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  • Thursday
    Thank You

    Well, it's that one time of the year where I have to stop acting like a spoiled brat, so... let's see. What am I thankful for?

    I'm thankful to be a middle class cis white male in America...

    Okay, no, in all seriousness, I do have a few things to be thankful for:

    I'm thankful that I get to go to a nice school, no matter how hard I blow my grades.

    I'm thankful to live on a beautiful island, no matter how isolated and culturally plastic it is.

    I'm thankful for my beautiful girlfriend, no matter how far away she lives.

    And most of all, I'm thankful for you guys. And you guys don't get a conditional, because you all helped me make it in this crazy pony fanfiction world, and that means a lot to me. I know I mope and moan and flake and attention whore and all that stupid shit.

    But that just means I love you (?)

    Anyway, I'd thank each and every one of you individually, but

    that shit's hard with 1825 followers, man

    So just let it all be known that I really, really appreciate that you guys give me that little ego boost by following me and enjoying my stories

    happy spanksgiving

    oh, and something passive-aggressive about the slaughter of native americans and white guilt

    22 comments · 103 views
  • Tuesday
    Conundrum Time

    Since I'm a pretty perverted person, I've got a lot of fetishes.

    And I mean like

    A LOT.

    But up there in the top of the fetish soup are two favorites: pregnancy, and by extension, birthing.

    I've always been into the whole circle of life thing, from start to finish, and there's just something about shoving ten pounds of baby from a cooter that gets me going. Can't even explain it, it just is.

    My horrible, horrible debauchery aside, I recently wrote a birth story! My conundrum here is that, as someone who has watched a lot of birth videos, birth is actually kind of gross. So I write what I like to call "romanticized birth". It's not "sexy" birth as it were (like orgasmic birth or whatever), but it's not entirely realistic. It's in a middle ground, which is what I find attractive. So, like the wily bisexual, it can go both ways: it can either be like watching a birthing video to watch the miracle of life, or you can batter your boner to a baby being born.

    But even as I solved that problem, I've come across another problem. See, I have no issue insulting or offending people, but certain people get a pass. Mothers are one of them, at least where birth is involved. I know a lot of terrible moms, or mothers who are terrible people, or a combination of the two, but there is something admirable about ensuring the continuation of the human race by going into sometimes DAYS of some of the worst pain imaginable.

    So I kind of don't want to fluster the flimbobs of any mothers out there (and I know at least three who are following me).

    On the other hand, I have 3k of a pretty alright story.

    So what I guess I'm asking is: would any of you WANT to see this story? I want to know if this is worth the risk.

    And yeah, I know what some of you are thinking. Just get it over with already and call me V.D., because I'm one flaky pussy.

    30 comments · 124 views
  • Sunday
    A Project of Great Ambition

    Alright, guys. I've got a little favor to ask a few of you.

    Well, actually, a big favor.

    See, I've got a lot of stories, written over the course of two and a half years (and going). Naturally, there's a general incline of quality. But there are also several spots of... not quality. As someone who is trying to clean stuff up and improve himself for the future, I want to be able to learn from the past.

    But I can't do it all by myself, because I'm biased. So I'd like to ask any of you who would be willing to help me comb through my catalog to send me a PM, so I can talk to you in depth about what I want to get done: as a basic overview, I want you to help go through every one of my stories, and try and assess the quality. This WILL mean a lot of reading, and this WILL mean that a lot of these stories are going to be pretty bad.

    It's ambitious, but I think we can do it. I'll be selecting the first couple of people to respond, but seeing as this project is rather daunting and time consuming, I don't expect there to be a ton of takers. So if you DO want to help out with this, your chances of getting in are pretty damn high.

    For those of you who don't have time for that kind of thing, or just don't want to do it, it would be nice if you left me a comment about stories you did like, and what you felt went right, and about stories you didn't like, and what you felt went wrong.

    Feedback is very important to me, so I really appreciate you guys for taking time to do something like this, even if it's only five minutes to post about why "All That Sparkles" is a terrible, edgy crapfest :raritywink:

    21 comments · 101 views
  • 1w, 13h
    The Long Wait Is Over

    Yes, it's true! Some Love has updated! And it's a double whammy!

    Discord's Dinner Date doesn't go quite as planned, but all will be just fine with with a brief Intermission afterwards.

    On the off chance the five people who are left invested in this story care, I really appreciate you guys sticking it out over the past month. I've been having a bit of a rough time academically and mentally, and with things starting to clear up, I'm hoping I can return to a few updates a week. I've got all of school off next week, so I'll be sure to shoot off a couple of chapters then.

    Thanks, you guys. :heart:

    6 comments · 47 views
  • 1w, 2d
    Blog Bandwagon

    Tittysparkles and Rainbowbob have already posted about this

    but just to make sure that it reaches maximum awareness

    you know those Cards Against Equinity fics? Those Cards Against Humanity crossovers where some ponies are playing the game?

    Yeah

    Yeah don't write those, please

    I won't force you

    but they are not funny

    the humor in CaH comes from PLAYING the game. It comes from the spontaneous combinations and the collective of people trying to be as horrible as possible. It doesn't work when you write up a bunch of your own lame ones, and then shoehorn ponies playing them and having "super ebin reactions! XD"

    it's not funny. If you write them, then you're not funny.

    Please, if you do write one, at least tag it as a "tragedy" to properly reflect the situation

    40 comments · 241 views
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Fluttershy tends to a bonsai tree. It's a nice, quiet distraction.

First Published
7th Oct 2013
Last Modified
7th Oct 2013
#1 · 59w, 4d ago · 3 · ·

You're really churning these out, aren't you?

And to think I'm only just finishing my second.

#2 · 59w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

This was quite nice.

Nice job, mate.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#3 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Dang.

#5 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

How did it have 6 likes before it had any views?

#6 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Great story! Just ONE teensy little thing...

It's a nice, quite distraction.

Quiet*

#7 · 59w, 4d ago · 6 · ·

>>3311460 One day, I'm going to see that you forgot your signature, and I'm going to freak out.

#8 · 59w, 4d ago · 7 · ·

>>3311518

Hah.  Never going to happen.

~Skeeter The Lurker

BR
#9 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

you regidid a good job

#10 · 59w, 4d ago · 8 · ·

>>3311623 dat pun

>>3311494 I'm the god damn batman

#11 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Wow! Great story! I really can't find anything wrong with it except a few minor grammar mistakes.:twilightblush: Sorry, kind of a habit of mine to spot mistakes.

the warm breeze wrapping al around me, rustling my branches, small animals and insects keeping me company...”

"all"

a fat brown cockroach crawled past fluttershy meandering its way towards the tree.

"Fluttershy"

#12 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

>>3311919 aight, fixed

#13 · 59w, 4d ago · 7 · ·

Regibest

Bestdar

Regultimate

Ultimatedar

#14 · 59w, 4d ago · 3 · ·

who the hell nuked ponyville:twilightangry2:

#16 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Well done, man.

Well done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#17 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Cool.

#18 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

GET THAT SHIT FEATURED, MAN! GET THAT SHIT FEATURED!

#19 · 59w, 4d ago · 8 · ·

I was wondering why it was labelled "sad". I like how you kept the focus in the small ecosystem (or smecosystem, as I got from my dream [long story]), for the final reveal of everything else being burnt to cinders. Sort of like focusing on a small, vibrant square of a painting, then zooming out to see the entirety of the gray wasteland that surrounds it. Shows how perspective changes a lot.

#20 · 59w, 4d ago · 4 · ·

>>3313178 That's what I was going for, glad to see I succeeded! Thanks for the feedback.

#21 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Excellent writing and descriptions of the animals. Emphasis on the word "small" sticks out in mind.

I also like that you don't really explain the world around her, but just suggest it. It lets your own interpretation do all the work.

#22 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Caught off guard by the ending, but still pretty nice.

#23 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

I was a bit disappointed that the initial "watering" wasn't tears. :duck:

#24 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Well.... didn't see that ending coming. Was still a nice-ish story though.. kudos.

:rainbowderp::trollestia:

#25 · 59w, 4d ago · 4 · ·

WAT.

I saw "Sad" in the tags and was like "oh, someone dies?" and then it's like "EVERYONE ALREADY DIED."

Well ok then.

#26 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

>>3313182

You got featured again, you sexy bastard.

#27 · 59w, 4d ago · 7 · ·

*reads the last paragraphs*

Wha... Buh.. Huh?

This...

Why...

They're all dead... :fluttercry:

#28 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Don't do this to me, Regi. It's too feelsy for me to take.

#30 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

WHY CAN'T I CONTAIN ALL THESE TEARS? This is a deserved feature, my friend.

#31 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Hmm... I (think I) get what you were going for, and the execution is indeed superb. The ending, however, kind of falls short... :unsuresweetie:

It's not that we don't need the contrast, but it could have been more subtle. Perhaps it could have been present the whole time, in the background, as opposed to just putting a big "DUN DUN DUN"-moment at the end...

Otherwise, good work! :twilightsmile:

#32 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

I can't say that I really got any feels off of the story, but it was still quite beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.

#33 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Once in a while, I like to look for these simpler stories. Usually they are a treat to read, and this one fit that description perfectly. The way you described the ecosystem as a whole was well done.

I sensed the ending, as there was nothing notably sad until the last couple paragraphs. To echo what another person commented, the ending could of been more subtle. Although I did understand what you wanted to get across at the end, it felt over dramatic for a story which wasn't so until that very point.

Other than this, very well done. :twilightsmile:

DJRD

#34 · 59w, 4d ago · 3 · ·

...Now I know why this isn't a Slice of Life.

#35 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

The bonsai tree lived for 300 years. Oh wait, that's botanically impossible. :pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

#36 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

...There is a large red print in the shape of a feel beginning to take form on my face.

Also,

a small pink butterfly that lay just abover her chest.

'abover', eh?

#37 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Only one problem:

The tree sat their, unmoving, untalking, for it was a tree.

I guess you actually meant "The tree sat there".

Aside from that this is the best story of yours I've read so far, kinda saw the ending coming but it still worked and it made me feel sorry for Fluttershy and all Equestria. It also reminded me of this:

#38 · 59w, 4d ago · 5 · ·

Great story. I loved that, despite all of the pleasant imagery for Fluttershy's ecosystem, there was always this lingering sense that something was wrong. The tiny hints thrown in, such as Fluttershy's comment about the sugar being "especially hard to find" really gave it that mood.  

I especially liked the part where you described the cockroach. It was really subtle, but it set up the "big reveal" perfectly. I was like, "Survived? Survived what?" and then when you showed us the ruins of Ponyville and Everfree, I was like, "Ohhh. That." It was a very nice touch.

The only thing I'd say in terms of criticism is what a few others have already said about the ending being a little heavy-handed. However, I do think the contrast between the in-your-faceness of the ending and the subtlety of the rest of the story works well, and I think you had the right idea.

Pretty damn good.      

#39 · 59w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Motherfucker, I'm depressed now.

#41 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

Here come the feels... :fluttershyouch:

#42 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

:fluttershyouch: (kind of interesting how everyone writes about twilight ultimately outliving everypony else because of her immortality, and yet here, Fluttershy is the only element (and apart from my knowlege, the only pony perhaps) that remains.)

Its so sad :fluttershbad:

I loved it :fluttercry:

#43 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

Beautifully excellent little story :pinkiesmile: Definitely deserved the featured spot

#44 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

All linked together after finishing the final part. Just a few almost dead leaves, sugar were so hard to find ? Even apple O.O? Things got burned, her cottage got burned, the bird almost died from burning, ruined Ponyvile. :rainbowderp:

Fluttershy must work dam hard to feed those animals, and herself :fluttercry:

Why :raritydespair: Why :raritycry:

#45 · 59w, 3d ago · 3 · 2 ·

Hmm. Very nice. Could've existed entirely independently of the ending, and wouldn't really have lost any of it's power.

That said, I kind of revel in the idea of a sugarbowl apocalypse, so that obvious attempt at a kick in the feels at the end was somewhat misplaced amongst thoughts of unstoppable monsters, glorious last stands and maybe a smidgeon of maniacal laughter.

Mayhaps you were aiming at a less jaded reader?

#46 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

What? My favorite pony and my favorite hobby together in the feature box? Hooray!

#47 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh. There's that empty spot in my insides again. :fluttershyouch:

#48 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

I got the sense that something bad had happened quickly but that got sooo sad sooo fast:fluttercry:

#49 · 59w, 3d ago · 5 · ·

>>3314622 I was basically trying to be as melodramatic as fuck, but I hear your criticisms. I shall implement them for future use. :twilightsmile:

>>3315090 Whoops, I shall fix that.

>>3315211 That too. Also, my favorite Sigur Rós song and one of my all-time favorite music videos. :rainbowkiss: I can't believe that I wrote this story WITHOUT that reference intentionally in mind.

>>3315236 Thank you very much! As stated in previous comment, I was trying to be melodramatic as fuck, as I am someone who enjoys sharp contrasts and sucker-punch moments in fanfiction.

>>3315676 Thank you!

>>3315944 We may never know.

>>3316051 >Sugarbowl apocalypse

explain yourself.

That aside, the only reason this was "sad" was because of the sharp contrast at the end, whereas I may one day expand this fic into a bigger story. I coulda gone with "dark", but that wouldn't have left people with the right feeling, and sad fits just as well.

#50 · 59w, 3d ago · · ·

>>3317948

Oh, sorry, I forgot to put this link in.

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