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All Spike the dragon ever seemed to want was mutual affections from the majestic Rarity, but is that starting to change? Once Spike finds out otherwise, he realizes that all he ever wanted was to not be a dragon. It would make his dreams, and Sweetie Belle's dreams, all come true.
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@Golden Age...
Okay, first off with the blatantly obvious technical writing problem... You need to fix your formatting. Your fan-fiction is fractured worse than a bottle of red wine smashed on a white linoleum floor. I could not read even half of it because it is all so fragmented.
I would advise fixing the technical format ASAP. If not, expect your Dislike count to rise sharply & quickly.
Hope this helps.
3495809 I know about the formatting
it's just that they wouldn't allow the story to be submitted unless I manually double-space all of the completed lines of dialogue and paragraphs of narration. I guess that's what messed up the formatting.
So the story's format has finally been fixed and it is now legible. Sorry about the wait, but it took me quite awhile to try to fix it. Enjoy!
ok so your story is good but the fact that the feel that they would be shunned for loving each other is kinda dumb. if they really liked each other they wouldent care what others think, spike should be proud of being a dragon and not be angry becuse of it. but all in all i like the story.
3505081 Thanks for the comment! Spike and Sweetie Belle feel that they will be shunned if they were to love eachother because they are two entirely different species, and they aren't quite sure how other ponies would see that kind of relationship. They do really like eachother but aren't sure of what to do because of it since neither have experience with a relationship (I'm assuming they're around 12-13 here). Thank you for the feedback.
Forbidden Love.
Sweetie needs to fight for her love!!!
If she loves Spike and no one doesn't want them to be together then I say buck them and fight for the POWER OF LOVE!!!!!!!
DRAMA!!!
Here's a question: Does Sweetie Belle really loves Spike as a dragon or a pony?
Yes! Best day ever!
I was totally expecting Spike to hop around with flower petals. And it's actually here.
So cute!!!!
AWWWWWE
it's just a bit hard on the eyes without the spacing. it's good story though.
I have a feeling that the potions effects are going to wear off eventually, and then its all going to come crashing down. Thats my guess, at least. Interested to see were this ends up. Also, the potions ingredients arent exceedingly challenging to gather, so Spike could just mass produce the potion. Though that probably wouldnt be healthy.
I am a bit uncomfortable with Twilight referring to the relationship between herself and Spike as being his Owner. She acts more like a Mother or Sister than a Master and it's never been discussed onscreen. I imagine she would be surprised if asked just what she sees herself as since she had to take care of Spike from when she was Sweetie's age to now. Is she a Caregiver? a Slave owner? a Pet owner?
(edit) will he suddenly have rights as a pony he did not before?
I ish it could be a open relationship but the story was so awesome!
A ferrony that was priceless!!!!!
That's lovely! I'm really interested to see where this story goes.
3512950
of course not! She loves him for ''who he is''
(insert Mary Sue forced Aesop here. Author, please don't let this story end with Spike going back to being a dragon but their relationship contuining as something like ''it doesn't matter what you look like yadie-yada'')
i love this story. yay, spike belle!
you said two fillies, filly means girl, spike is a boy, a colt if you will, foals would have been more appropriate, or just kids
I think Twilight is being a bit selfish. I mean, Twilight said that she owns Spike, that is selfish, and mean.
That was very selfish of Twilight. Very very selfish.
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You said it ten seconds ahead of me.
Cubbyhole?
Sweetie Belle will make the right choice.
Twilight!
Was that a Zelda referance that spike said?
3576277 I must say that I agree I may have made Twilight a little too harsh in certain parts, but keep in mind that her only intentions for transforming Spike into a pony were for experimenting with her new potion formulas. She did not want it to get out of hand like it did. Also remember that she's oblivious to the fact that Spike and Sweetie are in love.
3576953 it sure was, mah boi
oops.
Also, I find Twilight weird again. In the series she acts like a forgetful idiot since the end of season 3, but here she is even worse being more like a tyrannical slave owner. Bit strange, don't you think?
I thought I had finally come across a story where spike stayed a pony, I would really enjoy that rather than having him change back.
3578291 hold your horses, you don't know where this fic's going yet
3578948 okay then, I have a suggestion, make twilight harass spike with her suggestion of him changing back so much that he accidentally hurts twilight by bucking her, he then runs to canterlot where twilight finds him and attempts to change him back forcefully but celestia tells twilight that he should be able to decide for himself, and he chooses to stay a pony.
I personally hope Spike can stay a pony.
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Personal I don't judge storys based on how close the fic characters are to the show, but rather how interesting the charters are.
I want to like this story. I really do. But I literally can't read it, it's so bad.
Best story I've ever read in my life I hope to see a sequel in the future
I'm so glad Spike got to remain a pony! I really hope to see you write more like this, maybe a sequel?
You entertained me fine sir. I will continue on to read your future stories and so. I tip my furry hat to you, have a good day.
My favorite ship next to Spilight! Let's read on!
....... Ewww!!
One of the cutest SpikeBelle Fics I've read to date! I like how everypony was happy at the end. Plus it had my favorite Ship in it!
10 out of 10 for romance
10 out of 10 for slice of life
8 out of 10 for grammar
9 out of 10 for overall story
A like and a fave! Awesome job!
Owner...?
I Love The Ending. This is an overall good story. Looking forward to the next story.
This is now my favorite story.
I just love Spike
Belle