(Ignore the crossover tag it was only needed for passing approval, This story has no actual cross over with Mario or the universe, just references and the beginning scene role-played by the characters in the story.)
Pinkie Pie and Twilight have been role-playing as characters from video games and movies with costumes and all to help them. They have been having fun doing so.
This session they wanted to try a Mario role-play... but what happens when things are taken out of fantasy and into reality?
Art by Hoyeechun from DA
Chapters (1)
I love me some TwiPie, that's for sure. This story had a very interesting idea, though I feel like it could've been executed better. You mention Twilight and Pinkie kissing for the first time in the story, but the way they're acting around each other makes it seem like they've been together for some time. There were some grammatical errors around (maybe try getting an editor/proofreader), but not enough to detract from the story. I loved the idea of them cosplaying and Spike's situation was worth a laugh.
Overall, it was cute, but could've been better. Keep writing!
3344024 The purpose of this story was for a make out scene. The side parts were just for the lawls.
It wasn't supposed to have a sense of direction just a random make out scene with little to no backing for it. It's a companion piece to Sharing Tongues, by iJab.
FYI about having an Editor I have some but I am currently writing without since like you stated minor grammar issues aren't taking from the story.
I wrote this fic in about 30 - 45 minutes and it only took hours to get posted. I tried to edit as much as I could but I will admit I am no editor and I didn't feel like grabbing one for this silly one shot.
That being said I am glad you still managed to enjoy the story and I will always keep writing. I have over 20 stories and over 100 in the works.
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I understand. Just helping out a fellow author; I didn't mean to offend you or your writing.
3344072 I am one of those who upvoted your comment. I wasn't offended and I love both negative and positive feed back.
It is what helps me grow as an author.
When I read this
I thought of this:
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I like this. A lot.
3344159 The original video inspired that line actually.
Oh my god, the image of Rarity and AJ making out at the end caught of off guard really good.
and a fav from a fellow Brony/Author.
Awesome story. Here, have a moustache,
Have a nice day, Diablomuerte2.
3344150 Maybe next Make out story will feature that... I already have plans for a nice FlutterDashery style make out fest.
I like it.
Well... that was nice.
Ohmygod the picture is so bucking adorable!
Ughhhh.... Oh Faust, this story was so adorable my eyes are throwing up rainbows and glitter.
4706540 the hospital is that way
Dude, this was totally awesome.
Pinkie's such an adorable trollop.
This was certainly...um...well, I guess I'm just saying that I enjoyed the story!