There are a lot of things that bronies agree on in the MLP community, things such as names, to personalities, to even shipping characters around with each other. Things like Lyra and Bon Bon being together and Derpy Hooves loving muffins and being a little derpy seem so set in stone. What if the biggest, most agreed upon thing that Bronies thought was canon was a completely baseless lie? This story sets place with a young human who is just about to find out that ponies aren't quite how they envisioned them to be. Find out along with him as he find out the truth first hand and sets the facts straight.
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Seems interesting, and with no glaring errors, I'd like to see more. However, the whole "Anon" is a tad overdone, if you ask me. A follow and a like, good sir!
Yeah, guilty as charged.
For some reason I read most of this chapter in a hippie's voice
I found myself stroking my invisible beard when I finished this chapter...
Interesting... Follow and like!
Please don't hate me, but...
Days. No comma-thingie. The title has the same issue.
Should that not be 'thought'?
Scores and rankings:
Concept = ten points
Pacing = seven points (Coulda done with a few more commas and such pedantic idiocy)
characterization = ?
lolz = ten plus maximum.
I love this idea! Seriously, I know its just a side project of yours, but I'm hoping for some development here, since I am sensing mega-laughs in this fic's future! Too many directions to count.
Cliche overuse to be sure, but I'm not sure if you decided to do that just to counter your breaking with tradition as much as the description suggests you will. If so, haha. If not, there's your excuse: Irony.
Regards
Quicksear
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Lol, I have a habit of screwing up punctuation, errors fixed though, ty for pointing them out.
Even though this is a sort of back burner project I might try to update it as frequently as possible, the idea kinda started out as a funny thought in my head and at first I was just debating dismissing it in one of my unpopular blog posts xD
Also there will be a few more "facts" Anon will be learning about ponies.
Quite interesting.
I hate to burst your bubble but you're not the only one writing about 'tall' ponies. I've always though that having them 3-4 feet tall was just too damned small. Though your story still grows them a bit taller than mine.
Are you planning on keeping their sizes relative - making the princesses like 14 or 15 feet?
I still find it crazy that we're shipping and making speculations over cartoon ponies designed to sell toys to 6 year old girls.
Two questions.
Why the hell could you not think of any name other than 'anon' for the Human.
Why did you have to go and make 'anon' a perverted freak who want's to fuck animals?
We want moar!
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2617275 I believe you mean "wants". Apostrophes indicate possessive or they contract. Anne's apples. Anne could've (could have) eaten the apples. The big exception you'll encounter every day is "its", which is possessive, with no apostrophe. Some important group of jerks decided that it should be like the other possessive pronouns: hers, his. Remember those two rules and that one exception. Integrate them into your being. Become one with the apostrophe. Ommmmmmm.
Although he raises the question in the most hostile way possible, Trekee raises a good point. The character is kind of empty, except you go out of the way to establish that he's got a mild sexual fixation on the characters, BeardedRedMane. That's not actually a bad writing move, as it could make him interesting and add tension and conflict, but right now this guy needs character. As it stands, he's a American brony of above average height. That's not much of a character. He needs strengths, virtues, flaws, vices, fears, dreams, and unique mannerisms.
You're obviously a beginning author, Bearded, and you seem young. Don't get discouraged, and keep in mind that fanfic is where lots of writers started. It's a good place to spread your wings, although you might one day find that it's a bad place to fly. Anyhow, I think you should ask yourself what you want this baby to do here. What are you trying to tell FIMF's readers with this fic? And where are you going to land this sucker? That is to say, have you got a conclusion to this story in mind?
"What if ponies were larger than we preconceived them" is obviously what you started with, but why? And why did you choose a narrative form to explore it?
<<<<< See that face? Yeah
Please don't hate me, but...
This chapter was...fast. One can tell it was written very soon after the first. Although I don't dislike the premise, I have to say that the pacing was way off: It was too fast! I can't even tell how long Anon (I'm sure you can tell this was an unpopular decision) has been in Equestria. I may not be able to comment on content (Which I in fact love here), but I'd like to give a tip: read over the whole chapter as if reading it aloud, and where you want a pause, comma. Commas are awesome, I tell you!
Pinkie's hug scene should not have been a reflective scene, I don't think: Pinkie's antics require immediacy to work out right, so write them as action rather than memories, if you know what I mean.
Also, I think you could do with inserting some descriptive paragraphs in between scenes, to set time-frame and emotion, or even just to indicate time passing. It works well for fledgling authors (First tip I was given, and it helped...I think) and seriously improves pacing.
Your human needs some character development, even just some background. Something to make him relatable.
Regards,
Quicksear
Hm, alright an Anon we can relate to eh? I'll see what I can do on this tour. Instead of more of a past tense memory this entire chapter shall be a telling as it's happening deal. Since Fluttershy lives a ways away from the town and I assume it's a 15 to 20 minute walk in the least we'll go through some talking.
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As for the name Anon *shrug* I discovered MLP browsing ****ch*n one day and then from it discovered H.I.E. which they call Anon in Equestria. As for the perverted freak, well he's from "that side" of our brony fandom. Too many stories have romance between a character and a pony when the MC never once before had a fetish for animals. Not that I'm planning on shipping or anything here, just rather not go that route.
Interesting. This seems like it'll be worth keeping an eye on, anyway.
Although huge ponies do seem kinda gross. I mean, their heads would be the size of one of those big rubber exercise balls. That's just freaky, man.
But the real question everyone will have to ask themselves is: is this a story about giant ponies or a story about a tiny, leprechaun-esque human?
I know exactly what image you mean. And it's the cutest thing EVER.
I'm usually more of a Twilight person, but that image gets me every time I look at it, and I can help but smile and d'aaaawww. 
I like your story so far. Yes, it might have a few shortcomings, and – especially in the second chapter – there are a few spelling and grammatical mistakes, but hey, it still reads nicely and is overall quite cute. Thumbs up from me!
I like the notion of the characters being around 5 nd a half feet average
Half my size is much to small xP but so far i like this picturing a tall ass fluttershy crushing me in a hug rather then the other way around is hilarious xD anyway liked a faved
Cracked ribs ii understand WORTH IT! XD im lovin this so much xP
Huh actually in blood and ponies the human soldiers where mistaken for minituars so that can make considerable sense especially since they look similiar to us in the show
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Huh, how come you prefer them to be so tall? You want them to be ride-able and war read?
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Yeah bro... Anon definitely saw some "pants" on that stallion.
edit-- y'know actually Abcron that would be interesting if all ponies wore pants to hide their "junk" but then their cutie marks wouldn't be showing. Debating writing that they just wear skin tight same color pants all the time, which is the reason why we never see anything in the show.
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Huh really? I thought most stories never touched upon it. My thoughts were that they just had like kangaroo pouches or something that they tucked their junk into >_>;
Guess I should look for stores that touch on it.
Ungulates don't have any more joints in the legs than we have, they just walk on their "finger/toe tips".Twilight would know the difference between digitigrade and plantigrade legs and would be able to conclude he's probably plantigrade by the look of his legs, I'd say.
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Science is magic.
Perhaps Twilight who only saw his legs through his pants thought he only had knees and no ankles?
Also I just noticed the acronym for my story is F.A.P.
hue.
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I need to lurk more then.
Finish this! Or I will get angry. You wont like me when I'm angry. *hulk scream*
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shipping in general gets on my nerves, honestly.
Waaaiiit....if the PONIES are as tall as taller-than-average humans, how tall are the freaking horses?!
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Well, let's call him Frankie. Or Thomas. Or Jacob. Or any name other than Alex, Hunter, Shepard, or Conner. Those 4 are the names I've seen most often used for the guy-in-equestria fics.
Yes I have. At least 5.
Yes, that one does turn me away. That is always a sign of either lack of imagination, which means that most of the rest of the story will probably suck, or it's from someone who's new to fanfic writing and this site in general, which means I've probably read most of what they intend in another fic somewhere. In which case of the second I shrug and move on rather than thumb down and move on because it's a case of simple ignorance/inexperience.
Did I miss something?
Oh wait, Anon's just realized he's completely nude, or something, right?
here's a thought....if Pinkie Pie is super strong....what about Applejack? She's been working on a farm forever, I'm guessing she would be super strong. I mean bucking appletrees everyday would do that to ya.