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  • Sunday
    A Project of Great Ambition

    Alright, guys. I've got a little favor to ask a few of you.

    Well, actually, a big favor.

    See, I've got a lot of stories, written over the course of two and a half years (and going). Naturally, there's a general incline of quality. But there are also several spots of... not quality. As someone who is trying to clean stuff up and improve himself for the future, I want to be able to learn from the past.

    But I can't do it all by myself, because I'm biased. So I'd like to ask any of you who would be willing to help me comb through my catalog to send me a PM, so I can talk to you in depth about what I want to get done: as a basic overview, I want you to help go through every one of my stories, and try and assess the quality. This WILL mean a lot of reading, and this WILL mean that a lot of these stories are going to be pretty bad.

    It's ambitious, but I think we can do it. I'll be selecting the first couple of people to respond, but seeing as this project is rather daunting and time consuming, I don't expect there to be a ton of takers. So if you DO want to help out with this, your chances of getting in are pretty damn high.

    For those of you who don't have time for that kind of thing, or just don't want to do it, it would be nice if you left me a comment about stories you did like, and what you felt went right, and about stories you didn't like, and what you felt went wrong.

    Feedback is very important to me, so I really appreciate you guys for taking time to do something like this, even if it's only five minutes to post about why "All That Sparkles" is a terrible, edgy crapfest :raritywink:

    16 comments · 73 views
  • Friday
    The Long Wait Is Over

    Yes, it's true! Some Love has updated! And it's a double whammy!

    Discord's Dinner Date doesn't go quite as planned, but all will be just fine with with a brief Intermission afterwards.

    On the off chance the five people who are left invested in this story care, I really appreciate you guys sticking it out over the past month. I've been having a bit of a rough time academically and mentally, and with things starting to clear up, I'm hoping I can return to a few updates a week. I've got all of school off next week, so I'll be sure to shoot off a couple of chapters then.

    Thanks, you guys. :heart:

    6 comments · 42 views
  • Wednesday
    Blog Bandwagon

    Tittysparkles and Rainbowbob have already posted about this

    but just to make sure that it reaches maximum awareness

    you know those Cards Against Equinity fics? Those Cards Against Humanity crossovers where some ponies are playing the game?

    Yeah

    Yeah don't write those, please

    I won't force you

    but they are not funny

    the humor in CaH comes from PLAYING the game. It comes from the spontaneous combinations and the collective of people trying to be as horrible as possible. It doesn't work when you write up a bunch of your own lame ones, and then shoehorn ponies playing them and having "super ebin reactions! XD"

    it's not funny. If you write them, then you're not funny.

    Please, if you do write one, at least tag it as a "tragedy" to properly reflect the situation

    40 comments · 223 views
  • 1w, 3d
    Update On Some Love

    Since we're coming close to a month without any updates, I figured I owed you some new on it.

    Newest chapter is about 2/3rds done, so hopefully it will be finished either tomorrow or the day after. It's going to be significantly darker than the story so far, and it might actually throw a few people. I dunno, I can't say too much or else spoilerz and all that jazz.

    After I get this done, I'm hoping I can return to daily or every-other-day updates for the fic. The development is going along nicely, and things are just starting to pick up. Plus, I've got a really neat double-layer climax, one in about 6 chapters, and the other towards the end of the fic, along with a lot of plot points and (some) answers to previously presented issues.

    Anyway, thanks for bearing with me guys. I'm glad you all like it so much.

    I actually feel proud of this fic, because it's something that's bigger than the stuff I usually write, and it's more of a commitment. I feel like... it's going someplace, you know?

    Whatever, I'm just gushing now. Stay tuned for the next update...

    5 comments · 54 views
  • 2w, 1d
    Where I Fell (Original Fiction)

    Since our school still thinks we're in seventh grade, we get vocabulary words in English and have to write sentences showing the meaning. While I don't really mind this, since learning is the fucking tightest thing ever, and I love being able to flaunt my large vocabulary around the plebs in my class, sometimes it does get tedious and boring. So last week, when we had Halloween-themed words, our teacher had us write a story. This was mine:


    Where I Fell

    As I ran down the hill, damp grass clinging to my shoes as I sped towards the bottom, I heard a bloodcurdling shriek. That's when I knew they got her.

    I slammed into a headstone when I reached the bottom, my leg splitting open with pain as I tumbled to the ground, rolling sideways. I clutched my bruising shin in agony.

    As I pulled myself to my feet, a limp now in my gait, I heard the disembodied voice that had followed us here boom over the land.

    "THREE."

    I stumbled forward, tears of mixed pain and frustration rolling down my cheeks. I felt as though a cauldron of rage was seething in my chest, threatening to bubble over at any moment. I couldn't shout, though—that's how they find you.

    As I walked between the gravestones, a repugnant smell filled my nostrils. I stepped through the chilling mist that hung above the ground, and nearly stumbled right into the source of the stench. A large pit, half full off partially decayed corpses, stood before me. The smell emanated from the pit, wafting up in hideous plumes.  I braved a glance downward, and immediately regretted doing so.

    There he was, looking just as I had seen him last, not but a half and hour ago. He was rent head to toe, but still recognizable. Just as I had seen him, moaning for help as he was dragged off into the underbrush.

    It was truly gruesome, the sight of a former friend like this. I turned away from the macabre scene, limping off in another direction.

    There was a distant scream.

    "TWO."

    I tried to limp faster, but the pain shot up my leg into my back, hammering on my spine. I grunted as I fell forward next to a large statue of an angel, moss laden and weather worn with age.

    I looked up from the mud and saw her, pressed up against the angel, evidently hiding from the ones who were undoubtedly coming from my direction, following me. She looked down at me, breathing heavily, and opened her mouth.

    "Who—"

    I shook my head slowly, grasping the side of the statue's base, pulling myself up. One of them appeared not a moment later, standing there in silence, obscured by the mist even though it was no more than five feet away from us.

    We both looked at it, shaking in silence, not even daring to breathe. I expected the specter of Death, scythe in hand, to come and snatch me away. But there was no specter, no wraith, no light, no nothing; just it, standing there, waiting for one of us to make the first move.

    It swept up to her, and eviscerated her just as I was no longer able to support myself, falling face first into the moist earth. I heard her gasp softly, followed by the voice that had always come after

    "ONE."

    It left me where I fell.

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Fluttershy tends to a bonsai tree. It's a nice, quiet distraction.

First Published
7th Oct 2013
Last Modified
7th Oct 2013
#1 · 59w, 18h ago · 3 · ·

You're really churning these out, aren't you?

And to think I'm only just finishing my second.

#2 · 59w, 18h ago · 2 · ·

This was quite nice.

Nice job, mate.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#3 · 59w, 18h ago · · ·

Dang.

#5 · 59w, 18h ago · · ·

How did it have 6 likes before it had any views?

#6 · 59w, 18h ago · · ·

Great story! Just ONE teensy little thing...

It's a nice, quite distraction.

Quiet*

#7 · 59w, 18h ago · 6 · ·

>>3311460 One day, I'm going to see that you forgot your signature, and I'm going to freak out.

#8 · 59w, 18h ago · 7 · ·

>>3311518

Hah.  Never going to happen.

~Skeeter The Lurker

BR
#9 · 59w, 18h ago · 1 · ·

you regidid a good job

#10 · 59w, 17h ago · 8 · ·

>>3311623 dat pun

>>3311494 I'm the god damn batman

#11 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·

Wow! Great story! I really can't find anything wrong with it except a few minor grammar mistakes.:twilightblush: Sorry, kind of a habit of mine to spot mistakes.

the warm breeze wrapping al around me, rustling my branches, small animals and insects keeping me company...”

"all"

a fat brown cockroach crawled past fluttershy meandering its way towards the tree.

"Fluttershy"

#12 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·

>>3311919 aight, fixed

#13 · 59w, 15h ago · 7 · ·

Regibest

Bestdar

Regultimate

Ultimatedar

#14 · 59w, 14h ago · 3 · ·

who the hell nuked ponyville:twilightangry2:

#16 · 59w, 13h ago · 1 · ·

Well done, man.

Well done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#17 · 59w, 13h ago · · ·

Cool.

#18 · 59w, 13h ago · 1 · ·

GET THAT SHIT FEATURED, MAN! GET THAT SHIT FEATURED!

#19 · 59w, 12h ago · 8 · ·

I was wondering why it was labelled "sad". I like how you kept the focus in the small ecosystem (or smecosystem, as I got from my dream [long story]), for the final reveal of everything else being burnt to cinders. Sort of like focusing on a small, vibrant square of a painting, then zooming out to see the entirety of the gray wasteland that surrounds it. Shows how perspective changes a lot.

#20 · 59w, 12h ago · 4 · ·

>>3313178 That's what I was going for, glad to see I succeeded! Thanks for the feedback.

#21 · 59w, 12h ago · 1 · ·

Excellent writing and descriptions of the animals. Emphasis on the word "small" sticks out in mind.

I also like that you don't really explain the world around her, but just suggest it. It lets your own interpretation do all the work.

#22 · 59w, 12h ago · · ·

Caught off guard by the ending, but still pretty nice.

#23 · 59w, 11h ago · · ·

I was a bit disappointed that the initial "watering" wasn't tears. :duck:

#24 · 59w, 11h ago · · ·

Well.... didn't see that ending coming. Was still a nice-ish story though.. kudos.

:rainbowderp::trollestia:

#25 · 59w, 10h ago · 4 · ·

WAT.

I saw "Sad" in the tags and was like "oh, someone dies?" and then it's like "EVERYONE ALREADY DIED."

Well ok then.

#26 · 59w, 9h ago · · ·

>>3313182

You got featured again, you sexy bastard.

#27 · 59w, 9h ago · 7 · ·

*reads the last paragraphs*

Wha... Buh.. Huh?

This...

Why...

They're all dead... :fluttercry:

#28 · 59w, 8h ago · 1 · ·

Don't do this to me, Regi. It's too feelsy for me to take.

#30 · 59w, 6h ago · 1 · ·

WHY CAN'T I CONTAIN ALL THESE TEARS? This is a deserved feature, my friend.

#31 · 59w, 4h ago · · ·

Hmm... I (think I) get what you were going for, and the execution is indeed superb. The ending, however, kind of falls short... :unsuresweetie:

It's not that we don't need the contrast, but it could have been more subtle. Perhaps it could have been present the whole time, in the background, as opposed to just putting a big "DUN DUN DUN"-moment at the end...

Otherwise, good work! :twilightsmile:

#32 · 59w, 3h ago · · ·

I can't say that I really got any feels off of the story, but it was still quite beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.

#33 · 59w, 2h ago · 1 · ·

Once in a while, I like to look for these simpler stories. Usually they are a treat to read, and this one fit that description perfectly. The way you described the ecosystem as a whole was well done.

I sensed the ending, as there was nothing notably sad until the last couple paragraphs. To echo what another person commented, the ending could of been more subtle. Although I did understand what you wanted to get across at the end, it felt over dramatic for a story which wasn't so until that very point.

Other than this, very well done. :twilightsmile:

DJRD

#34 · 59w, 30m ago · 3 · ·

...Now I know why this isn't a Slice of Life.

#35 · 59w, 13m ago · · ·

The bonsai tree lived for 300 years. Oh wait, that's botanically impossible. :pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

#36 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

...There is a large red print in the shape of a feel beginning to take form on my face.

Also,

a small pink butterfly that lay just abover her chest.

'abover', eh?

#37 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Only one problem:

The tree sat their, unmoving, untalking, for it was a tree.

I guess you actually meant "The tree sat there".

Aside from that this is the best story of yours I've read so far, kinda saw the ending coming but it still worked and it made me feel sorry for Fluttershy and all Equestria. It also reminded me of this:

#38 · 58w, 6d ago · 5 · ·

Great story. I loved that, despite all of the pleasant imagery for Fluttershy's ecosystem, there was always this lingering sense that something was wrong. The tiny hints thrown in, such as Fluttershy's comment about the sugar being "especially hard to find" really gave it that mood.  

I especially liked the part where you described the cockroach. It was really subtle, but it set up the "big reveal" perfectly. I was like, "Survived? Survived what?" and then when you showed us the ruins of Ponyville and Everfree, I was like, "Ohhh. That." It was a very nice touch.

The only thing I'd say in terms of criticism is what a few others have already said about the ending being a little heavy-handed. However, I do think the contrast between the in-your-faceness of the ending and the subtlety of the rest of the story works well, and I think you had the right idea.

Pretty damn good.      

#39 · 58w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Motherfucker, I'm depressed now.

#41 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Here come the feels... :fluttershyouch:

#42 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

:fluttershyouch: (kind of interesting how everyone writes about twilight ultimately outliving everypony else because of her immortality, and yet here, Fluttershy is the only element (and apart from my knowlege, the only pony perhaps) that remains.)

Its so sad :fluttershbad:

I loved it :fluttercry:

#43 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Beautifully excellent little story :pinkiesmile: Definitely deserved the featured spot

#44 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

All linked together after finishing the final part. Just a few almost dead leaves, sugar were so hard to find ? Even apple O.O? Things got burned, her cottage got burned, the bird almost died from burning, ruined Ponyvile. :rainbowderp:

Fluttershy must work dam hard to feed those animals, and herself :fluttercry:

Why :raritydespair: Why :raritycry:

#45 · 58w, 6d ago · 3 · 2 ·

Hmm. Very nice. Could've existed entirely independently of the ending, and wouldn't really have lost any of it's power.

That said, I kind of revel in the idea of a sugarbowl apocalypse, so that obvious attempt at a kick in the feels at the end was somewhat misplaced amongst thoughts of unstoppable monsters, glorious last stands and maybe a smidgeon of maniacal laughter.

Mayhaps you were aiming at a less jaded reader?

#46 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

What? My favorite pony and my favorite hobby together in the feature box? Hooray!

#47 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh. There's that empty spot in my insides again. :fluttershyouch:

#48 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

I got the sense that something bad had happened quickly but that got sooo sad sooo fast:fluttercry:

#49 · 58w, 6d ago · 5 · ·

>>3314622 I was basically trying to be as melodramatic as fuck, but I hear your criticisms. I shall implement them for future use. :twilightsmile:

>>3315090 Whoops, I shall fix that.

>>3315211 That too. Also, my favorite Sigur Rós song and one of my all-time favorite music videos. :rainbowkiss: I can't believe that I wrote this story WITHOUT that reference intentionally in mind.

>>3315236 Thank you very much! As stated in previous comment, I was trying to be melodramatic as fuck, as I am someone who enjoys sharp contrasts and sucker-punch moments in fanfiction.

>>3315676 Thank you!

>>3315944 We may never know.

>>3316051 >Sugarbowl apocalypse

explain yourself.

That aside, the only reason this was "sad" was because of the sharp contrast at the end, whereas I may one day expand this fic into a bigger story. I coulda gone with "dark", but that wouldn't have left people with the right feeling, and sad fits just as well.

#50 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·

>>3317948

Oh, sorry, I forgot to put this link in.

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