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SaxPon3


I've not touched this in years, but I'm here I guess. Profile Pic by the wonderful KoaPony!

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My entry into Week 1 of EqD's Writer's Training Ground. The prompt: Not everything went as planned when Twilight undid her spell on Fluttershy.

Angel Bunny noticed that Fluttershy hasn't really been herself ever since the vampire fruit bat incident. She's been giving him weird looks, been easier to startle than normal, and at night the cottage just didn't feel right. All could just be side effects of turning into a vampire fruit pony and back, right? Besides, that nightmare is over.

But, when his friends start to be suspicious and dead animals turn up drained of blood, Angel starts to doubt his owner.

Could Fluttershy be a vampire?

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Comments ( 32 )

Darn it why didn't you described the details of the "meal" Fluttershy had with Angel at the end? Good story thou!

I'll read this, it looks like everyone rating:pinkiesmile:
After: now two ponies will scared me for a couple weeks.:fluttercry: stupid cupcakes I was less scared of it before I started the show:applejackunsure: HELP MEEEEE!!!! :raritydespair:

I feel like people don't realize she wasn't bitten by a vampire, she was bitten by a vampire fruit bat and they only drank apple juice straight from the apples. Even when she had the opportunity to bite one of her friends, she continually went for the apples. Of course, I guess that if she still had fangs at the end, it would be possible for Twilight to only have taken away the fruit bat part, and not the vampire part...

ignore me....

3706607 I know what you mean. I had an explanation for that, but there's a word cap that EqD put on the WTG entries.

Um I'm sorry to tell you some bad news. If you were going to submit this to the EQD contest, you may have to change it.

The word limit was 1500 and you have 1555.

I enjoyed your fic and I hope you still will be considered.

3706897 The extra 55 are from the author's note. The fic itself has exactly 1500. I'm sure I'll be fine.

3707481

Well good luck to you!

If you have a minute check my entry out.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/156285/lifes-just-batty

I wanted to go in a more different direction with the prompt.

I liked how you portrayed Angel.

3707584 I'll go ahead and check it out. :) And thanks. I'm glad you liked how I wrote Angel.

I enjoyed this fic a lot. :moustache: I made my way here from your post in the 'Shameless Self-Promotion Bureau' and I don't regret it. You've earned a fave and a follow from me.

3712591 Thank you, kind sir! I hope you enjoy my later entries in the WTG as much as you did this one! :twilightsmile:

I noticed a few words out of place, but all in all, it was an entertaining read. But personally, you're kinda spoiling it for us by being so direct. The reader's already figured things out the by the 500 word mark, so it's kind of a bummer. Though working with only 1500 words is hard :applejackunsure:

3712747 Yeah, I know what you mean. If we had more room to work with, it'd probably be much better. :ajbemused:

That being said, I plan on rewriting this in the future and making it better. Perhaps after the WTG is over? :pinkiesmile:

3712798
I hope you understand the WTG ends when the season ends. And I most certainly plan on being in this for the long haul :rainbowdetermined2:

Personally, if reception is good enough, I'll might end up continuing one of these stories. Then again, I've got bigger fish to fry...

3712806 Aye, I know that. And I too have bigger fish to fry. Specifically, an Assassin's Creed story that needs its next chapter ASAP....:twilightblush:

Predictable, I suppose. Still, vampire Fluttershy is much better than Edward the hunky sparkly wannabe vampire.

3718538 :ajbemused: I was hoping no Twilight jokes would show up on here. You just had to ruin that, eh Mel?

3718704 :eeyup: I have to make my mark somehow, eh?

3718731 I suppose you have a point.

I like this a lot. This is the first story I read with the pets point of view. And it was really well done! Nice job! :D :heart:

3753973 Thanks! I hope to do more of these pet POV stories in the future. :twilightsmile:

3753981
No problem!
I hope you do! I would look forward to reading them. :D

Comment posted by SaxPon3 deleted Jan 8th, 2014

3753987 Give me a follow and I'll be sure to please! :pinkiehappy:

3753995
You are now being....FOLLOWED DUN DUN DUUUUUUUUUN!!!!! :D :pinkiegasp::yay:

3754000 Yay! Another stalker gained. :pinkiecrazy:

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ROFL! ALL TEH STALKERS!!! XD :pinkiecrazy:

interesting, having the pets actually be the group for the story instead of the ponies. I enjoyed that, I haven't seen it before. this was quite enjoyable to read too, makes me want to write my own fanfic.

I'm going to assume that Fluttershy being a vampire has something to do with the magic Twilight cast on her. That's just my theory anyway. Could be wrong.

3804021 Your theory is correct. :twilightsmile:

I would've clarified that in the story itself, but the word limit that EqD put for that week of the WTG was 1500 words, and I hit that exactly with this story.

3812523 woot im so smart :pinkiehappy:

I don't know how you people write with a word limit. I would overflow whatever that limit would be I just know it. or itd be way to short. but question: since this was like a...challenge? (idk what its called) that mean there wont be a followup? id love to see that.

3812929 It's an interesting idea to say in the least.

However, as of now, I don't think I will create a sequel. On the other hand,. I may create more things from the pets' points of view.

The bird cleared his throat. “Very well. You see, it was but a fortnight ago when Fluttershy came to visit the library. She seemed uneasy, and she insisted on talking with Twilight in private. Thus, they retreated to her personal study.

I actually had to resist throwing my tablet across the room when I read the word fortnite.

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