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yes, nothing teaches better than the school of hard nocks, location, earth or Gaia
As a trixie fan I found this chapter incredibly enjoyable and the fact that you're implying trixie will become an alicorn is icing on the cake.
3359248Thanks! I have been really trying hard to get her personality in this story right. I know it’s not the best, but I am glad you’re enjoying it!
the pacing started out acceptable but this is just getting more riddiculous and riddiculous. Take some time for character interaction and throw in some details. You dont have to move so quickly.
past tense of cast is in fact cast not casted
believe gaia
3384474Good eye! Made the correction.
3384334You are absolutely right thanks for the advice; however this story is for the most part completed. I will though apply it in future writings. Thanks again!
I'm excited, are you excited, cuz' i'm excited, i've never been this excited before
>>I'm excited!
Dissapointed trixie lost, but since it seemed planed for an endgame it works
I like this story.
Your Archaic English for Luna could use some work with grammar, but other than that everything's fine.