Canterlot Orphan Twilight Sparkle receives a surprise when Princess Luna offers to take Twilight as her personal protege. Under Luna's tutelage, a new Valkyrie is born.
5569533 Yea, the last three slots are reserved for stories that have been on the Featured list for a decent amount of time in the past. Soon as an author updates a fiction, said fiction automatically goes to that first of the last three slots.
Seriously though, I'm not sure how no one saw it before this chapter. I, at least, thought it was totally obvious, with all the hints I threw out there way before this chapter came to light.
5570010 Heh. Between you and me, I got tired of hiding so many things so close to my chest. I think my readers will enjoy the actual journey to discovery, as opposed to the continued mystery.
5570031 Eh, you pretty much hit the nail on the head anyway.
I got tired of keeping so many blasted secrets. So, nudged the story in a slightly different direction. I think the journey to discovery is going to be much more fun than the continued mystery.
5570450 Spitfire, Shimmer, Zecora, and Silver Bit. Silver Bit, if you recall, doesn't really belong. Halt is the true leader of the Equestrian Rangers. You'll have to wait until laterra to figure out what role Silver Bit plays.
I hope you have a very good reason for why they are Immortal (or at least have very, very long lives). And please don't give me "Elements Makes Them Immortal!" I honestly expect more from you :P
5570800 Actually this could be a pretty interesting concept. At least if it's not: "The elements make them immortal forever", but "The elements keep their bearers alive as long as they are needed, until a new bearer is found to replace them" This just gave me an awesome story idea! Thanks!
5570800 Do you recall the three R's? Rebirth, Revive, and Restore. Now, my own memory may be a little fuzzy, but I seem to remember that the Revive option lets ponies reenter the world from another womb. And I'm pretty sure that Revive is chosen by ponies who have unfinished business in the mortal plane, and have a physical body to return to...
And I'm pretty sure that "stopping Corona Flare when she returns and finding new Element Bearers" is considered unfinished business. There is one or two things still left out, but I'm sure you get the gyst of it.
And you should expect more from me. That atrocious plotline you barely mentioned made me shudder in disgust. 'Tis why this is the only part of the story I completely outlined before the fic even took full form. In a nutshell, those four have simply chosen to be Revived over and over again to continue to carry out their legacy, until such a time they feel they can finally enter the Restore phase.
5581306 Doubtful, since the sarcasm would need over seven thousand delta-v in order to reach a good orbital, but only a thousand or so to be sub orbital...
5580190 First one is a mistake I never fixed. Second, everything you know from the show should just be tossed out the window here. Including ages. That nifty little alternate universe tag takes care of that. Thirdly, why would I mention a party? The story started after Twilight's birthday, not before. Maybe mentioning it in passing could have been possible, but it would have been barely a sentence or two long, as it is completely irrelevant to the story. Amd again, alternate universe tag. Maybe I decided that Pinkie doesn't need to throw parties to spread smiles and laughter? After all, Twilight apparently knows how to spar with a weapon rather well and Rarity can forge armor. As long as I keep the Mane6 true to their Elements I should be fine. Throwing parties isn't really required for Pinks to create laughter.
As for the magic, its so boring in the show. You have unicorn magic and that's it. I dont think they even really talk about Pegasus and earth pony magic. So I created some of my own. And yes they are all different , with differing sources of power. For example, Light focuses on the sun as its power source and focuses on spells to protect, like a shield. Nature, on the other hand, uses sources like plants and focuses on healing. Dark focuses uses shadows at night and focuses on subtle spells like invisibility and stealth. I feel it was kind of rude to judge my magic when I've only really went into detail about one of them so far. Sorry.
after five years of bloodshed, that they’re quest was finally finished
1. Their.
So the original Valkyrie's guard went into seclusion for the remainder of the years that Equestria used to rebuild. Which actually makes me wonder just a little; how much history has managed to both be maintained and accurate till now? We all know that stories change over the passing course of time, even written ones it just takes a little longer.
Sorry you didn't fool me. It just made sense to me when I saw who they were training, though I did wonder about Rarity and the element of generosity. I actually didn't even think that Luna was the element. Any-whey this is getting me more excited to see more, as well as the return of the Valkyrie's soldiers. I'll see you at the next chapter.
5590810 They change most when those who experienced them first hand pass out of the world and fade into history themselves.
As a whole, the chapter seems a tad out of place. It feels somewhat disconnected. Hopefully it will all make sense later. Did you mention anywhere what the crossover is from?
5593764 Sorry, that comment was directed at the author. Usually that's what a break in text means for my comments (stuff related to a reply is one block of text immediately below the link). There is a crossover tag on this story and I was wondering what the crossover was, because depending on the author and the story they're referencing it could be heavily dependent on knowing about/having read or seen the other or only somewhat referential.
5619361 This chapter revolved around what took place after she was banished into the sun. Its kind of a continuation from the very first part of chapter one.
5631394 For the second part, that's just a stupid line spacing error I forgot to fix. Rainbow Dash never introduces herself, as Spitfire already knows who she is and what she wants. That line spacing error just makes it seem as though a line of dialogue is missing. As for the second thing... I guess you'd call the ponies nocturnal...? I'm not sure that's really the right word for it though, as Princess Luna never raises the sun. She brightens the moon at the start of a new "day", and dims it at the start of a new "night". Nopony is familiar with "day" any more. Its just the inky blackness of night and the moon's cycles. Of course, this does reveal a whole host of new problems related to not having a day cycle, but I've not gotten far enough to go into detail about those problems and how the ponies have fixed said problems.
5839881 I know its been weeks since you made this but I wish to clarify...He's actually right, by using the S suffix on the word it show a an ownership in placement. as well as solidifies a past tense realization
Already on the Featured list. Congrats.
5569533 Yea, the last three slots are reserved for stories that have been on the Featured list for a decent amount of time in the past. Soon as an author updates a fiction, said fiction automatically goes to that first of the last three slots.
Thanks though!
Well, if you hadn't figured it out yet, guess now it's obvious who the spirit Luna summoned is and why twilight is familiar to the both of them.
Twiluna confirmed. Me gusto.
--SYA, The Horse
5569937
Ha! Nice Ranger's Apprentice reference.
5569672 I admit to nothing.
Seriously though, I'm not sure how no one saw it before this chapter. I, at least, thought it was totally obvious, with all the hints I threw out there way before this chapter came to light.
5569718 I confirm nothing.
5569937 Sometimes, I think the reason this one is so popular is because of similarities to that series...
I've gotta be honest, you got me good. Although it makes total sense once I read it. Awesome chapter, as always!
5570010 Heh. Between you and me, I got tired of hiding so many things so close to my chest. I think my readers will enjoy the actual journey to discovery, as opposed to the continued mystery.
5569996 Well, I'm still hoping. And this has a romance tag, so even if no Twiluna, yay romance! Yay!
--SYA, The Horse
5570031 Eh, you pretty much hit the nail on the head anyway.
I got tired of keeping so many blasted secrets. So, nudged the story in a slightly different direction. I think the journey to discovery is going to be much more fun than the continued mystery.
5570038 Oh, and a quick question. Was the Old Valkyrie an Alicorn? It sorta seemed like that, but...well, is she?
--SYA, The Horse
5570047 I do believe the first chapter should answer that question....
But in case your lazy, yes, yes she is.
5570051 *Rereads the first chapter*
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How I skipped over the part that clearly showed she was an alicorn is a mystery
--SYA, The Horse
5569996
Well, with the exception of one detail, I had strong suspicions about them, and this chapter just confirmed them to be true.
, you’re highness.
your*
5570245 And what detail was that?
5570366
The complete relationship between Sparkle and Starshard
I only thought there were three masters.
5570450 Spitfire, Shimmer, Zecora, and Silver Bit. Silver Bit, if you recall, doesn't really belong. Halt is the true leader of the Equestrian Rangers. You'll have to wait until laterra to figure out what role Silver Bit plays.
5570555 Aww.
Your making me excited. I don't need any more of that.
I hope you have a very good reason for why they are Immortal (or at least have very, very long lives). And please don't give me "Elements Makes Them Immortal!" I honestly expect more from you :P
5570800 Actually this could be a pretty interesting concept. At least if it's not: "The elements make them immortal forever", but "The elements keep their bearers alive as long as they are needed, until a new bearer is found to replace them" This just gave me an awesome story idea! Thanks!
5570800 Do you recall the three R's? Rebirth, Revive, and Restore. Now, my own memory may be a little fuzzy, but I seem to remember that the Revive option lets ponies reenter the world from another womb. And I'm pretty sure that Revive is chosen by ponies who have unfinished business in the mortal plane, and have a physical body to return to...
And I'm pretty sure that "stopping Corona Flare when she returns and finding new Element Bearers" is considered unfinished business. There is one or two things still left out, but I'm sure you get the gyst of it.
And you should expect more from me. That atrocious plotline you barely mentioned made me shudder in disgust. 'Tis why this is the only part of the story I completely outlined before the fic even took full form. In a nutshell, those four have simply chosen to be Revived over and over again to continue to carry out their legacy, until such a time they feel they can finally enter the Restore phase.
5571132
I read the first half sentence and went "Whoops... Forgot about that."
So... to answer you question: Yes, I forgot about the 3 R's xD
5571228 Ahah! Yea, that little bit is kind of my cheating loophole around everything.
EDIT: Also, I am the 666th comment on my story! Hehe.
5571355
Woo! Creepy~
Not!
Heh, kidding :P Anywho, glad to see that you're alive. You've been silent a while
Also. Halt. *shakes head* Shameless, Flicka, shameless xP
So what is this a crossover with?
5571546
I think that the sarcasm went so far over your head it was the first text post on this site to reach sub orbital velocity
5571612 Maybe it even hit orbital velocity
5581306
Doubtful, since the sarcasm would need over seven thousand delta-v in order to reach a good orbital, but only a thousand or so to be sub orbital...
5580190 First one is a mistake I never fixed. Second, everything you know from the show should just be tossed out the window here. Including ages. That nifty little alternate universe tag takes care of that. Thirdly, why would I mention a party? The story started after Twilight's birthday, not before. Maybe mentioning it in passing could have been possible, but it would have been barely a sentence or two long, as it is completely irrelevant to the story. Amd again, alternate universe tag. Maybe I decided that Pinkie doesn't need to throw parties to spread smiles and laughter? After all, Twilight apparently knows how to spar with a weapon rather well and Rarity can forge armor. As long as I keep the Mane6 true to their Elements I should be fine. Throwing parties isn't really required for Pinks to create laughter.
As for the magic, its so boring in the show. You have unicorn magic and that's it. I dont think they even really talk about Pegasus and earth pony magic. So I created some of my own. And yes they are all different , with differing sources of power. For example, Light focuses on the sun as its power source and focuses on spells to protect, like a shield. Nature, on the other hand, uses sources like plants and focuses on healing. Dark focuses uses shadows at night and focuses on subtle spells like invisibility and stealth. I feel it was kind of rude to judge my magic when I've only really went into detail about one of them so far. Sorry.
after five years of bloodshed, that they’re quest was finally finished
1. Their.
So the original Valkyrie's guard went into seclusion for the remainder of the years that Equestria used to rebuild. Which actually makes me wonder just a little; how much history has managed to both be maintained and accurate till now? We all know that stories change over the passing course of time, even written ones it just takes a little longer.
Sorry you didn't fool me. It just made sense to me when I saw who they were training, though I did wonder about Rarity and the element of generosity. I actually didn't even think that Luna was the element. Any-whey this is getting me more excited to see more, as well as the return of the Valkyrie's soldiers. I'll see you at the next chapter.
5590810
They change most when those who experienced them first hand pass out of the world and fade into history themselves.
As a whole, the chapter seems a tad out of place. It feels somewhat disconnected. Hopefully it will all make sense later. Did you mention anywhere what the crossover is from?
5593751 I'm a little confused, when did I mention a crossovers? Not my previous comment that you replied to as I can't find any mention there.
cannot wait for the next chapter
5593764
Sorry, that comment was directed at the author. Usually that's what a break in text means for my comments (stuff related to a reply is one block of text immediately below the link). There is a crossover tag on this story and I was wondering what the crossover was, because depending on the author and the story they're referencing it could be heavily dependent on knowing about/having read or seen the other or only somewhat referential.
5594134 Ahh, whoops. Yeah, not feeling all right up here in the noggin department yet. Still a little sluggish.
Who is the fourth princess? I know Luna, the Valkyrie, and Celestia are the other three princesses.
5597272 Shhh. Its a secrete.
Don't be so sure. I never read The Ranger's Apprentice, and I love this story. Keep Calm and Write On.
5619361 This chapter revolved around what took place after she was banished into the sun. Its kind of a continuation from the very first part of chapter one.
5631394 For the second part, that's just a stupid line spacing error I forgot to fix. Rainbow Dash never introduces herself, as Spitfire already knows who she is and what she wants. That line spacing error just makes it seem as though a line of dialogue is missing. As for the second thing... I guess you'd call the ponies nocturnal...? I'm not sure that's really the right word for it though, as Princess Luna never raises the sun. She brightens the moon at the start of a new "day", and dims it at the start of a new "night". Nopony is familiar with "day" any more. Its just the inky blackness of night and the moon's cycles. Of course, this does reveal a whole host of new problems related to not having a day cycle, but I've not gotten far enough to go into detail about those problems and how the ponies have fixed said problems.
5597272
Could be Cadence.
"Much wow, much love." -Dove
This sums it up well enough.
~OreoKookie
Awesome flashback mini-chapter! You got me with the Elements of Harmony thing, but I'm still curious about Shimmer and Halt.
Just something to point out,
I'm pretty sure that's Alicorn.
5839881
I know its been weeks since you made this but I wish to clarify...He's actually right, by using the S suffix on the word it show a an ownership in placement. as well as solidifies a past tense realization
easy mistake but not unwarrented
5916510
I was actually talking about the fact that he forgot the 'i' in 'Alicorn'... XD
And I shall add this to my ever growing list of incomplete stories
Really great story and concept, couldn't wait for next chapter ^^
1) I'm actually still sort kinda vaguely lost as to what Starshard is. A piece of Twilight?
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