Barb has just turned eighteen and decides that she has waited long enough to finally tell Elusive how she feels about him; the only problem is she doesn’t know how to do it.
Wanting the moment to be perfect, she seeks help from Dusk Shine. The only pony, which she’s aware of, who knows about her crush and the two come up a plan to ensure the day goes off without a hitch, Barb will spend the day with Elusive before finally confessing to him at her party at the end of the day.
But sometimes… even the simplest of plans can have a few hitches.
Rule 63 Barb x Elusive shipfic.
Cover art done by the fantastic Ss2sonic.
Chapters (1)
While I'm not a fan of anthro or rule 63 Rarity, I gave you a chance thanks to how well you did with Chaotic Love.
And I was pleased with it. Good job, pal.
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Thank you, that means alot to me.
That was a good read. I'm glad I read it.
Short, sweet, and genderbent.
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Thank you.
The cover art is pretty good. Where can I meet this...Ss2sonic?
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Deviant Art.
http://ss2sonic.deviantart.com/
2849441 Neat. Hey, one question.
stallion or mare.
I loved that art peice, glad someone is using it already
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Would you believe me, if I said I found this again whilst browsing my faves on DA, and I wrote the story today?
2849463i would
Dang that cover art is adorable! Along with the rest of the story! Good job, pal!
That was pretty cute.
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I don't know what kind of question is that, but I'll go with mare.
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Thank yooou.
2849510
Thank you.
2849513 Are you a boy or girl? female or male?
2849556
Herp derp. Oops. I'm male.
2849561
Okay. Are you gay,strait, or bi?
2849569
Straight.
2849586 Okay, do you specifically only like shipping, or other things too?
;n; I would of seen this before it was out if only I had Skype... Stupid no wifi or laptop access
2849709
Miss you ;~;
2849717 I miss you too dude ;-; *mumbles angrily* fuckin family... Shitty 'holiday'... No wifi or laptop....
2849606
Jesus, leave the poor guy alone.
A ship fic? With both Rarity and Spike in Rule 63 mode....and it's actually well written?
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Thank you.
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It's safe this time? I can finally come out of my fallout bunker?
Edit: I've had bad experiences with rule 63 ships.
D'Aww.
I usually don't read R63, but when I do I read Mr. 101. Stay Classy.
Eh.
Okay, I can dig Adventures From the 63rd Dimension, and I do like Spike and Rarity (canon shipping away!) but this was... well.
It was pretty dislocating when everyone was discussing that they all knew that Elusive and Barb both liked each other. We see the whole thing from Barb's perspective (alright, it's in third person, but it follows Barb exclusively until the end), and whether or not Elusive loves her back is the big Damocles sword hanging over her the whole time, so having that resolved for the audience before it's resolved for Barb made the whole last third or so a bit pointless, or at the very least drawn out, especially when Elusive out and says "Yeah, I love her and everyone knows it". I can get that it's a badly-kept secret, but there's no tension if at least someone isn't in on it.
Also the whole "Oh bugger I've ruin'd Elusive's wonderful suit I must flee the scene of the crime" bit seemed contrived, or at the very least that it could've been resolved in a way that didn't feel so overblown, even within the context of the story. By that point we knew they were going to get together, so what was the point, other than just to get her and the big E outside?
But maybe that's just me.
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Awww, that was cute.
Its so cute ohmygosh X3
Rule 63, Rarity/Spike, AND Anthro? Has someone been peeking at my Christmas list? Definitely another for the read later list.
You know, for all the disgusting and terrible and probably illegal things I do on a minutely basis, it really is nice just to sit and read a cute little story like this.
I squeed myself.
An anthro story that doesn't involve awkward, painful-to-read sex?
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What a nice little story
anthro pls go
This was really sweet! I really liked this story!
This is the first completely r63 fic I've read and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Well this was extremely cute. You did a very good job with this.
Cute.
That was amazing I think you should write more romance if they all end up this good
I went into this because of that picture of Barb. I thought that was awesome and I went into this. I hate R6, but this was awesome. Good Job, and I hope to see more of your works.
Also I noticed this "Barb giggled as she Elusive wiped her eyes..." Just thought I would bring it to your attention.
'Twas rather feely
Gave me nice feels, the sort of feels reserved strictly for TwiPie.
One thing I could point out is Elusive's displayed demeanor. It was a little... flat, and I think that's something Rarity could never be. I mean, sure, he is in the midst of romance and confessions so i suppose he would be a little dreamy, but every action and piece of dialogue he performed made me think of Le Lenny Faise doing said actions or words.
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Not gunna lie, that made me laugh more then it should
, thanks for your feedback as well by the way.
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Thank you guys.
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You're welcome.
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No u.
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Thanks, and cheers for that spot with the error, I'll fix that in a momentino.
2853077
Thanks, and yeah I get what you mean, I was trying to play it so that Elusive didn't give to much away to her about his true feelings but I think I made a bit of a boo-boo on it overall.
Good job! Very cute little story.
2853408
Thank you.
Rule 63 Spike is cute.