A forgotten stage performer discovers a human child at the bottom of Canterlot's waterfalls, and he makes a fortune putting her on display.
(Please, tell me what you thought of this story. I want to know what you thought, even if all you have to say is that the story was boring and poorly written or morally reprehensible. I hope it's none of those, but I'd still like to know. We only improve with criticism, after all.)
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ok you need to continue this RIGHT NOW maybe she end up in canterlot or ponyvillle or something
Though definatly one of the darker stories I've read (or perhaps the darkest), I agree with Changleing, please comtinue. However the whole time I was waiting for Celstia, or Luna, or somepony to come in and save her.
2682523 Funny you mention the Princesses, because I spent a long time debating whether Celestia or Luna would save her. I finally decided when I thought about the way slaves in the U.S. were treated. It was often argued that the cruelty they suffered was necessary because they were "savage and stupid."
And should I take it being very very dark as a compliment?
I was enraptured from the start. Good work I do hope this gets featured.
If that's the effect your going for, then yes it's a compliment. I only meant it was far darker than my normal brand of fiction. Though I do tend to favour the somewhat archaic "knight in shinig armor" concept. Eitherway keep writing
2682613 You and me both. My jedi senses tell me it won't, though.
I figured it would catch the audience from the get-go. It was a fascinating read for me, and to be the proof-reader I swear there was a few mistakes I had to mention but what he was going for was as clear as a dinner-bell. This was dark, pure dark.
We take the concept that humans can be accepted in Equestria too lightly. Some residents would, oh I know some would, but others? And from other time-periods? Mein-Gott, we are on a goldmine of dark fiction that could be explored in Equestria. I have two stories that demand to be finished, and a third that demands my attention as well. But this guy, he's got me wanting to try my hand at dark fiction, for reals.
the darkness approves
This needs a sequel.
Sonofabitch this was dark...I...I think I enjoyed it
That was horribly depressing. Why would Celestia let something she even thought was an animal, receive that kind of treatment?
I really want to know what would happen if pony’s found out Humans are not beast they have the same Intelligence as them like how they thought dragons are beast in the past and then found out they made a huge mistake.
This is a great story
Feels like a origin story though and needs more to it
I like how you made the little girl honey basically a zoo animal (really puts a animals life in a shitty zoo into perspective for the reader )
Also I recommend adding more to this
Maybe she finds and befriends Fluttershy
Maybe Celestia investigates and finds out Wheeler was holding a sentient being like a pet and goes to find and help her. 😉