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Medicant Bias, the once rampant Forerunner AI that joined the flood to destroy his former masters, is now trying to show that he is, once again, serving his masters, even though he knows that his sins were too great to be absovled too easily, he is going to try to help in any way he can... even if they are technicolor ponies.
What will happen when he gets somehow teleported to a foregin world full of magical creatures? Will he be able to redeem his past sins and help these ponies?
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Im new in the whole writting stuff, so I would be very grateful if someone would be willing to be an editor or proof-reader...
Like it so far. I hope this will continue as a awesome story.
2925800 Misspells abound, but that can be fixed.
added to read later.
i'm planning to test your mettle regarding the halo universe.
i'll tell you if i see anything that's incorrect
give me back my interest!,no in all honsty please continue
Excellent premise, well broken up, spend more time on the development of scenario, minor grammatical errors, overall promising
Oh, and more.
I want more.
I like it a lot so far, but there are a lot of misspellings and capitalization errors. Also I don't know if it's a rule but using numbers in sentences instead of spelling them out looks kind of bad.
2 < two
That sorta thing.
common should be com'n or come on
belive should be believe
cyrcle should be circle
But besides all that, I find this very interesting and will be watching how it goes.
REMEMBER ME!!!!!!!
Also great story... fav.
Really good story and idea so far. Although, there are quite a few grammatical and spelling errors. However, they don't really subtract from the story itself. Great job so far!
Hot diggity damn, dis is good.
Next chapter please.
Love the new chapter.
:0
This chapter is far more advanced in conversation and diction, errors are few and far in between, and the humor is appreciated. Keep up the good work!
could work on spelling and grammar, but this is very good.
Oh, and it's twilight and I.
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OHHHHHHHHHHH
it seems like you rushed this one a teeny bit.... i would have liked to have him call the ponies out on they're assault on his Sentinels...other than that this is great!!!
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There shall be destruction soon.... soooooooooooooooooon
He should be able to shift into whatever he wnats. I remember reading something about it, but all the Forerunner metal has a base of hardlight, so it can be transformed, much like how the Didact's ship in Cryptum was made on Erde Tyrene.
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http://halo.wikia.com/wiki/War_Sphinx
Im going to try to make him take form of either a forerunner prefect, or the forerunner that is next to the war sphinx in the picture.
The formation the sentinels make reminds me of the halo wars tactic with 1 scarab and a swarm of engineers
moar?
ps i may be able to help edit,message me if your interested
Well that escalated quickly.
2938091 Not sure if someone else has said this already (if so sorry), but you should try typing the story in Microsoft Word. It should help with most of the grammar and spelling mistakes
Language.
This sounds good, I have to read more!
So, the giant machine in the Halo Xbox One trailer may actually be Mendicant Bias in a war sphinx? I've never actually considered that possibility, my friend you just might be writing the future script and story for Halo 5! I'm hooked now.
I have to read more!
Yay, and just for the lulz a couple of forerunner armor, wich one do you think is cooler?
images1.wikia.nocookie.net/halofanon/images/thumb/d/d3/Forerunner_-_Combat_Suit.png/300px-Forerunner_-_Combat_Suit.png
halofanforlife.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/02/Forerunner-Concept-art.jpg
halofanforlife.com/wp-content/uploads/Forerunner-Concept.jpg
I like the third because it looks bad ass :)
B I PICK B.
also love your work so far
i pick A i dont want him to kill at least not yey
2948122id say the first or second
ERADICATE THEM!
third one looks cool
ill have to go with B, the ponies should see what he is trully cabible of or after he...eradicates them, he can blame dash,"this didnt have to happen if you only kept your mouth shut, now a son is left without a father!" and junk like that, gorey(not in great detail,too much work) but in the end sappy and er...blamey?yeah, gorey then sappy and blamey[(thats a word now)refrence].
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C
Well A would make him look like a pussy but it is rather peaceful. They might just see it as a way to get out of a fight rather than a solution and it would look kind of bad.
B would be awesome but probably petrify the ponies and make them scared, but it would show his dominance and assure he would not be attacked in the future.
C would show that he is smart and peaceful but still make him look bad, and I think it wouldn't work anyway because dragons only hoard items that are use full such as gems which they eat.
I personally would go with B because then in the future we can get a lot more fighting such as the changelings attacking him because they feel threatened by him, or the dragons looking for revenge.
P.S. Its my job to be critical about these things and think about all the possibility's.
B because hostile life forms
A MAN A DONT FUCK UP NOW
ERADICATE ALL LIFE ON THE WORLD
option B, but it would be cool if he did option C but failed or did some other trick but still resolved into fighting, but no death because that would cause the ponies to be scared of him
I say eradicate the dragon using his war sphinx form.
B) exterminate with extreme prejudice
I like the first armor and I choose B.
B! 2949561 I agree
And its no problem that I was offline,sorry about that,anyways if I am offline please just send it to me anyway so I can send you the edited copy per-say back before you
update it to FIMfiction Oh,the third BTW
B, Vaporize with extreme prejudice.
2948122 I like the 1st. forerunner prefects look badass.
A. You should choose A. Because if the ponies saw Bias kill the dragons, then it wouldn't help his reputation with them, and they won't trust him as easily as before.
A. Because if the A.I. wanted to kill he would have done it in the first place, plus it REALLY wouldn't work well with Celestia or mane 6.