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Eclipse LunarSol


The chance that someone shares the same fucked up mind, same perversion, and same interests as me is so rare, that I'm actually using the internet to talk to the other people as desperate as me. - M

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(Cancelled)

Join Carrot Top and friends to find Derpy the perfect stallion before Hearts and Hooves Day! The requirements (In Carrot's view.)must be a stallion that finds her beautiful, her eyes lovely, and is fine dating a single mother. Will Carrot Top be able to find the perfect stallion in time? Or will Derpy never re-find love? Probably not.


Yes, you can request stallions for Derpy to date. Go ahead, review! Suggest a stallion! Explain why you (dis)liked! Be honest or I'll cut you! :pinkiecrazy:


Best chapter so far: Fifth Date
Stallions so far: Caramel, Big Mac, Soarin, Key Ring(OC), Music Within(OC)
List for possible next dates: Flam, Noteworthy, Braeburn, Spike, Pokey Peirce


If you want to make or introduce an OC that you want to date Derpy to me, simply PM me and we can continue from there.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 76 )
Comment posted by Eclipse LunarSol deleted Apr 15th, 2014

.......can't wait to read ?

4235560 Are you going to read or?. . .:unsuresweetie:

This... Has potential. I hope to see more!:twilightsmile:

~The lizardman would like to suggest Derpy dates Soarin'

You have my attention :twilightsmile:

Now the challenge is can you keep me interested? :rainbowdetermined2:

4235746 Good suggestion kind sir. He will be considered in a date eventually. If you're lucky, he will be the next. :ajsmug:

4235753 What can I do for you, is my question to you. :trixieshiftright:

4235763 Can we have the dates go a little bit longer so we can watch for some 'lulz'? And shouldn't Dinky have a bigger say in this since Ditzy is her mother? Other than that I would suggest a date with this stallion -----> :eeyup: Or for a change maybe -----> :raritywink: or perhaps her friend! :pinkiegasp: That is all.

4235777 Soarin and Big Mac. . .Okay! :twilightsmile:

4235801 I was expecting someone to suggest Carrot Top. :ajsmug: But this is aimed for a father for Dinky and colt love for Derpy, sadly. :ajsleepy:

4235862 I could see Carrot Top and she could play the father since that's been done in other ships. A mare playing the father role is common is lesbian ships. :twilightsheepish:

4235884 Just like RariJack and Flutterdash. :ajbemused: Is it wrong that I hate those ships? It is balanced solely on opposite attract which has gotten old quickly for me. :fluttershysad:

4235895 no! Everyone has a least favorite ship. Just DitzyTop or Carrot Doo sounds lovely.

4235918 When you think about it, it does. And it does have a following. I might do something in the future with a different story, but for now you're going to have a straight Derpy. :derpytongue2:

4235593 well duh. When has a story like yours ever been doubt of its quality and story plot?:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Those fangirls/fanmares. The horrors of any fantastic-looking male characters. I both envy and pity them.

Poor simple Big Mac. Cursed with a body and blessed in a simple mind.

Hmmm... You know, I always had the head canon that mares weren't much of a problem for Big Mac. Between his sister Applejack, who I'm sure is... Protective, and his seemingly dim exterior might put mares off. Plus the fact that its been stated in the show he doesn't leave the farm much, is really shy, and well,, as seen in the Hearts and Hooves day episode, is pretty awful at romance.


:eeyup:

4236767 Congrats for making me laugh. :rainbowlaugh:

One suggestion: Cheese Sandwich
Numero Dos: Thunderlane
Third: Discord (unless you accept the theory that Discord was the one who made her a single mother.... I'm not sure when it comes to Ditzy [or Derpy]. Haven't read that much theories on ponies like Derpy or Doctor Whooves)

4237610

Oh... Uh... I don't know how to read that statement...:twilightblush:

inb4 Carrot Top ends up being the one to date Derpy.

4238001 Sorry, but no matter how awesome that sounds, I'm going for a straight Derpy. Maybe later kind sir. Maybe. . .:fluttershysad:

You have a solid idea here. And with some work, this could be good.

But quite honestly, there's not enough here for me to like. You have rushed scenes, telly narration, multiple speakers per paragraph (ewwww), and plenty of other errors. But most of all, there's nothing there. We meet a character, get five hundred words to meet them, then watch them leave. It's not that funny (to me, at least), we don't even get to see most of the date--you know, the most important part of this story, and it all happens at breakneck pace.

Overall, leaving without a vote. It looks like you tried your best, but you need an editor and some practice.

I take my Derpy very seriously. You're not allowed to get by without constructive criticism. :raritywink:

4238365
What do you need Pinkie for, exactly?

4238374 It's a user that proofreaded for me once. He's good at what he does. :applejackunsure:

4238382
Ahh. I see. Well, good luck; I'm out.

I like the story so far. Moving onto the second chapter.

I suggest doctor whooves! I know many have done stories with those two but they're just too awesome!

4241081 Here's a little secret. . . . .He's going to be the one Derpy marries. :rainbowkiss:

I see that OC's are welcome...interesting...:duck:

4241342 That if someone suggested an OC depending on their personality this could lead to some...intense moments. (Not in a dirty way)

That.
Was AWESOME!
Please continue.
(next date Spike ftw)

I suggest Braeburn or maybe noteworthy.:derpytongue2:

4245829 Looks good so far. No mistakes as far as I could see.

Comment posted by Eclipse LunarSol deleted Apr 17th, 2014

Pokey Pierced! Plz...:derpytongue2:

4245798 Just updated a bit, check out the progress and tell me stuff.

Derpy looks adorable in that picture. :twilightsmile:

*added to read sooner (it's read later but at the top of the heap)*

I kind of wish you had gone in more detail with the actual fair. They played games; they ate food; they rode the rides Yeah. Everyone does that at the fair, kind of the whole points. It's the experience which you enjoy and you totally deny us [the readers] that by not expanding upon it in grand detail, instead opting to just say they had done such things. :facehoof:

I'm almost willing to throw my hat into the ring though . . . . :eeyup:

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