Applejack wins Soarin in a charity fundraiser and now the Wonderbolt has to do whatever she says for the entire weekend. Which would be nice as long as her nervousness and secret crush she has for him doesn’t hold her back. Anthro ponies.
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And here I thought Applejack couldn't get more embarrassed around him...
Sheesh, Applejack's such a nervous wreck around him, she makes Fluttershy of all ponies confident.
So I guess we're going to wait on Soarin' having to try some of Aj's pie... Wow, that could go BOTH ways. But seriously though, once he tries some of that, I'm sure the rest of the weekend will get a WHOLE lot better. I hope that will happen sometime Saturday Evening, then we can get him to try her other pie.
Rogue capital there.
Not sure if it's supposed to be a comma or full-stop at the end of the sentence, there.
*it
Why are those in italics? It would make more sense if they had apostrophes to insinuate air quote, and thus, sarcasm.
The story as a whole seems rather vapid and uninteresting, lacking the quality of the original. It's an alright read, but for a story of this size it's progressing way too slowly.
Soarin(<3) Applejack (D-;)
Ugh! the build up! Curse you!
But still a fun and comedic update.
Can't wait to get to the kinky arts of their agreement.
I am actually surprised that Soarin' only mildly remember Rainbow Dash, and I bet that he recognized her because she's a Wonderbolt Reserve as well as her trademark natural rainbow-colored mane. Though I thought that he could have recognized Rarity and Spike---Rarity was the one with the burnt flutterwings and her accidentally knocking him out (as well as Spitfire and Surprise) during his rescue attempt [come to think of it, he should have at least remember that it was the same Rainbow Dash here that did a legendary Sonic Rainboom to save him, Rarity, and his teammates from certain doom], ; and Spike from his Godzilla-like rampage [He, along with Spitfire and Surprise, were trapped in a water tower compliments of Greedy Adult Spike].
And I definitely would think that he could at least have a faint click in his head when he saw Princess Twilight, as well as Pinkie telling him her name....
Not to mention that he is introduced to Applejack----at some point he's got to find out that the Pie Mare and the mare that you are accompaning to his Wonderbolt Weekend obligation is one and the same. I wonder if it comes to actually Applejack baking an apple pie and him sampling it before he realizes that the girl that he has been looking for has been here all along.
Ironic, no? Soarin' has been looking for the girl all this time, and with no luck. But once he temporarily suspends the search, it looks likes he's gonna to find his Ms. (or better yet, Mrs.) Right.
I know that it isn't critical to the story, but I wonder who Apple Bloom's boyfriend or girlfriend (hey it could happen) is? I could say Rumble, he's a handsome pegasus colt I assume, and I can't truly see her with one of the CMC's. I staunchly believe that there is a different between a good friend and a mate, and there is too much similar with the three young mares that dating each other would seem to be impossible.
This might be a slow build-up, but it's wonderfully written and I can tell this is going to pay off HUGE dividends. Also, friggin' finally we get an update! Can't wait for the start of Saturday.- and while it's good to see that the time between updates is decreasing, hopefully we won't have to wait another whole month.
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in-show it's not surprise, it's fleetfoot.
Cheerilee and Big Mac head for a house on the lake. Spitfire is going to a house on the lake to meet Fleur De Lis and Fancy Pants. Is this story suddenly tying the events of The Farmer's Herd into this?
Uh, capital t?
I hear earth ponies like it rough
Why do get the feeling that they're not going to bang at all this weekend?
4744270 Soarin's head is too full of terrible memories for him to remember any faces long term. There's just so much he can retain. And he does know who Twilight is, but as Season 4 showed us, no one really gives a crap. He's only seen Rarity once (same as AJ) which is why he gets this sort of deja vu feeling, and as for Spike he's only seen him as a giant rampaging dragon, not as a normal guy, and Pinkie is... Pinkie. IF there's any other reason that he should remember them, assume he's forgotten for the sake of the story. People forget a thousand things a day, this was just one of them.
4744289 Yeah, hopefully we'll have less of a wait between updates.
4745368 Not at all, considering that story take's place in what I'm going to call weekendverse Alpha Omega Dragonsaur, while this story is in weekendverse Dynamic Flaming Badgerbear. You've probably noticed, but there's a lot of potential for spin-offs here, Cheerimac at the lake with Fluer dis Fancyfire, Rainbow getting her act together with Thunderlane, the ever elusive lovelife of Pinkie, what the hell Fluttershy does with Iron Will (and perhaps other bulging stallions?) and of course, finding out who these stallions are that Twilight is dating.
Well, this is certainly fun.
I hope next chapter we get a bit from Soarin's perspective as he's reduced to a nervous wreck because he can't stop picturing AJ naked, especially when she's high kicking the trees.
4745600 HA, Soren is going to sleep cramp tonight. but in full honesty I feel sorry for the guy; I mean he's sleeping in a soiled bed that probably reeks of sex and now just saw a full view of applejack in all her glory.(waggling eyebrows) God knows he's not going to sleep tonight.
4745575 awesome chapter and my hunch was correct. But geez Soren's memory is really that crappy; I shudder to think how much booze he has to drink to get that forgetful. anyways I love how your torturing Sorin right now and how his relationship with applejack is progressing. it's slow but enjoyable, it's like a sitcom I guess hmm, now I think about it you mention Timberwolves? so he might see them in the next chapter
This is getting better. We've never seen AJ around any sort of crush, so we don't know how she would react. This works quite well. She's trying to maintain her usual composure, and when she gets back into her comfort zone, she's back to her old self. It works very well.
Just one thing, about your writing. When using a descriptor of who is speaking (she said/he asked/they shouted), you don't capitalize it.
Wrong: "Blah blah blah," She said.
Right: "Blah blah blah," she said.
Even so, I enjoyed this chapter a lot, especially for the build-up to what I'm sure will be an explosive climax.
wunderbar
I'm still waiting for the apple pie.
4745575 DAMN YOU AND YOUR MAGNIFICENT STORY. My habits have turned on me again, really should of learnt by now to not read a story until its finished. Just so i dont get into a predicament of pulling my hair out, and wondering whats going to happen with a story. Please, please, PLEASE try and get this finished before i go completely bald and i shall swear on your glory for evermore. There gushing crazy rave over.
Omg this is soo good! I need moar!
Ooooh boy >:3
Happy to see this story back in production. I was hoping it wasn't canceled. Loving it.
Only one minor quibble here: In the first chapter you identified Apple Bloom as fourteen but here she's a pre-teen (which is 11 or 12). Other than that, fantastic story.
When I hear that, the first thing that comes to mind is
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Or
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Damn, Spitfire can recall Fluttershy because she's a big-boobed cutie??? That's surprising--I kinda though that she could remember Twilight and Spike as well, but then again, that probably was before Spike grew up or Twilight got her wings (Hurricane Fluttershy was season 2, I think...)