This is going to be a quality of quantity story. In this story dear child we watch as
A brony is sent to Equestria to complete a quest only he (and his friends) can handle.
These three friends are sucked into Equestria by mysterious means while playing Minecraft with a metric ton of intensive mods. Can they survive and thrive in this new land? Probably one is in creative mode.
The mods involved in this story are:
Hexxit, Tekkit, All of Flan's mod, Archimedes Ships, Rival Rebels, Assasin Craft, Food Plus, Mr.Cray's furniture mod, Orespawn, Custom Npc's, My Little Brony, and more.
Note:if I use something in the story that might not be in a mod just roll with it.
Chapters (7)
You need to put a space between your punctuation marks and the next word.
As 4831416 said, you need spaces in between each punctuation. It is very offputting and may earn you downvotes.
4831471 To add to this, your title and descriptions should never have errors. It's the first thing people should see, so polish it up! No excuses!
Minecraft, mods and ponies. If it didn't have such bad punctuation I would give it 10/10 but still I love all three of those things so
/10
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Grammar is atrocious, but still a good start to a possibly good story.
Thank you to everyone helping with my grammar I knew it would be atrocious
I just flabberghasted by the amount of people who seem to enjoy this story.Thank you and the next chapter is currently being worked on.So stay tuned
I agree with the general consensus here. When you use commas there should be a space after them. For example:
"Sometimes, I like to eat lots of pie."
When you finish a sentence, and use a period, you should put a space after said period. My example here is every sentence I wrote. Next, the advice about your title and description is, absolutely, true. You should NEVER have mistakes there. A title should have the first letter of every word capitalized except words like of or to. Punctuation spaces still apply. One more piece of advice, when you insert unnecessary words into your sentences you are best of just putting commas near them. Be careful though, to many commas are annoying. For example, you say:
"Get up your nap can wait."
The better form would be:
"Get up, your nap can wait"
Or, even better:
"Get up! Your nap can wait!"
This is just my two cents. Good job with your work, I hope you continue with your writing.
Edit: Also, spaces after quotation marks.
Yeah, this fic is awsome so far
Yes the chapter is small, but it did leave off on a good note. I look forward to the next chapter like always, farewell fieeeesh!
Oh, and you could afford to elaborate on the development of events, can you?
5003188 Could you clarify that?
5003325 What i mean is that is it possible to add more to major events, like when Celestia meet the human guards, i thought there would be more confrontation.
New chapter PLEASE........please...... I am now dead until that new chapter comes out or am I!!!!
Don't worry about it being too short
It's still good and in hope you keep it up
5299884 Thanks it always makes me happy when someone compliments my stories
Yup, it's still a good a chapter despite it being short.
Could've been longer.
But we don't really know what's going on with his life now do we?
YEAH!! All we can do is wait!!
Whatever...
I wish you could put out more chapters.... But nonetheless, great chapter!
again a good chapter but thats all not great not bad just good
Great chapters, and you master form is a pistol shrimp? Hah!!! Behold!! THE FORM OF THE MASTER MINER!!!
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Thats incredibly stupid.
BUT FUNNY!!!
Indeed.
5309244 I reply with ANIME STEVE JOBS i.imgur.com/dQg5YCj.jpg
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Enough said.
Good work mate I hope I keep my head cus a few snipers in tf2 are trying to get my head
Ars magica is good and so is thumcraft but you are the writer and to control fate of the chapters and fic.
That was fast
5482921 Sorry. But I've been quite sick recently so this is the best I could do.
5485019
Its fine you have your reason
Admittingly fasted-paced. but still a good chapter either way.
Noooooo Mothra whyyyyyyyyy
-----Minecraft crash report-----
//My bad
Time: 9/15/15 11:25 PM
Description: There was a severe problem during redstone ticking that has caused the game to fail
cpw.mods.fml.common.LoaderException: Java.lang.GGuJustBrokePhysicsExeption: A mod has attempted and succeeded to break reality.
A detailed walkthrough of the error, its code path and all known details is as follows:
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Have Fun in EQ. -RailcraftOfAllThings
So I'm sure everyone has noticed the gap between chapters and my work in general. Those of you who read my blogs will know why. But none of that matters, as I have returned after my long absence (from both Fimfiction and the MLP fandom in general) and will be finishing this story soon. The last chapter is my longest yet and I'm sure you all will like it. Also a good friend of mine Metuf is writing an absolutely fantastic Fallout Equestria fic that I'm helping with and I suggest you all go read it if you want a great story.