Everyone has written stories where Trixie has encountered the Mane Six again, so here's me jumping on the bandwagon and missing, followed by breaking both my legs due to the bandwagon going in reverse, just to spite me.
Ahem. After the incident with the Ursa Minor, Trixie has ended up in Baltimare, working as a magician for a party planner service. As you can imagine, things are less than stellar for the Great and Powerful Trixie. Things only get worst when she discovers Twilight Sparkle and friends are in town for a "Best Unicorn" contest. Then things get 'worster' when Twilight attempts to make peace with the Great and Powerful Trixie.
Can Trixie survive the evil apologies, the malevolent offers of friendship, and the horrid and incomprehensible acts of generosity the Mane 6 give her? Let's find out.
Overall this story is interesting, though there are a few odd spelling mistakes, if you need a pre-reader I can give it a shot.
I like how you write Trixie, especially the part where she was just waiting outside the office door until her boss addressed her by her full title
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A promising start, for certain. I can't wait to see where it goes!
Oh my, what an evil wench! Luckily Trixie sees through that false offer!
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Spelling mistakes? Such as?
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She'd probably do it. Knowing her.
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Thank you.
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Indeed! You show them, Trixie! Show what happens to ponies who offer you friendship!
320052 I thought I saw some when I read it a while back, my mistake, I apologise.
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Ah, well no harm, no foul. Hope you enjoy the next chapters. No problem.
320354 Don't worry, as I said from what I've read, your story looks great, I'll keep an eye out for chapter 2.
Oh my, what a disturbingly evil and cunning plan that Twilight Sparkle invented! Made Trixie apologize.... accept pity food... even act nicer to neighsayers and her lowly servants with their pea-minds! Hold fast, Trixie, don't let them get you, I believe in you =3
Just so long as Trixie doesn't eat their pea-ness.
A fun read! Looking forward to how Trixie shows these usurpers a good what for!
Okay, first off: 322699 You really went there. I don't know whether to facepalm or applaud you for the Suburban Knights reference.
That aside, I'm finding myself enjoying this story. I fear, though, that it is only a matter of time before Trixie succumbs to their EVIL FRIENDSHIP.
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Are you talking to me or RT, because I was trying to make a Suburban Knights reference too.
Either way, thank you. We shall see. As we all know, Friendship is very powerful. As evident by all the men in their 20s watching the show.
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...I don't get it.
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She is doomed! Doomed to be friendshipped!
347114 It was directed at RT specifically, but applies to both of you. And I ultimately decided on applause.
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I'm glad. Truth be told, I always did prefer applause over facepalms.
Trixie wasn't abused and neglected as a child by her father after her mother died in a terrible accident involving magic which also explains her father's disapproval of her profession? I find this difficult to believe.
Ah yes, King Yemma and his mahogany(!) table
Loved that reference.
I also noticed a few typos here and there. Nothing too big, just thought you should know.
Pretty good. There's an odd error here:
"Are you sure, Trixie?" Twilight began, only to be interpreted by the bouncing, pink pony.
I think you meant 'interrupted'.
"...Also, it's a very fine material. Very expensive."
See? I was right. Her armor's finally starting to crack. Soon that wicked, terrible force known as friendship will fully take hold, and then all of Equestria is DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMED!
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Sorry about that, folks. My pre reader was asleep. I'll give it to her to recheck when I can.
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DOOM! Quick, someone play the Doom song!
There's a slight error here:
"Oh, very well. The Great and Powerful Trixie shall occupancy you."
I think you meant 'accompany'.
As always i am late to the party "don't ask" either way I thought this was a well written chapter (minus the mistakes that have already been pointed out.) I loved how Giggles totally called it "Hide the secret from others, before its revealed, but in the end everything turns out okay because real friends don't care about material things?" I will await you next chapter and hopefully not be a whole month when posting a comment.
team four ster refrence! yes just yes.
Nice chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Trixie's made a huge mistake...
Good story. Nice and touching and in character. And nice to see Twilight recognizing that her friends have their flaws too and that Trixie shouldn't be singled out. Too many fics from this period kept acting like Trixie's little fib was some enormous and unforgivable crime against nature.
......Is there something you'd like to share with the rest of the class?
Or is it just a typo?
Either way, good story.
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I'm leaning typo, but it's ok with me either way.
I got quite a chuckle out of it too. so, bonus!
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Yay for Trixie!
Rarity is playing to win, I see.
This is a neat little story. How did I find this again? Oh, right, I typed in random numbers in the URL until I found something.
Noo! She fell for the evil of Friendship!!!
Nice story, nice characterization of Trixie and character growth, really enjoyed reading it ^^
Yeah! Friendship!
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Bah
Backstories aren't what they used to be.
But at least in canon we have Single Mom, and Unknowingly a Father.