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A young filly long ago tasked with protecting Equestria imprisoned by Princess Celestia for hundreds of years for something that was not entirely her fault. She has now been reawakened in present day Equestria by Princess Twilight and Princess Luna and now must learn how to control her own strength in order to save Equestria from the new threats that have risen. Cont. in Starlight Adventures of Equestria.
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Why not?
She does look like/ is a recolor and she is an alicorn, which is something incredibly hard to pull off, and the readers on this site know that its generally a bad idea from experience.
These are valid points to complain about/ point out.
I'll look over the story but I personally don't care much about the first fact and the second one bothers me severely but I am able to overlook it.
3476218 At least your reasonable but I yea I am not taking crap from anypony this time.
3476244
This time?
...I looked over a blog of yours and it appears you received some OC hate and went into a full tirade about the state of this fandom. I could explain why some people may not like your character at a glance, if you wouldn't mind listening.
3476269 Everyone on my skype and facebook loves her to death but theres this one guy who followed me on from this site and proceeded to bring drama from this site onto derpiboo.ru where I have never provoked him at all. I speaking for most alicorns when I say I'm sick of being thought of just some stupid race we all deserve to be treated just like any other race. You can speak your mind since you asked nicely. I'm willing to take nice criticism just not complete hate and crud.
3476347
So is that a yes or no? I understand your problems, and I can shed some light on them if you wouldn't mind.
3476353 Yes sure since you kinda asked nicely and such go ahead.
3476367
Alright, well...
In general, it has been held for the longest time that alicorns are either a godlike, incredibly powerful, or rare beyond measure kind of species. They are all three races combined, embodying the abilities of earth ponies, pegasi, and unicorns. We initially started with two: Luna and Celestia. Since then the number has risen to four overall, with no mention whatsoever of any other alicorns being present anywhere.
People tend to attribute alicorns as being very important and powerful. They also have a stigma against OC alicorns because... how do I put this? Very, VERY FEW have actually been done reasonably well at all. And more often than not these alicorn OC's have color schemes that are generally bad or unappealing, looking 'edgy' or 'stupid' to some bronies.
This site, and most of this fandom have dealt with, innumerable times, alicorns that are poorly-written self-insert mary sues that are all powerful, related to the princesses in some way, or are generally just there to romance one (or several) of the mane six because of some fantasy the writer has.
OC alicorns are generally hated for these reasons, and also for the fact that they don't make sense in pretty much any setting unless handled with extreme care, and even then they will most likely receive trouble. It is much more reasonable, and in fact easier to make a 'normal' pegasus or unicorn or even earth pony OC.
This person that has been following you is expressing his hate for alicorn oc's and using you as a target.
I think that sums things up.
3476425 Yea I am trying to fix these stories all the time I even asked who ever reads this if they wanted my OC to have to wear diapers.
Pretty good!
Like you said, the idea is a bit cliche, but if you've got a good story in mind, go ahead and give it a shot. One big thing, though: You need to have a description of what the story is about, rather than a big disclaimer. Otherwise, people come here to read what the story's about, and see that there is no overview of the story, and are possibly turned away by that.
Keep at it!
3539472 Wow um thanks your probably the 2nd person out of all the ponies I have ever talked to who payed attention to the story. I'll do that.
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Cool, description looks good. I would take out the disclaimer entirely, though - there's no real need for it, and it's likely not going to change anyone's mind if they're determined to dislike it.
Try to concentrate just on writing the story you want to write, and not so much on the audience. Sometimes they might have some constructive criticism, but other times, they're just bring unpleasant. Tell the story you want to tell first. Everything else should be a much more minor concern.
I agree, though - getting negative feedback feels really crappy. Makes a guy feel bad. If they are at all nicer, I think they might have pointed out that the original character might seem a bit TOO capable and powerful, and doesn't have any vulnerabilities or character flaws (you'll remember, each of the characters from the show have their strengths and their weaknesses, and that's why you and I love those characters so much).
Still, personally, I think your writing itself is good, and there's no better way to get even better than to keep writing - that's definitely why I write, to get better.
And! Of course, because it's fun. Writing is really, really satisfying sometimes.
3541851 Of course she will have weaknesses just in do time.
You need to learn about the magic that is a comma. It looks like this , and is very helpful in writing.
Also, the apostrophe. It is used like such.
If this seems rude...I apologize, but it needed to be said.
3594582 Its ok its all I wanted was for ponies to point out errors. Could you post which chapter please?
3594912 it should say in my comment. Look up in the top of the comment. It should say the chapter
Oh, sheesh, where to start.....
First off, you may assume everyone has seen up to the season 3 finale. We know Celestial and Luna are sisters, and that they rule Equestria. If readers don't know this they need to get off FiMfiction.
Second, commas. They are magical.
Third, no caps. We know that Nightmare Moon uses the Royal Canterlot Voice. Instead of using caps, use words like "she shouted" or "she roared".
Fourth, cause and effect. A Wild Nightmare Moon Appeared randomly. Why? Knowing why certain events trigger is important for a storyline.
Fifth, keep things canon to the universe unless you SPECIFICALLY STATE that it's a parallel universe. Details are key for this.
Lastly, make sure the little princess has weaknesses. By weaknesses I mean a character flaw that cause a character to overcome an obstacle. Twilight had to learn the lesson of friendship to overcome her snootiness (for lack of a better word) in season one. Luna had to accept that after 1000 years, it would be difficult to regain her subjects trust and have fun with them during Nightmare Night. Everyone has flaws!
All in all, there's some minor grammatical errors, but I can see some improvement. Keep at it; I'm interested to read more!
3595675 first off I'll fix the nightmare moon shouting thing, Second nightmare moons appearance will be explained in chapter 4 during Starlight's training. Thirdly she does she is extremely prone to light good spells thanks to her nightmare magic and there is a secret in a equestria which could kill her in one blow, another one is she is extremely weak to the elements of harmony, she also emotionally attached to celestia so if anything happens to her she will be crushed. One more thing commas I am sorry about I was really tired during this cause I was doing a million things so I will fix them all again.
Whoa.
WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!
4392415 Important stuff. Been going back and forth between friendly foal daycare and this story.
This is the problem with not taking people's advice: you bind yourself to making the EXACT SAME MISTAKES in every story you write. You get stuck in your style, and you grow attached to concepts and designs that flat-out don't work.
This is where your problems began, where your first mistakes were made, from which you've learned nothing.
5017629 From this moment on I am blocking everyone who is giving me a really really big headache.
5018459 That's what I did, and I got a hell of a lot of negative reviews
from people who haven't even read my stories. 
And now noone cares or even knows who Sky Blue is. 
5018459
What 5027777 said. Blocking others will often put you in a much worse position.
5028034 I'm a he, though my OC is a she. Like Glaze/WoodenToaster, or ForestRain.
5028040 meh.
5028088 Do you at least know who those people and ponies are? They're YouTubers who make awesome songs and PMVs for them.
5028097
Youtubers are a threat to the shared intellegence of the human race created by the Illuminati to control the cattle of society.
i.imgur.com/1hZDBaM.jpg
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5028136 The Illuminati (Singular: Illuminatus, Latin for "Enlightened") are a fraud crew of masons who claim to have found the light, or the path to the light. Who cares what you think if your argument's based on them? YouTube has nothing to do with those frauds as they've already been bought out by Google, the biggest fraud in the universe.
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It was a joke. No one would seriously believe YT was created by the Illuminati.
5028409 scio, praetendebam quod vidisti.
oOOoo bold letters!
Let me try to explain something to you, Author, calmly and without negativity.
Do you really understand why people dislike your story, even if they haven't read it? I don't think you do. You seem to think people just hate Alicorn OCs with a vengeange, merely for the fact that they are Alicorns. This isn't technically true.
People on this site hate the stereotype of Alicorn OCs: Authors who use them often make them Mary Sues, characters who are perfect, overpowered, and who only go through bad circumstances because of other "bad" characters, never because of their own mistakes.
People on this site hate the stereotype of Self-insertions: Not only do Authors tend to make themselves Mary Sues (because people like to think they are perfect), but it also shows a lack of creativity. The Author can't come up with a new character, so they use themselves.
Unfortunately, from what I've seen and others have seen, your story meets the expectations of the stereotype. I'm not criticising you, I'm saying what people think.
But it isn't just that. You've made it worse: You deleted comments and blocked critics. Yes, criticism is harsh. But when you do that, you make yourself "the bad guy", and people who never would have shown up on your story come here to downvote simply because you censored people. On top of that, you've told people you won't change, showing them you think you're perfect and don't need to improve. People on this site don't respect that.
That's why your stories are doing badly.
I dont even care anymore you all are just making it harder for me. So if you could please stop commenting from other works and leave me be that would be nice. AND I HAVE MORE THAN ONE OC DAMMIT! WILL NO ONE LISTEN. I'm probably gonna be banned cause I left an anger message for the lead site developer.
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Chun a bheith cinnte a bheith cinnte a bheith cinnte.
5028683 quid lingua est ista? non intellego.
Just remember I tried to help you.
5028097 I don't really care for them.
5028626
We can only hope, you stuck-up prima donna.
5030264 Turns out I wont be banned ever. So you can take you party and shove it right up your arse.
5033656
dont listen to them there are the haters. you are reelly good at make the stories. i wants to see more of you're oc. plase make the mre of this please and thank u very much.
What the fuck is this?!
5033656
You're cute when you're angry.
Wanna fuck?
5035364
y u such a hater?
5035442
It saves time. I offered her some squeaky-squeaky, what more do you want?
5035364 COMMENT SEX!!!! COMMENT SEX! COMMENT SEX! COMMENT SEX! COMMENT SEX! COMMENT SEX!
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Good god I'm horrible..