Inspired by The League of Humans Acting Villainous
A guy dresses up for an Expo as a character from an original story he and his friend are writing when he buys a pair of bracelets too good to be true from a sketchy booth, next thing he knows his costume is real, he's in Equestria and he's leaking molten metal from his pores! and the cherry on the top of this blunder sundae? both Celestia and Luna are out to gut him like a fish for a little language barrier issue he had over a thousand years ago.
Minor uses of foul language, and Russian words. Translations can be found in the Authors Note at the bottom of every chapter with Russian in it.
Chapters (3)
What? This just ruins the whole purpose of these cosplay fics. This is just.....Using cosplay fics as a poor excuse to mary sue.
I feel bad for whoever allowed this.
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Ummm...
Someone didn't do their research.
4020298 Ok so I can make a hyper omega super saiyan with a 13 inch dick and the ability to sleep with just about everything and I can write a cosplay fic of it therefore that makes it passable?
Seems legit.
I cringed.
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I am merely stating that the traits you listed were not exclusive to THIS story, but were in fact present in the story that lit this powder keg.
This doesn't "ruin" the purpose, its the original purpose. Some of the later fics showed glorious evolution away from this purpose, but you can't expect all of them to branch off so distantly, in fact many of them do not.
I am not defending THIS story, merely correcting your flawed perception of the genre. Now I'll actually read this fic, and likely talk all sorts of shit about it.
AAAAND so far in chapter 1, I've seen no... "13 inch dick and the ability to sleep with just about anything."
I admit the "ORIGINAL CHARACTER" is like something written by a teenager, but it so far has not been as rediculous as certian fics in this group I can name.
However the writer will have MANY chances to drop below their levels in later chapters. However nothing so far has caused the standards of the average LoHAV story to drop to unreasonable quality levels.
Why my eyes are even bleeding from grammar mistakes, nor is my head spinning from retardedly common trips to the past. So far its just... average without the amount of free praise some get just because of their chosen character.
4020744 You know what. You're right.
This thing aint my cup 'o tea, but i'll gladly change my vote.
One of the better new LoHAV fics I've seen lately, and an OC costume no less. You have my interest.
Crashing the coronation
I thank you sir
nice filler update
waiting for more
....You need to work on sentence structure...pronto.
4056281 Sentence structure, punctuation and layout have always been difficult for me. I'll try working on it and thanks for the advice.
4056747 It's mainly sentence structure and layout so far. Perhaps you might find it worth your while if you request an editor from the editor's group. I've forgotten their proper name, but 'The Equestrian Critic's Society' should be able to provide you with a link.
4020034 Isn't a Mary sue always good?
Great little installment. Is the next one coming sooner or naw?
4227404 I'm already working on the next chapter and it'll be up when it's ready. thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
I'm lost. I started to read this so I could incorporate it in my party crossover, but I'm completely lost
This is amazing that is all ????????????
This is awesome when will the next chapter be up
Meeeeeeeeh, was gonna wait till you hit 10k, but I can't wait anymore. The description just sounds too good!
My only gripe is that you have multiple persons quotes mashed into singular paragraphs. 'Proper' grammar dictates that for every new persons speech that enters the conversation, their speech should at least get its own new paragraph.
Otherwise it just comes off as messy.