"If I had known what I was getting myself into, I never would have gone to Diamond’s party. I would have woken up on Saturday bright and early, eaten a hearty breakfast with my family, and pretended to have fun at the Summer Sun Celebration. I would have saved myself a load of trouble too. Probably would have won a few prizes, and gotten to hang out with my sister and her friends. I could have even spent some quality time with Princess Twilight.
"At the very least, I would have saved myself a few brain cells. My mouth wouldn’t taste like vomit, I wouldn’t see little pink bats plotting to kill me out of the corners of my eyes, and I wouldn’t have 'Pip was here' written on my neck in permanent marker."
(Warning: this story contains foul language, drugs, and "out-of-character" characters.)
I'd like to thank Chocoloco, PegasusKlondike, and chancellorpuddinghead for pre-reading this story. I should also apologize to Chocoloco: yes, I still think the prologue is a tad pessimistic, but I nearly drove myself crazy trying to change it.
A tad bitter, aren't we, Apple Bloom?
Oh poor, poor, Apple Bloom. lol
At first this was sounding like just a crossover of a couple movies I seen, but then I stopped caring about that the more I read as I enjoyed the all too comedic ponification of what Apple Bloom's unimportant and totally still a blank-flank life she leads. Loved the Rarity backstory, bittersweet.
Great and terrifying ending to this 2nd chapter. I look forward to more. I wonder what sort of history these two have, half of me wants it to end in a miserable and hilarious drunken debauchery between AB and Diamond and her two CMC pals. That would be one hell of a hangover morning after to deal with!
But I digress, holy crap I love the narrative you went with, every character just feels great in this. High School hijinks at their best. I always knew Twilight would bring ruin to Ponyville much like that, but dang, that new Ponyville is just hell on those younger generation fillies, no wonder they stopped crusading.
Anywho, great story. DAMNIT, stupid sexy BIG Mac. Apple Bloom is gonna need a lot of therapy
3726559 lol I'd argue you would be too in her horse shoes given the circumstances. ;P
Pessimistic and bitter Apple Bloom teenager is best Apple Bloom lol
This is really interesting. I love stories that start this way.
That awkward moment when you completely agree with Diamond Tiara.
Great chapter. I didn't spot any grammatical errors, and I actually kinda like this characterization of teenage Apple Bloom. It's like watching a train wreck. You know things are about to become hell for Apple Bloom, but you just can't look away...
Any ETA on the next chapter?
3742083 Unfortunately, right now I have no idea when the next chapter will be done. I started on it, but I hated it so much I deleted it; plus, the moment I put out these two chapters, my motivation to write disappeared. I have two weeks left before I have to go back to school too, so the chance of me writing a few decent chapters in that time is small. Summer, though - by then I'll definately have something out.
3755345 Aww... that'll be a long wait.
But I understand school eats up most of one's time. I admit I get virtually no writing done during semesters myself. And if you want/need a prereader/editor, send me a PM. I'm a writer (and English major), so I can proofread pretty well.
Hi there. I know you asked me to proof read this very chapter and prologue ages ago and I never replied back to this part here.
I'm sorry about that and I'm glad you found someone more competent to give you feed back.
I was wondering if you ever got this story down. I always wanted to see how it turned out.
3880157 Trust me, I had about fifty thousand things for this story. The biggest pain in the butt right now is finding the time AND energy to outline and write.
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At least you have a process. I have all the time in the world and I'm doing absolutely nothing with it. I'm starting to piss myself off.
3739483 I AM in her horse shoes (so to speak). Everything she said was true.
Suicide attempt?
and I hear what Bloom is saying. I live in what used to be a small Texas Town and I had plenty of places to ride my bike around the house. I don't ride anymore and it doesnt matter. The fields and roads I traveled in my youth have all been fenced off by rich pricks and developers. I used to be indiffrent to this town, now I hate it.
Good story but Bloom sure ain doing anything for my mood.
My eyes MY EYES!
Holy crow. I thought it was gonna be Diamond Tiara! that was a bit of a surprise..
I feel so intelligent right now...
*sees the description at the top of the chapter* ...Oh.