• Published 12th Sep 2013
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The Day Spike's Heart Broke - Diablomuerte2



Spike hears that Rarity is moving away and that makes him worried. He tries to convince her to stay or take him along, with one shot left can he do it?

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Don't Leave!

Don't Leave!

A broken heart is worse than a hex placed by a mad sorceress. Once a heart is broken, it isn't easily repaired, and with a broken heart, no creature can live life to the fullest. The heart is the body's most vital muscle, and like all muscles, if broken, it's useless. So what happens to a dragon when his heart suffers irreparable damage?

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It was a cold and morbid day when Spike had left the library in hopes he could stop his one true love from leaving Ponyville. His goal was of the utmost importance and he couldn't let any doubts prevent him from completing it. His failure would mean the acceptance of his innermost fears that plagued him in his darkest of dreams.

Spike was waging war against fate and was attempting to win, his mind was set on achieving success in the most fruitless of endeavors. His feet never have moved as fast like they did on that day, it was almost as if he summoned Rainbow Dash's speed in order to reach Rarity's home in time.

When he arrived at the desired location, he began frantically knocking on the wooden barrier that stood between him and his future. The cursed door, so flimsy and breakable, it was nothing in comparison to the rock solid determination the baby dragon had. The sounds of hooves making contact with the ground had slowly echoed in his mind as it grew louder with each passing moment.

At last! The door opened and yet no one spoke. Spike's eyes were busy flooding the ground beneath him with the tears that his heart had created. When he noticed the silence became stagnant, his heart started pounding louder as the imminent argument would slowly take place.

"Why are you leaving me like this Rarity?"

"Spike, you knew this day would come... I am sorry you didn't grow out of your crush, but it's time you realized that you're fantasy has to end."

"Fantasy? I love-"

"No Spike, you don't love me. I am sorry, but you can't know what love is."

"I do!"

"Spike, listen dar-"

"No, you listen... when I first met you, I thought it was just a crush... over time I came to realize it wasn't a crush, it was love at first sight."

"Spike... I never felt that way about you... and you know I can't feel that way about you ever... it's not something I could accept when I am destined for something greater."

"What, your career in fashion, or that dream of being married to a prince?"

"...."

"Rarity, why can't you just give me a chance?"

"Spike, I am not attracted to you... you have scales, claws, fins, and that isn't what I want in a husband. I am attracted to stallions, not dragons."

"Then why... "

"I didn't mean to use you Spike, had I known you were this into me I would have done something about it sooner."

"Were you that full of yourself? The truth was right in front of you the whole time."

"Spike... don't make this any harder... I already feel bad, and I need to get going or I will miss my train."

"The train... Rarity, I can't let you go... because if you go... It will crush me."

"Spike... please stop... this is hurting me, I can't take this... you think it's easy for me to just pack up and leave everything? I had to make the decision to leave all my friends Spike, and now you are trying to make me feel bad for leaving you when I was never yours? Spike, I never loved you, and I never would... I was hoping to avoid this conversation so I wouldn't cry on the train."

"Rarity, when you get on that train, just know it was at the cost of my heart."

"...."

"Good bye Rarity... "

The dragon's goodbye wasn't returned, his heart had slowly broken over the course of the conversation. He had ran aimlessly while tears cascaded down his face. His frantic movements and deep pain only served to hinder his progress, it seemed he was heading nowhere at the speed of fast.

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Spike's failure drove into his heart and, with no safety net, it shattered into a million pieces. He was in the library, crying his eyes out, while the mare who hatched him tried consoling him.

"Spike... I am so sorry."

"Twilight... am I worthless?"

"No! Spike, never think that."

"Then why..."

"Spike... sometimes things happen in life that don’t make sense... or just don't go as planned. I wish I could help you Spike, but I can't fix this... even with all my power I can't fix this..."

"Twilight..."

"Yes Spike?"

"You are fixing it, by just being here for me."

Twilight held Spike close to her, her hooves wrapped tight around his body. She was trying her hardest to help her baby dragon as much as she could. She had shed some tears because a piece of her heart broke that day when she had seen how miserable Spike was.

"Spike... just know that no matter what happens in life... I love you Spike."

"Twilight... thanks... you don't know how much that means to me right now."

Spike's tears continued dampening Twilight's coat as he let his sorrow bleed out from his eyes. His heart, while broken ,was still able to feel the love that was always there, and that would never fade. He may have lost his heart that day, but he gained perspective. His wounds would take time to mend, but his recovery would be hastened by somepony who truly cared about him like no other pony could.

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Rarity was on the train looking through her belongings, she had seemingly misplaced something of importance to her and wanted to look at it badly. She kept digging through her stuff and nothing she pulled out had given her the peace of mind she hoped to seek.

She finally found what she was seeking amidst the clutter of her artifacts. The fire heart ruby that she had gained so long ago from her dear friend Spike. She placed a hoof on it and started sobbing, her eyes pouring out the regret she had for being so cruel to the loving dragon.

She knew she could never love him the way he wanted to be loved, it didn't make the pain any less unbearable. She stroked the gift a bit while her tears continued assaulting her cheeks, the stinging sensation grew with each tear shed. She finally put the fire heart ruby away, and with it; a piece of her own heart.

Author's Note:

A sad fic I wrote up just because I felt like it. I had no idea I would have been affected by it. Anyways like if you do and if you don't meh.

Comments ( 56 )

3191312 Yeah I actually got sad writing it. :fluttercry:

Dammit Rarity:applecry::fluttercry::pinkiesad2:

This is a sad story and did Rarity actually leave Ponyville and her friends without saying goodbye to them

I hope Rarity suffers a thousand dick punches too the face! (That made no fucking sense whatsoever and I don't give a shit!) I must now change my profile pic.

3191337
We meet once more. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Rarity how could you?
:twilightangry2::flutterrage:

3191335 It's open to interpretation on that end. It could be read as she did say bye to all but spike to avoid the scene or it could be implied she didn't say bye to anyone at all.

I didn't want any definite scenarios since I was trying something out here.

Even the ending could be interpreted as wished.

It leaves the question. Did Rarity love him?

The fire heart ruby and the last line could imply so. I am leaving it all to the reader's imagination.

:moustache:

3191362 ok and we will never know if Rarity love him

3191385 No we won't because I didn't plan on making a statement about it. :moustache:

3191351 Dude, were always meeting each other in this site.

3191351>>3191337 It's good to see you my fellow Spike fanatics.:pinkiehappy::moustache:

This the main reason why I hate Sparity. He does all that stuff for her and yet gets nothing in return. If she ain't interested she should at least tell him.:flutterrage::twilightangry2:

I just did a reading of your story for YouTube. I hope you don't mind. I really like this story.

3191588 She could if she had a clue or cared. You forget Rarity is the only pony in canon who is known for generally not giving a buck about anything that doesn't concern her, which adds to her appeal.

She is like that popular girl in school who is always a bitch and yet everyone wants her number. :raritydespair:

3191605 Loving it so far <3

Also thanks for pointing out that mistake. I switched it from know to knew.

Well this was new

3191607 I use to love that kind of girl in high school; course, where I went to school at, they were bops.

3191631 Yeah well that is Rarity's appeal and that is the funniest part about all this, she isn't due for any change in the show and yet she is made the most appealing. It's like they are saying the pretty ones are usually the most heartless :( :fluttercry:

My Sparity feels! Why must you torture it so! :raritydespair: At least you left a little interpretation in the end so I can think of a happy scenario. :pinkiesad2:

3191669 I love using my Feels Cannon (TM) I can't help it.

3191605 I liked it :pinkiehappy:. I have always wanted to do readings, but I've never managed to pull it off. Well done :twilightsmile:

I do like this story, but Rarity, Y U NO LIKE SPIKE!? :fluttercry:
Then again I do see where Rarity is coming from, claws that would scare me.

3192081 Glad you like the story. :moustache:

Well Raity I just wish that you never find the slightest glimmer of happiness in this life nor in the next one.

Very dumb Whority. Everything Spike did for her and she didn't know he loved her that much? And she never felt anything because of what he looks like on the outside? Hope she gets raped and murdered.

3191588
Rarity deserves a back claw to the face.

3192585>>3192621>>3193272 Whoa such Rarity hate... I kinda find it sad on the account everyone is just looking at this on one side. :raritycry:

She wasn't smiling in the end of the fic either you know. She had to leave everything behind to start a new. Sure she was cruel to spike but it was for he could hate her and move on. :raritydespair:

So while Spike was being told off for his own good I guess it just came across as mindless hatred towards him and if so I am sorry but that wasn't the message of the story.:ajsmug:

The story was about how eventually it will be possible (since it hasn't happened canon) that Spike will be rejected through circumstance or confrontation.:moustache:

So while I can understand the people backing Spike, please let's not just hate on Rarity for being ... Rarity.:raritywink:

Or ignore me and keep hating on Rarity it bothers me none :trollestia:

3193346 Nah, Rarity is being helluvah selfish in this story. She's making the decision to leave all her friends for fame and fortune and callously rejects Spike again for what is honestly a rather petty and selfish reason. She used him for three years while being fully aware of his crush and then doesn't even try to mince her words when she shuts him down. It takes her all of a paragraph to put into words how little three years of emotions meant to her. +1 total bastard :duck:

AL

D': pooor little guy

3193736 I agree she is being selfish but that is Rarity for you. While it's her greatest character flaw it also is what sets her apart from the group. Her element is generosity and yet she is the most selfish pony this side of Equestria. That is why I love her character she is trolling the mane 6 and fate by just being her and also having been granted such a prestigious title.

3194208 I do agree it seems IC. And I do enjoy her flaws. But I was merely stating why there's so much hate for her here. And explaining why it isn't unjustified.

3194211 Hence why I said I agree with you. I didn't like her much while writing it. I honestly felt sad while writing it and was like ... "Why am I doing this?"

3194218 Hmm. That's not often something you want to feel when writing. It was good, though the punctuation needs some work.

3194220 Oh are there errors... I might have to fire my editor then >.> I just hate not having someone I can have on hoof to be there to edit my stories and so I use what editor prowess is available to me XD

3194224 Well, tell them to brush up on their comma usage knowledge. But don't fire them. That's just cold. :fluttershyouch:

3194231 I never said I was a good pony... hell most of my stories are about ponies having lesbian sex... I have no soul...

Translation: I wasn't really going to fire them just being random.

Comment posted by Snivypony deleted Sep 13th, 2013

3195157 Sorry I just prefer an ending where the tho end up together.

3195165 That's fine but ... no. :trollestia:

3195220 Well let's ask what everyone else thinks of my ending.

3195226 Alright lets ask them... So readers do you think that my nice heartfelt sad fic should end with an anime cat thingy reuniting the non lovers and making them magically fall in love? Or does my open to interpretation ending fit well?

Comment posted by Snivypony deleted Sep 13th, 2013

On the bright side, Rarity just made Spike available to the entire female population of Ponyville. Soon as morning comes, he's gonna have to contend with wave after wave of female suitors! :ajsmug::rainbowkiss::pinkiesmile:

3212735 Assuming Spike has suitors and that his heart break would be easily overcame...:facehoof:

I don't mind a sad story, in fact I find them very refreshing, I just feel like it didn't really do Rarity justice. It's believable, but I somehow wish they'd had more time to talk. I would still be find with it ending the way it did, it just seemed rushed. Rarity cares about her friends more then anything else, even when that means she has to suffer through something that drives her nuts (Green Isn't Your Color). That she could be so dismissive to Spike, and just push him away so quickly, it just doesn't feel like her.

Oh well, you had a goal, to write a sad Sparity fic, and mission accomplished. Well designed and written, even with what parts of it I didn't care for. I look forward to seeing what else you will produce!

-Lumino

3234750 I suggest you watch the episode where Rarity goes to Canterlot I forgot what it's called but she doesn't even make Twilight the birthday gift intended because she decides her presence as a canterlot elite is more important than Twilight's birthday. Almost skipped her birthday completely to stay in the high society.

Case in point Rarity gives no bucks about others unless it suits her to.

The Sonic Rainboom is a good example episode of how little Rarity considers her friends.

Anyways thanks for reading and the comment :)

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