Discord finds himself in need of a friend. He also knows the perfect dimension to find one. A dimension like no other, one with more Chaos and Disharmony. A dimension filled with chaotic "things" called humans. Lucky for Discord the only other thing that knows of this dimension wore a hat with jingle bells, and Discord hasn't seen that that guy in eight-teen years! Alas, when Discord goes to this dimension in search of a friend, he returns with something better... He returns with a son.
Featured on 2/3/2015 at 6:36! Thank you! :D
Chapters (9)
Nice story so far I love it
4761739 Thank you it mean's a lot to hear that! :)
You sir, have made probably one of the best Discord/Human Realm stories so far! Here, have a spike mustache.
And a derpy.
2 Derpies.
This has potential! I like it!
4761762 Really? You mean it! Why, thank you! :)
You REALLY have to keep this story runnin'!
4761806 I'll do my best! You have my word! :)
Where did you get the story title image picture?
I'm putting this on favorite dont mame me regret this, ok?
4761823 Here you go! [Link] :)
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Hey hey hey, will there be another chapter soon?
4762428 I'll start working on it in the morning so hopefully it'll be out soon. :)
I love what I see so far. This is something I keep my eye on. (Just hope it's won't discontinued early on like similar fanfic.)
Ugh! I can't get over how bad the grammar is! There are missing or extra commas in places, poor punctuation, poor spelling, and poor capitalization all over the place.
Uh... Dude, good idea, but you might want some grammar editor/s to review it. I'd do it myself, but I'm really busy right now.
4762711 All I'm positive of right now is that it's better than when I didn't have an editor... I'm horrible at grammar and the such. and I'm still thinking of getting a second editor, just because no one man can handle my terrible grammar! :P
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4763219 i806.photobucket.com/albums/yy349/luredin/Supernatural%20GIF%20Collection/deanholyshitsourceunknown.gif that's funny! I love it!
4763458 I've seen that movie... but I forget the name of it...
ooh, i hope you go with this and don't lost steam after 1-3 chapters. it's a fun idea!
I think you mean he realizes, not releases. In the description that is.
4764109 probably :P like I sad before I can't spell for shit...
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4762437 Cewl!
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That picture describes my feelings for the story.
I shalt be waiting.
I don't know why but I can't imagine the phonograph song as anything BUT This
4763103 that is what I'm sure many others are thinking as they read this.
didn't read yet, but heck, his abilities seem fun lol I volunteer to be your son lol
Actually is there a downside to his abilities? Crazyness? lol
Why am I even posting this! lol
Do go on, my dear chap.
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I thought it would be this.
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That song was a tad bit demented...
Thank you for showing me!
Make a 'Daughter of Chaos..."
4767211 oh god my sister's dad would torment her by singing this! I love this song. :)
Needs major editing... Lots of missing commas and many infractions of the "show, don't tell" rule... and that's just in the first 3 paragraphs.
I'll come back later when it's more presentable...
*flies away*
I hate to be a negative person but I can't see how this story is getting such good ratings from these people. The concept is somewhat new and felt rushed to me. Like, out of nowhere Discord decides to get a son, but I suppose his nature would allow quirks like that, if you can call it a quirk. The story did not immerse me, I felt like I was watching a play and not understanding what the theme was.
I'm just going to say, you really, really, really need an editor. Spelling is one of the things that I noticed, your usage of pronouns left me completely bored; rereading 'he' over and over again isn't really something what readers want. Your grammar did some sort of somersault at certain parts of the story, making me have to go and reread a part or two to make sure I wasn't seeing things. The way Discord did a lot of the things he did, also gave the air of a rushed story.
I'm not gonna lie I am interested in how Strife will affect Equestria but then again considering it's an alternate universe, if what the tag says is true, then Strife can go and kill everybody 'cause ya know, it's an alternate universe.
Oh well, all I'm trying to say is, get a good editor and pre-reader who know what they're doing and this story could come out all right.
P.S. God, I feel like the first critic to properly criticize this story... and it's on the featured box... how does that happen?
4771304 To be honest I don't know how it's getting such a good rating, I'm not a great writer. And the concept isn't new, and it is rushed(what can I say... I rush things). As well he didn't decided just to get a son, he went out to get a friend that loved chaos(Buts it seemed babies like chaos more) it was when he relied that the kid had his DNA he took it in, but it wasn't really clarified... But to be honest I know it needs an editor. and what's wrong with 'he' what did 'he' ever do to you 'he' right not any thing ELSE jk yeah it kind of does get repetitive. also my spelling its horrible I know. :( But the alternate universe tag is there because of Discord's "Not a Stargate". and I wish more people would criticize me! Like come ON! I'M CRAP!!! I want to get better at writing, so if people don't I'll never get better. So I thank you :D and finally what do you mean it's in the featured box? It's not there for me. and with aaaaaalllllll that say have a nice day!
4771667 It's on the side-feature bar, but maybe he just found it when it was featured.
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Sorry I meant side feature box, just a simple error on my part. But I have noticed this happen with other not so good stories. It's as if people just don't care and like then go on with their day, not realizing what they're doing. That's just me though.
4772600 I just try to write because I like to write... and I did see it in the side feature box but I thought you meant the 'big box' but when I posted it I relied my stupidity... I can be really thick at times. :(
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No, it's not your fault. It was my mistake and you took it as anyone else would. You're not stupid, but you do need to improve on your writing or get someone to help you.
Really liking this story so far. I don't know why there's people crying in the comments but don't let it stop you from continuing the story :)
4778255 it's okay, and I did get some one to help with all the problems! :D and now with him on this story, it will be 200% better :D the edited [E]chapter should be up now :) I think it's much better than the last.
4778914 the first chapter is all ready done it just need's some finale touches. :)
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I'll give it a read and criticize it... prepare your anus...
I must say, it is already infinitely better than before. The story feels much more stretched out than it's counterpart but still it was rather fast; and I noticed a silly mistake.
It just cuts right there with a period. Not sure if the editor did this or you did it but you might wanna fix it as soon as you can. The story has more of a flow to it, and kept me mildly interested. Discord's personality felt more refined to me, and his thoughts seemed more conjoined then what you had.
I gotta say your editor did a wonderful job on fixing this part, for it really irked me the last time I read it. I really hope you can improve upon your skills as a writer so your editor doesn't need to work so hard. So for now, you have earned my favorite but it will be your later performance that will deem whether or not I choose to like your story. Just keep in mind I will be watching and I will be criticizing.
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Yay, update! This story is amazing so far!
And your chapter name is Chapter !
Do you maybe mean Chapter 1?
Maybe you accidentally pressed 1 with shift..
Great story!