Maybe we can't help feeling scared alone! But we're all right here, together! We've got out friends close by! Now there's nothing to fear, because we are not alone! - Natsu Dragneel of Fairy Tail
Before Equestria was established unicorns, pegasi and earth ponies spent most of their time fighting. Now they live in relative harmony. Unfortunately a conspiracy is unfolding in Cloudsdale that could bring an unrelenting tide of darkness to Equestria. Can Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo figure out what is going on and stop it before it is too late?
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WOHOO first comment! Anywho this was awesome Rd, don't fret non about the grammar never really liked the thing anyways but I'm so looking forward to more Rainbow and Scoots time and you're doing an amazing job keep up the good work your story will probably get twice the views I did in no time
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4206948 Thanks so much!
Awesome story!
I like the Rainbow and Scootaloo sister thing too.
Aaaaw the flashback was so cute!!!
great job I'm looking forward to chapter 3!!
4212030 Thanks!
I'll try and work on Chapter 3 after school today 
4213346 whelp I'll be waiting for it!
Cool! I like the flashback, especially the end. It's so cute!
4215033 Thanks! Hopefully I captured RD's character right.
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Yeah, it's cute how you explained how she 'discovered' the Wonderbolts!
Ha ha thx! I was considering her discovering them by watching a Wonderbolts show or something but then I thought that everyone does that and wanted an original idea.
Aaww poor Ice Petals I love how she looks too I need to read more this story is so AWESOME! !!!
Great story!
I like how Ice Petals too.
Keep it up!
I feel bad for Ice Petal.
I liked this chapter a lot, though, it's great!
Thanks for the support Solar flare, Commander Rainstorm and dashybrony! I will hopefully get to work on Chapter 4 today but might not finish it because of homework and school, ugh! Remember in Testing, testing 1, 2, 3 where RD was like is it recess? That's what I'm thinking in most classes at school.
Yeah, I hate homework too.
BUT, no matter how long it takes you to upload the chapter, we will still be with you!
That was very well-written! I sure have enjoyed every moment of reading it ^^ And I can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work, you're doing great s far!
4231288 Awww thx! I will try hard and get another chapter uploaded soon I was planning on doing it today but homework changed that.
4231540 It's ok. You don't have to rush the things. Just take your time and I'm sure the result will be worth it. You're doing your best and that alone is enough for me to thank you.
Indeed, that was a bit too short, but it still is very well-writteen. However, if you have a problem with not revealing everything in just one chapter than maybe you should give your plot a second thought and see if you can add more things to describe. And no, I don't mean the landscapes or the weather. I mean the emothions, the plot actions and other stuff like that.
4236533 Thanks I really appreciate people actually telling me how I need to improve. I will try to go into more depth in my chapters.
4236544 You're doing a wonderful job so far. At least for being 13 years old. It's a pleasure to see there are talented ponies like you out there.
4236620 Thanks a bunch!
4236650 Keep up the good work! It's the best way to thank your thankful reader ^^
That was very short, but it was also a very touching chapter. Wait, now I'm the one acting sappy!
Anyway, keep up the good work!
Oh......that was so sweet
yes it was a little short but the feels....*sniff* I promised myself I wouldn't cry great job my friend
4238979 Thanks! I feel sorry for poor Dashie too.
4238604 Ha ha thx
4236653 Don't worry I will try my best and hope it doesn't disappoint you. I normally take a little break after I do each chapter to refresh my brain with new ideas. That way I find it easier to write the next chapter.
THis chapter was good, though a bit too... naive about how fast they've become friends.
4247560 Oh yup now that I go and reread it I get what you mean. Thanks for the review, there might not be a new chapter for a couple of days cause I'm going to be busy.
4249286 No worries about that. As I said before, take your time.
Oh, noooooo! Ice Petal! I'll just have to wait and see what happens next, if I don't go crazy first...
Oh no! Petals!! I can't wait to know what happens keep up the good work Rd
this was an amazing chapter
4249649 Thanks! I tried to make this one longer and add more description, thoughts ect.
Thanks to all you guys! You are such loyal reviewers! In fact you are the reason I motivate myself to update this story when I have spare time.
THE FEELS!
Still, amazing chapter!
Oh. My. God.
Ice Petal!
Now, that's quite a story! Even though it's sort of hard to imagine Rainbow Dash being defeated so quickly. Her reaction is usually much faster than that.
4271607 Thx! Yeah I thought something was off. Have you got any stories that you're going to write on here? If you do I will put some reviews on it.
4271662 I sure will... sooner or later. Just have no time for that at the moment.
That was.....SO AWESOME!!!! Rd this chapter is by far my favorite and has the most action which I'm a sucker for any good action stories
amazing job, your story sure is a heck of a lot better than mine lol keep up the fabulous work 
Great chapter, and don't worry about the pegasus anatomy, I don't know how it works either, and I suck at fight scenes too.
Awesome chapter!
I hope Rainbow is ok though...
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Yeah, me too
4296511 I'm gonna start the next chapter now but I can't guarantee that I will finish it today.
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It's alright, just do your best and we'll all love it!
It's okay, and the chapter wan't boring! I can't wait for more. What the hay is going on with Clousdale?!
On a slightly unrelated note, yay, Scoots and Dash bonding time!
You're doing a great job, though I can't help but notice your age through the way you're writing and the dialogs you describe. I suppose those dialogs sound a bit too blunt. And by that I mean that your characters are talking in a bit of an... unnatural way.
4346914 Thx I think I know what you're getting at. This is why I really like this website because most people are pretty supportive(like you) and it's really helpful with my writing skills. Anyways I think you mean the characters are too straightfoward? Right? Thanks for ze review.
4346931 This site is MEANT for fimfics, it's writers and readers. Trolls are not alowed.
That's correct, they are too straight forward sometimes, like if they don't know how to behave or hold back. That's what makes it sound... childish? There's a lot of feelings you lose due to that mistake. In other words, that mistake makes your fanfic lose... Da magik!