight of her friend now with her own mane, but as quickly as her joy began, it too ended as such. Spike popped out with a look of euphoria unlike Rarity had ever seen. Literal hearts were on his eyes, but they were not for her. She had always been the source of his desire, but today she was just another pony on the road, another nameless face in the background. Twilight was all he could stare at, or more specifically, her mane, Rarity's mane.
Twilight of course just laughed at the situation, as did Sweetie. Rarity joined in, though her forced smile began to cramp her cheeks. All she could look at were Spike's heart laden eyes, and the mane they couldn't stop gazing at. Seconds became days, and before she knew it she was running to her house holding back her tears.
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Now back to the present, Rarity continued staring into her photos, only to hear the sound of approaching hoofsteps. The door creaked open. She quickly turned around, finding Twilight, now with her normal mane, standing in the entrance. "Hi...Rarity..." Twilight said, looking worried, "Sorry for not knocking."
Rarity jerked her head back to her photo book and slammed it shut, after which she threw it to the ground. "No worries, darling! Come in, come in! What brings you here by the way?!"
Twilight stepped forward, "I... uh came to ask you if you were feeling alright... You kinda just ran away from the celebration without saying anything. You had us worried."
Rarity forced up a smile. "Why of course I'm alright! I just wanted to get a head start on my next batch of dresses, that's all. There was no need to worry, dear."
"I already saw the photos, Rarity," Twilight said, "And you weren't exactly that inconspicuous when you tried hiding them..."
Rarity laughed, "What, I can't reminisce? I just wanted to take a look at all the stallions I was once acquainted with, for memory's sake... What happened back there has nothing to do with it."
Twilight gave her no nonsense face, "Rarity... what's going on?"
A moment of silence followed as the two ponies faced each other. Rarity took a deep breath, "Fine then... if you are going to be persistent... yes, what happened with you and Spike troubled me. I apologize for running away without at least excusing myself."
"No... I'm sorry," Twilight said, frowning.
"You?!" Rarity's head shot back, "What in Equestria are you sorry for?"
"I know you and Spike have a... weird relationship. He likes you; you think of him as more than just a friend; I can see how you would become jealous."
Rarity stood up, "Twilight..." and walked to her friend, "What kind of pony do you take me for? Is that what you think this is about?"
"Well... yeah! What else could it be about?"
Rarity turned around, "Perhaps it is best if we leave our conversation at this..."
Twilight paused," Fine then... If you're not ready to talk then it's not right of me to push you. I hope you feel better," and began walking out. Rarity heard the hoofsteps of her friend grow farther with each passing moment, but as relieved as she was that the conversation was over, a feeling overtook her, like a scream that just had to be shouted.
"Twilight!" she screamed, stopping her friend. Rarity took one last deep breath, "What I'm about to tell you may surprise you... but I feel that it has to be said, particularly after today... The reason I ran away was not some petty jealousy, but because I realized that Spike... doesn't love me."
Twilight's ears fell, "Uh... Rarity, I hate to break this to you, but from living with him I can safely say that he's obssessed with you... Yes, he got all googly eyed when I had your mane, but that's because it was your mane! Of course he loves you!"
Rarity scoffed, "Then I don't think you understand the true meaning of love!" She used her magic to pick up and open her photo book, "These are all my past boyfriends and potential boyfriends; all of them were amazing; all were funny, handsome and stallions any mare would dream of being with."
"So why aren't you still with them?"
"Because... they didn't love me... or at least the real me." Rarity faced down, "All they loved was my appearance. It wasn't my personality or who I was that interested them, it was just the chance to date somepony beautiful, or a 'ten' as they would joke... Why, I could see right through them!" Rarity stomped the floor, "That isn't love! That isn't love at all! That's just a lie, a fraud!" Her breathing heavied.
"Rarity... I never knew you felt like this... Wait..." Twilight tapped her chin, "No offense, but you do use your appearance a lot when it comes to getting boys to do things for you."
"I know I'm guilty of that," Rarity said, "I also know I'm guilty of being no better than they are; I've chased my fair share of stallions over nothing but their looks or status, but that does not make it right!"
Twilight caressed her friend, "I understand how you feel... I've never had to deal with something like this personally, never dated, but I agree with you. I'd take a pony who interested in me than how I looked anyday, no matter how he looked himself."
Rarity gave off an angry look, "So you can see why Spike acting the way he did upset me. He doesn't love me for who I am, all he cares for is my mane! Put that on anypony and he'll fall for them no differently; who I am doesn't mean a thing to him, and from how it seems, it never was!"
"Calm down, Rarity... Spike just got a little too excited over seeing your mane style on me; I can guarantee if I kept it he'd still be into you... It was just a goofy incident, a gag."
"It may... but I fear that it exposes much more. At first, sure, Spike just found my looks attractive, but as I've gotten to know him... he's the only man who has ever made the attempt to understand me. I know he spends time to me only to stare at me like he always does, and I do just make him do the grunt work, but no other man has ever made me feel as comfortable around them as Spike has!" Rarity teared up, "Yes, I love him... there, I said it! But not for his adorable eyes, or his calming laugh, but because of how he makes me feel around him, how I feel totally free even if we aren't doing anything. I don't care if he's a dragon, griffin or whatever! As long as he's Spike! I just thought he'd one day feel the same way... that he'd be the one man I was more than just a pretty face to."
Twilight put her hoof around Rarity, "Spike does love you... for you... I promise."
Rarity choked back a tear, "I know... I'm overreacting like I always do... T-This has never affected me before like this... It's ju...ust that.... I want to know... why does he love me?"
Twilight paused with her friend still in her hooves, "I do have an idea to find out... if you're willing to do it..."
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"This better not be for nothing," Rarity said, "I'd rather not be like this any longer than I have to... and it's already been too long as it is."
"You said you wanted an answer..." Twilight said, "And you're going to get one!"
Twilight stood in front of the closed door to Rarity's room with her friend on the other side. She slowly opened the door, revealing the monstrosity Rarity had become. Rarity's mane was now one giant bush with a circular shape in the bottom that spread out into frizzles at the top, and her teeth were colored yellow with black spots. Her face and eyes had all make up and eyelash extensions removed and were covered with lipstick smears that gave off the look of red mud. Even more, her clothes were ripped and stained farm gear that belonged to Applejack, and to top it all off she had a hairy mole the size of a pebble placed near her lips. "Twilight, I'm never looking at a mirror again," she said.
Twilight laughed, "Don't worry, you look perfect," and ran off away from the room. "I'll get Spike! Just stay here!"
As Rarity waited for the moment of truth all that she could think about was Spike's answer and what she feared it would be. A book's worth of stallions had come and gone, and for all she knew a dragon was soon about to join them. All she could do now was wait and think, and think, and think.
Two pair of hoofsteps approached the room. Rarity took a deep breath with her eyes closed, "Please, Spike..."
Twilight walked towards the room with Spike right behind her. At first he didn't notice Rarity, but the second he did his whole body froze with a disgusted face followed by his claws shaking like they were being shocked. "R-R...Rarity?"
Rarity stepped forward, smiling, "The one and only, Spikey Wikey... I thought a change in style was needed and wanted you to be one of the first to see. Any thoughts?" Her teeth jittered.
"I-It's... lovely!" Spike smiled, nervously.
"Is that really what you think?" Twilight said, one eyebrow raised.
"Of course... I say go for it!" Spike said.
Rarity paused, "Spike... I know you're lying; you never have been that convincing, dear... I do need you to be honest with me right now... As hideous as I look... am I still beautiful to you?"
Spike stepped closer. His smile was genuine. "Rarity, you're always beautiful to me."
"D... Do you truly mean that?"
"Of course..." Spike said, "Now don't get me wrong, some styles work better for you than others, but as long as you're Rarity I don't care what you look like... You should consider a new style though." Spike quickly put his hands over his mouth, "I didn't mean that! Really! Honest! It just-!"
"Oh Spike!" Rarity wrapped her hooves around the panicking dragon and smiled with a romantic bliss unlike any she had ever felt before. She pulled him in, "I'm so sorry I ever doubted you! I'll never make that mistake again!"
"Dou-what?" Even though he was in the embrace of the mare of his dreams, Spike kept his head away from her mole driven face and gagged with pre-vomit. She didn't notice and continued squeezing him with her eyes shut. Spike could only struggle for so long though, and too grew a blissful smile. He brought his face against Rarity's, mole and smears and all, and embraced her like she was the most beautiful pony on earth.
Even as she was, she was still the most beautiful pony on earth.
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Now, this is what I feel was missing from most shipping fics. Hardly anybody ever asks "Why?"
Aside from some small logical errors, nothing about this is really bad. In all honesty, I never expected a whole story could be made out of that one, as Twilight accurately put it, gag.
My hat's off to you, good sir/madam, for proving me wrong.
Very good job, dear sir
Very nice. Short and Sweet.
This is a really good story. I'm glad you wrote it.
good job, but the ending seemed a bit rushed...
Story could have been longer.
I like this story.
What? It was a good story but the end just leave me like is that it? No offence this a great work you have have here but the end...
you should work on a sequel to this but other than that nice work.
Not bad, and I applaud your effort to try answering what is definitely a difficult question. But the story was a bit short with an abrupt ending.
I always thought that it was because the female dragon of Spike's species has head spines that look a lot like Rarity's mane...
I always figured that part of Spike's attraction to Rarity was that she is an example he aspire to. Much like him, her worst vice is Greed, something that she consistently struggles against and overcomes enough to become the Element of Generosity.
He was shocked because Rarity changed. I'd be asking what the get up was about.
Really cute. I liked it.
--Spade
Uh, yeah. This was definitely rushed. I mean, I'm playing this whole thing out in my mind, and... it just doesn't add up for me. I mean, it's not like Spike to be dishonest about something like this, and he wouldn't try to hurt Rarity's feelings, but he wouldn't lie to her, also, if he really loves her like in the show, he'd show her in other ways that it's not just about the looks.....
4824197 I know what you mean. I mean everyone else lies about Rarity's mane in Show Stoppers, but Spike does the right thing any good friends should and tells her the truth, "It's green." That rather blunt comment, unlike all the lies, actually tells her so she can fix it instead of letting her walk around with a green mane until she sees a mirror.
It was cute and hit all the points of Rarity's sorrow and Twilight's concern dead on, but it never really answers the title, the question the fic is based around: Why does Spike love Rarity? Without that the end feels rushed and incomplete, until that point you did pretty great through.
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Yeah, also, he didn't mean it in a bad way, if anything he probably liked her with green hair, judging from his tone... I think I read it in a fic somewhere how he cheered her up by stating that he liked her with green hair, because it looked good on her, or something....
I was kinda hoping for a bit more Spike in this story, having him be a bit more expressive towards Rarity, but for what it is, it's cute.
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About the ending though, i thought it didn't feel that rushed? (but then again i'm the guy that wrote it!). With Spike saying he finds her beautiful no matter what it thought it was good enough to imply that he likes her for her and not what she looks like.
You all feel I should redo the ending to make it longer?
4824583 No, no, I'm just saying that it felt too abrupt, and dissatisfying. How does Rarity respond? It honestly feels like a cliffhanger, when it should feel like a closing.
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Well, longer might work, or it might not. It just feels... Out Of Character, for a lot of characters....
4824610 I agree. I felt the ending could have been extended to include Rarity's reaction atleast if not more.
Yes! A looks don't matter story!
Pretty good
I wanted to see a bit more trepidation from Rarity before Spike arrived, and a bit more of her reaction afterwards. That said, nice work.
I thought this song fits.
Spike eyed Rarity closely "Ah Rarity?? you ain't trying to impress Snips dad are you?"
Spikey reach his claws around her neck & whispered "You silly mare after the Gala & Trenderhoof stuff, Watsup?"
This is really good. The writing is well done and the story was paced just right until the end. I know that you've received many, many comments saying that the end wasn't the best for pacing and cliffing purposes. Honestly, I can understand this sort of situation. But, if need be, next project, don't be afraid to spend a little more time on it. If it feels rushed, then add another problem. Sort of brainstorm other conflicts to narrow them down to get the best results.
I'm a big Sparity fan, to be honest. So my critique should be taken with a grain of salt.
Aw, it cuts off right at the good part :|
It's a nice start. Just...feels like a build-up to fall off with no conflict.
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"Rarity, you're always beautiful to me...but ya might wanna reevaluate this new style before you go out in public."
After some soul-searching, I finally found the actual source to this cute picture.
http://www.deviantart.com/art/The-kiss-273816717
By: Jack-A-Lynn.
Please add it to the source so that other people can find the image and proper credit can be given, as that is an adorable-looking Spike
4827034 One of my faves
I'll start out with the more technical stuff.
Nitpick, but I'm more used to seeing Spikey-Wikey with a hyphen — it makes more sense from a grammatical standpoint.
There should be a comma after "naturally".
These two should also be fused with a hyphen. You're probably missing a comma after "she knew it" as well.
That should definitely be at.
Again, hyphen.
You've likely missed a "was" there.
Also, it should be any day.
That should definitely read with.
Aside from all this, you seem to be all too eager to use semicolons and ellipses, which isn't good. Almost all of the time sentences could be merged with a simple comma, or separated with a full stop without changing the meaning.
There are also several awkward word choices here, for example:
It's pretty obvious that if Rarity opened a drawer and immediately grabbed a photo album, she took it out of the drawer; there's no need to restate that.
Anyway, on to the more general things.
The fic's pretty short; too short I think. There are two things lacking here: the ending and, eh, the beginning. There really isn't much of the former here — you didn't answer why Spike loves Rarity, all you did is show us that it's not for her looks. But there's no actual why, no aspects of her personality that he admires. We're left with only a part of the closure.
Now, "the beginning" is not so much the first few paragraphs, but rather what allows the story to actually happen — that is, Rarity has feelings for Spike. In most of my encounters with that, Rarity does feel something for Spike, but those feelings haven't yet taken form — she's either unaware of them, or is in denial. Here, Rarity just outright admits she loves Spike (not likes, but loves); and that's a pretty big statement to make. I can't buy it, because there's nothing here previously that established that she does, and it just comes out of left field. Having some sort of scene of Rarity thinking about Spike a day prior or something would be helpful, I think.
Aside from that, the story's alright, although I thought Twilight's lines were somewhat dry.
All in all, this one isn't bad, but there's nothing really good here.
Better ending, not doubt
I like this ending much better.
--Spade
Love it! Very cute story!
this was awesome one of my favorite fan fics it's just so heart warming u can't help but love this
I loved it IT'S JUST SO GOOD
Aww great story!
PORKY! You done good champ villain of the Mother Series. You done good
Looks aren’t everything. Also, spike must have a strong stomach.
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What do you mean by strong stomach?
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Because, I would have probably thrown up.