Sweetie Belle has a problem, a rather tall problem.
Thanks to my wonderful editors CartsBeforeHorses and MarineMarksman for helping me on the story.
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Howling Wolves
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Kind of reminds me of "The Little Engine That Could", what with the moral of never giving up when things look tough and all.
Other then that, not bad. Short, sweet, and to the point.
DO THE IMPOSSIBLE SEE THE INVISIBLE ROW ROW FIGHT THE POWAH
Great story, this. Like the previous commenter said, it's short, sweet and to the point. Moreover, it conveys a powerful message without being too corny or hamfisted about it. Have a moustache.
This was a great story, even though it was only one chapter. I'm definitely adding this to my favorites.
Why aren't I following you yet? I could have sworn I clicked that button weeks ago. Either way, this story was great!
Almost more fun than the law allows. AJ's laconic "You done?" brought major guffaws on this side of the screen.
3453126>>3453248 Thanks, I tried not to let the lesson feel to forced upon, which is a reason I cut the speech AJ was about to give. That and it would have been awkward for her to go on a tangent when the issue could be resolved quicker between the sisters.
3453258 Thanks
3453362 Somehow I have evaded your followers list, no more!
3453450 A little humor can go a long way in a story like this. Can't be too serious now
Should be 'bearing'. Also 'many-a-crash'.
Self-explanatory.
'but she, too, embraced'
Nice little story, has a bedtime story feeling to it.
hey anyone here
oh and good job with the story
Pleasant little one-shot.
Silver out!
There have been so many times when a speech was given that wasn't really needed. I am really glad that this isn't one of those times. I REALLY like how you let the actions of the characters speak volumes that would otherwise be undermined by a predictable speech. A short, to the point story. Just the way I like it.
3453779 Fixed! Wow, that was pretty bad for the word to even slip past me and the computer
Thanks
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3453850 Thanks, nice song as well
3454117 Still wondering about the speech, this situation just wasn't something that required it. Glad you thought it was still good without a long speech
3455362
im happy now...
Now this, this is damn cool!
3533500 Just how damn cool?
3533507
So damn cool that I wanna' know what inspired this coolness!
3533516 More or less just me thinking about how SB would realize how Scoots and AB would be stronger than her (considering that their both from more physically built races of ponies) and her wanting to prove that she could push herself as well. Seriously though, why do you seem to like this story I put out seemingly on a whim?
3533547
I read a lot of books like this as a child, and a few of them were really touching -- enough so that the whole idea of "Never giving up" (IE "The Little Engine That Could") has grown on me.
3533584 Well, thanks for the compliment.
In turn, you get a cookie.
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Yesh!
That was very good. I liked the ending a lot. It was very well written and easy to understand,
A very sweet, very nice little story.
What I liked about it is the scenario. It's a simple yet relatable scenario. It put Sweetie Belle into a situation where she feels like she can't do something. And then through the support of her friends she gains the courage to try. And I like the fact, that she didn't succeed. That may sound cruel, but I like the fact that she failed. I think it shows that we don't succeed every time we try. We fail and that we crash and we get hurt. I like that we are shown that and that we need to see Sweetie Belle pick herself up after failing.
The scene with Applejack and Rarity, I would have preferred longer and with more depth, but that's just me.
The bit at the end with Sweetie Belle line was just perfect. I loved that. It made us laugh and of course made us go "d'awww"
The descriptions at the beginning were really good. I loved them. You put so much emphases on what was going on in Sweetie Belle's mind and I loved that. Near the end, I felt the descriptions weren't as strong. Maybe that's because I felt that the beginning was so good, but I felt like, especially, in the Rarity- Applejack scene, the descriptions felt weaker. Maybe that's just one man's opinion.
All in all, a really sweet story. A good moral lesson. A really good story. Thanks for letting me read it. I hope to see more from you in the future. Take care.
3674748 Thanks for the criticism
While this might not have been my best work I'm still proud of it and it's nice to hear that you enjoyed it. I hope to have some new stuff out soon! 
3676951 I look forward to it.
I have added this story to my new recommendation group here.
4232999 Wow, thanks.
It's been a while since I've really written anything, I should get back into it again.
Should be "Apple Bloom's".
4748100 Fixed, thanks.
4748100 Actually that's an alternate spelling. It can be spelled both ways.
D'awwww!
5067358 Actually, I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be spelled like two separate words, the tag used for Apple Bloom is spelled like that, so I'm pretty sure that version is correct.