Fluttershy meets a kind and handsome pegasus named Forrest. She falls head-over-hooves for him, but fears he's interested in another.
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I liked this fic myself.
Hmm. I will say I enjoyed this story.
I do like how you try to keep the characters is 'character'. The kind nature of the story is nice too. I just like how gentle the characters act.
However, the only downside is that it's a little bit too childish. Then again, the premise of this franchise is for younger kids. So, nothing to be too harsh about.
The relationship triangle is okay. I do find it a bit awkward how Fluttershy acts over-the-top due to jealousy. Most of the dialogue between the characters is good. There are a few bits that seem a bit off to me. Mostly surrounding Forrest. Speaking of who, Forrest is a nice character. His interest with nature in addition to sports related activity makes him pretty interesting.
Overall, it's a decent story. Nothing great, but nothing really bad either. It's not the best story I've read, but like I said earlier, I'm still glad I read it.
Thumbs up.
202073 Really? How old is it? Because I've had mine on Fanfiction.net since last July.
Well, Bluecatcinema, I hate to break it to you, but I'll also give you credit.
My story, Flutterheart, is a bit more well known than yours by a little bit. Granted, I will acknowledge that your fic is older, as I've seen it on fanfiction.net. I did name this story without any sort of knowledge that your fic existed, but, seeing as you made it first, you have priority.
Seeing as your fic is older, I completely understand if you don't want to change the name. However, I have no interest in changing mine, seeing as it ties in with the story. I'll take a look at your story and let you know what I think.
Trey
After reading the story, I can honestly say that this was actually a fairly good story. Of course, I'll always carry a slight bias toward mine, considering it has the same name, but I will say that I do have respect for the romance in this story. You have a very good writing style as well.
Now...I read yours. If you wanted to return the favor by reading mine, I wouldn't be offended.
Trey
Awww cute!,this making just cry..lol
,wonderfull chapter 
awww..I kind of felt sad for Fluttershy!
oh god
..I wonder what'l happen to flutter?
oh god...I wonder what'l happen to flutter?
really nice fan-fic!
ts;dr
Too short, didn't read.
I like a challenge, you know? Fallout Equestria? Now that's a story I could read through over and over again. Same with Two's company, and Allegrezza. I like reading longer fics, but I won't give you demerits for it. I actually liked this for what it was, but... Now, don't get mad at me for saying this, but Fluttershy, for only two reasons, really, I can only see as being straight with Trey, or in lesbians with Twilight. Trey because of the other Flutterheart, which really made me think, and actually feel emotion. This one didn't have the same 'oomph' to it. Try expanding a bit on characterization, get the characters to do more, whether together or apart, to show how their love has grown. Insta-love? I can get behind that. I've felt love like that for girls I've thought were cute before, but I always end up feeling like they're more like a sister than a girlfriend when it happens like that.
But, enough about me, more about this... It's a good fic, for all that's there, but it could be more.
So, please. If you can, I really suggest expanding it. It's a bit on the short side.
i really thought it was really good, just wish it was longer
Cute
oh my god... the cuteness and feelz...
dat ending...
This seems so awesome, not as good as the later ones, but short and sweet.
*slow clapping*
Go another love story. I wonder how Fluttershy met Forest. I am happy about this story. Good luck with the next one.
This was a cute story. Kinda weird to see Fluttershy jealous. Love the name for the OC Forest. It's hard to pick one-word names for MLP characters. The only one that has really done well pony wise is the name Rarity in the show. I like how even though Fluttershy was a bit mean Rainbow Dash was able to see she was only acting that way because she liked Forest.
~LATEP