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Rainbow Dash.
Everypony affiliates that name with a pony who's brave, fearless, and just downright gutsy. But what most don't know is that beneath that confident front lies a small filly who still cries over an event that happened seventeen years ago.
Perhaps now it's time for her to go.
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I liked it but I has a sad now.
Now that I think about it this is the second one-shot that I've read recently in which the main character commits suicide, odd.
2468881 Hm....I don't mean to be part of a trend or anything. But tell me. What did you think of the story itself?
As for the sads, I do have an alternate ending planned for those of you who want it.
2468873 Well....I'm glad I got the desired effect.
2469184 Yay and as for the story itself, the flashback to when Rainbow was a filly seemed to fit her character at least in my opinion and it didn't feel rushed at all which is sometimes a problem with one-shots. Hmmm... grammatically everything looks good but I'm not an expert on that and I don't mind it that much anyway. RDs actions seem realistic for the situation and so were her reasons for not talking to any of her friends that day. That is all I can think of right now.
So sad:'(:'(
Yeah... A happy ending sounds good right now
This is the first story on the site where I actually cried a little.
This is an excellent way to transfer feels.
Wow I love it is there more cause I would love to read it
*reads* Hmm, sad, but good writing.
*reads this*
Wha- NO!
No- no- nooo- *sniffles* no-
alternate ending please
Hey dude, it's me Seth.
2471015 On the way, my friend.
2469542 You've no idea what that means to me. Thanks, I guess. Sorry for the crying, though. That was the intended purpose, so I hope you didn't cry that hard.
Good good my mane man
2471148 I'm sorry, did I give you the sniffles, Mel?
2471395 Almost done with it. I'm posting it soon, so keep an eye out!
I love it so good * hi five*
2473488 I'll go ahead and take that. Brohoof? /)
Yea brohoof
D'awwww! Loved that ending.
2473389 Truthfully, I was not expecting the suicide. I mean, that was THE WORST POSSIBLE THING
No, actually not. Just slightly derp-ressing
2473942 Ah, I see. Did you read the alternate ending I posted?
2473835 Glad you thought so, my friend. I hoped you guys would think that.
2474157 I did now. Not as good. This time the sniffles were from the possible onset of a cold, not feels.
I'm not sure which ending to like more. Both had me crying tears of joy. Suicide for she was finnaly with her parents or Living for she had Scootaloo for family... OH SWEET CELESTIA DEM FEELS!!!! THEY HURT!!!!!!!
INFINITE moustaches out of 5!!!
... ∞
2483825 Wow....thanks man. No idea someone would like it that much.
2484271 You're welcome oh brilliant writer!!
I like dis ending
I want to like this. I really do. But... I can't. I just can't. Because you used the wrong "their/there/they're." Twice.
Both times you need "they're," as in "they are."
Fix this and you have yourself another like.
Now onto the alternate happy ending!
I like the other ending better.
2490362 Whoops. Thanks for catching that. On my way to fix it now.
2490375 I'm glad you liked it.
2490362 Fixed it along with a bunch of other mistakes. Thanks again for catching them!
2490602 No problem. I liked the story when I read it and wanted to click the like button but that one thing really, really bugs me. But it is fixed and thus I clicked the button.
2490777 Thanks man. Seriously. I hate mistakes as much as the next guy.
Oh wow. I am literally sobbing my face off! BEST SADFIC EVER!!!!!!
2494796 Wow, thanks. Although, I really think that spot is taken by My Little Dashie. I'm sure you've read that, right? It was so sad......
Overall, the vocabulary you used was pretty fair for a fan-fiction and was well put together to add to that.
I do follow the Sad group here on FIMFiction and they labeled this under "Heart-Breaking". At first I didn't understand why, Rainbow's parent's deaths didn't seem to get to me at all. Then I got up to Rainbow's 'decision' and it got to me. 
Personally I think her parent's deaths should have had a little bit more detail behind them but hey, simple is practical sometimes. 
2507588 I understand where you're coming from. I couldn't really come up with more for their deaths, so I just went on with it.
I don't understand why she would commit suicide. I mean sure, she lost her parents at a young age, and sure, she is suddenly very depressed, but suicide is not a choice that can be decided that quickly. Also, where is Loyalty now Dash? Huh? She of all people wouldn't go rushing into this and would think of her friends first. I believe that this was very out of character for her to end her own life in this way. I especially think that your thought process and emotions of Dash before she suicides could be explored in greater depth, and would add meaning to the story. Also, I saw the suicide coming from a mile away, even if that was intended, it didn't have the impact it would have had, had it been more of a surprise.
Other than that it was an average story. because of grammar mistakes (incorrect usage of their/there/they're) that detracted from the overall effect of the story, and that this idea has been done many a time in the past, allow me to pass such judgment on this particular piece.
twas good both endings were well written
Wow, I love this ending so much more!
it's amazing!!!!
2551657 Thank you, my friend. Glad you enjoyed it.
2469184
Dammit Dash, don't you do it. Just tell your friends how you feel. That's simple too, right? Why do you have to be so full of pride over this? It's nothing to be ashamed of, in fact lots of ponies don't have families and I'm sure that they would be more than happy to have you as part of their adopted family. So, what do you say you just take a deep breath and come back to the middle of the cloud?
HA!!! And my mom thought I was an insensitive person who should never work a suicide hotline. I just needed the proper motivation is all. Still, does it make me a bad person that I would rather try to save a cartoon character than a real person? Meh, oh well. Great story by the way.
2473494
Alright, I like the second one much better. While the first one got a few minutes of stunned shock, the second one was more realistic (except maybe Scootaloo saving Rainbow, but hey maybe all those training sessions paid off right? I mean I know tons of small looking guys that are surprisingly strong for their size) and it even got me to cry a little bit. I can see why this was featured, good job and all that.
2815166 Thanks, I suppose....
Interesting take on things, though.
2815204 Wait, what? Featured? What do you mean?
2815225
Pretty sure it was, I only read fics from the feature box (mostly because I am kinda lazy about searching for stuff). If you didn't see it it should be there again pretty soon.
2815221
because I was pretty much like 
when I wrote that. 
Yep, no worries on the