Octavia is a normal pony by most standards, save her talent on the cello. She goes through her life as simply as she can, living in Ponyville with her roommate Vinyl Scratch. Life is good, and nothing breaks that harmony. Nothing, that is, until the Templars got involved. Octavia has a music box that has been in her family for generations, but when a spectator tries to kill her after a show, it's obvious that it's not a normal box.
Having now faced death in the face, Octavia has but one choice: to join the Assassins and save the world.
Art cover by ME. Rated Teen for violence with ponies.
Chapters (9)
hmmmm an interesting story so far, will be iteresting how it turns out ^.^ keep up the good work
Interesting most of the crossover of AC I see are with crappy OC's but this one look interesting, can't wait for more
2270260 Thank you. I try my best with OCs, and most of the time they turn out alright. Thanks for not thinking my writing was crap!
2270050 I'm also interested as well, as I am really just going where it takes me. I have a vague idea of what I want in the end, but everything in between is malleable. Suggestions, anypony?
ERMAHGERD MORE!!!! This is so freakin awesome!
2284426 Sure thing man. The second chapter is in progress as we speak.
Amazing amazing story!!
I love the concept you have going on! Can't wait for the next entry.
2286056 I'm glad you like it.I am working on the second chapter in any free time I have, so I hope to have the next chapter up soon, perhaps within the next week.
yea this looks amazing keep up the good work
2301028 I am, I promise. The second chapter is in progress, and hopefully, y'all will like this as much as the first one.
MOAR! MOAR! MOOOOOOOAR!
One chapter, and already at least two dead minions. The big boss is gonna have is work cut out for him. Wonder who he could be, though. . .
LOL
2315060 Hahaha, indeed who could it be?
2315184 Forgive me for deleting this for plot purposes. SPOILERS NOT ALOWED!
2315540 No this is THE WORST POSSIBLE THING!
JK I don't give two bits.
dood this is alsome.
2324311 Thanks bro. So is your profile pic.
I am intrigued.
2332661 Glad to see that.
This story is off to a great start; well done, mate.
Ha! I got first comment!
So backstories, those are usually helpful. Good. Also, this mysterious disembodied voice guy sounds like a real ***hole.
2365007 Indeed he does, my friend.
2365404 Well, I was a little surprised myself when I wrote that. Then I realized I was thinking about when Rainbow Dash was almost crying after they found Applejack and she was all like, "Darn it! Now you got me acting all sappy." From there, I figured if she would cry over a little fluff ball of feel, then she would sob over a such a sad story as Octavia's past.
On that note, what did you think of the past I wrote for Octavia?
2365444 Hehehe, well, I kind of had a little bit of depression in there while writing. The unnecessarily sad piano music didn't help either.
However, it was necessary, as almost every Assassin has a dark past, and that mysterious voice may have a hand(or rather, hoof, in this case) in the future. After all, he was the one that killed her.
*Hood
Also, when describing the hidden blades, spell out all numbers less than 20. Other than that, this was a great read! I'll look over the 2nd chapter tomorrow and give you my thoughts. I'll be tracking this.
2365842 Ugh...don't remind me of all those typos I made in chapter 1....
I fully intend to go back and edit chapter 1 now that chapter 2 is finished. And thanks for the review!
Great chapter, I liked Octavias back story and I'm guessing the mysterious voice is Discord but I suppose I'll find out for sure soon enough.
2366483 We shall see, my friend. We shall see. :)
Alright, here's my take on the newest chapter. The main thing that I've noticed here is the occasional lack of commas.
should be
Yeah, like that.
Plot-wise, everything went extremely well. What you might want to do in the future is keep Tavi's mom in play, as it is a huge motivational drive for her to find this disembodied voice.
THE VERDICT: For the chapter, 8.5/10. A few grammatical errors, but it didn't really take away form the story at all. I hope to see more of this later! Keep it up!
2369048 Thanks for the scoring! And I'll be sure to go back and fix that. :)
2369048 Don't worry, Tavi's mom and the voice are a HUGE part of this story, as my buddy Melvin would know.
2379796 Cool.
Aww, I was so excited to have 2 AC crossover story updates!
Hmm, there's nothing I can think of right now but if I do I'll comment again.
*puts forth idea anyways*
REFERENCES! Make a reference. To something good, like Doctor Who or Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy or one of the Leviathan books.
2443781 Don't worry. I'm kind of playing on Rick Riordan's writing style; all of the dramatic stuff will happen soon. What I've got planned will be plenty action and depressing stuff.
2443790 Glad you mentioned that. That's an excellent idea.
about to start reading this ... i think im gonna like this one
2486168 Hopefully you will.
2486706 I DID
2488163 Well I'm glad you did. The next chapter is in progress as we speak, so keep an eye out!
Lol i was thinking of the spy in tf2 when luna said "I think not"
2443873 man i am go glad someone like you reads the leviathan books that is my my fave serious
BUCK YEA NEW CHAPTER
2443873 Read them all. Steampunk for the win.
His unnatural eye is actually supposed to be red.
2531153 My apologies, friend. I'll fix that ASAP. I was going off of the picture you sent me, in which his eye was blue. Would you like neon red or crimson red?
2531215 Neon's good. On a common note, would you mind if I did a fanart illustration of that last line?
Next chapter hoof crossbows pls
2531951 Not at all; I'd love that actually. You don't mind if I use it, do you?