Rainbow Dash, the powerful mare bearing the Element of Harmony, through an unfortunate and unknown turn of events, finds herself in an entirely different world. But it's not a different world, only . . . a different time.
She finds herself over a thousand years in the past, thrust into a prophecy unknown to her and into a war with the demons of Tartarus, the weight of a world laying weak and quivering in her hooves all the while.
So this is kind of my Magnum Opus right here, I've spent the most time planning it, had the most editors and pre-readers go over it, and I'm pretty sure that I did a good job. So . . . did I?
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Well, I thinkest this hath great potential! I look forward to seeing where this goes
Awesome!!!! I think this has a really good potential, and can't wait for more.
Nice intro pic...
~Skeeter The Lurker
Ooo, very nice start!
~Skeeter The Lurker
Well. That's one way to make an exit...
Very specific prophecy, too.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Maybe if you upvote and favorite.
This is some good quality stuff.
I hope to see more.
Cant wait for more
You have my full and undivided attention sir.
That was not cheesy at all! This story is clearly written like an epic, well maybe not poetically but still epic! I just may enjoy this story, I'll comment further on the next chapter.
Wow! Okay I don't normally read Alternate Universe MLP fanfiction, but this one takes the cake! And I absolutely love descriptive stories!
I love how you made Commander Hurricane's character. You made him strong and cold, but also with a layer of logic and reasoning that can be interpreted as kindness. Sort of. Anyway that's not my point. My point is this is a well written chapter, and I absolutely loved it! I will most definitely be watching this story.
You, good sir, have earned a happy Pinkie Pie from me!
PS. I found some of his insults to the unicorns hilarious. "Pompous hag" was my favorite XDDD
This story is amazing! I'm going to die waiting for the next chapter. Can't wait to see the reactions when rainbow pops up. I'm also kinda hoping that hurricane and rainbow hook up. ;)
Dear Luna, I forgot all about this under a deluge of schoolwork! Now I feel terrible...
I can still edit if you want me to...
Cheesy? Uh, no...it wasn't. It was quite, to use an overused adejective, epic. It had a feel of a fantasy story giving us a perfect setting into the story. IT allows us to feel like we about to experience another wild ride with a pony we love so much.
The real question is...how come when Dash isn't in a fic meant to make us cry and tear up, she is in an epic adventure ready to kick some ASS?
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Because kicking ass is what Rainbow Dash does, of course.
This has potential. Work up your grammar and consistency. Keep the tone and pacing as solid as you have them. Good start.
Woah, nice story. Need more
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If you don't give me more I will end you. Btw up toe and favorite
Upvote*
When will this update?
Out of 100 favorited stories, this is the one I check for everyday.
EDIT: Heh heh, I just noticed that this story updated about an hour after I posted this...... Whoops.
I hope this is not going to have any "humans r EVIL!!!!!!1!!!1!" misanthrope bullshit.
Because that would make this story very hard to read.
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Don't worry; that's it.
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Hmmm...
How about that.
She's a legend. Or... Related to a legend.
~Skeeter The Lurker
YEEESSSSSSSS!!!! An update!!!! This story just got so much more epic!!!!!
Cheesy? Like they all said...hell no that was an awesome intro, it grabbed me instantly!
That was... Gripping to say the least. Certainly not cheesy. I'd eat my own hoof if that was considered cheesy (and if I happened to actually have a hoof rather than these peculiar hands). I have to admit, I am incredibly eager to sap tart the next chapter. Alas, the story is incomplete and so I must take my time to spare myself unnecessary heartache caused primarily by either impatience or withdrawal. Whichever sounds more serious as to get your pity.
I must sound like an obnoxious, overly-pretentious prat above. Please forgive me, it's one of my defaults for when I am rendered (almost, unfortunately) speechless. And it was either "obnoxious snob" mode or "fangirl" mode and I figured the former to be the lesser of the two evils.
Okay, you must update. No buts, no excuses, no backing out. PLEASE UPDATE! I'M BEGGING ON MY HANDS AND KNEES HERE!
please forgive me... and update... Please.
*cough* sorry... I lost my composure there.
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But what if I like having you under my thumb, causing you misery and angst?
On a serious note, I can't force myself to write if I don't feel like it. Last time I tried that, things were not fine and dandy.
I'm afraid you'll just have to wait.
On hiatus! I wanted to see where this went.
This story has been on hiatus for over a year now.
Honestly, I still love it and occasionally reread the current chapters. But I do have a question;
Do you have plans for this story? Or is it probably going to end up dead?
Not to trying to rush you or anything.
I just want to know.
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That's okay! Erm, in all honesty, it's probably dead. But I said probably. One of the main issues is this: I lost my manuscript for the fiction. I am also working on real books (you can read those too, if you want) but I was really excited for this story, so there is still hope. . . .
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Well, I'll guess I'll keep hoping then.
Anyway, about these real books your working on...
Do you write them on fiction sites like wattpad? Or is it something you have written but not publicly released?
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I do have a Wattpad, but I kind of hate it and only have stuff there 'cuz lots of other people have one and I'll get greater publicity. Here ya go!
http://www.wattpad.com/user/ArcanusScriptor
But you're probably gonna wanna wait, 'cuz I just uploaded a third chapter, son! You inspired me again, I guess, and I kinda felt for you sense I've been in a position like your's before and not liked it very much.
Glad to see you back! I was worried that the story was dead.
Yup glad to see you back
You sir, have just made my day.
And for the languages, hmm....
I'm gonna go with...
Dutch, Hungarian, Irish, Swedish, Czech, and Vietnamese.
Not sure how close that is, but at least I can say I tried.
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Ya got one—Irish. *Hint* there's once more Celtic, one more Slavic, and one more Germanic.
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I'm guessing the other Celtic language is Breton or something? I know it isn't Welsh, you've already used Irish, Manx is no longer spoken and Scottish Gaelic is too similar to Irish for you to use. I'm missing one. What am I missing? What'so the other Celtic language? Am I missing one? Some Welshie I am, huh.
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You know it's not Welsh? I'm afriad you don't, 'cuz that's what it is.
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Well, that's odd. I'm a native Welsh speaker so I'd have thought I'd recognise it. Is it by any chance South-Welsh? I know that is a completely different dialect to the North, so maybe that's why it didn't register.
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Well, when I say I mashed 'em all together, I don't mean I took choice words from them and mixed them; I mashed the words themselves, traits, grammar structure, and so on and so forth. That might have to do with why you didn't really recognize it. Any particular words might have started out as hylô but then had heileo [Irish for the same greeting] thrown at it and ended up like heileyô, not to mention the other two languages which could have taken heileyô to zdravheileyôe.
And I'm pretty sure that more people speak Manx than they do Breton, there's entire festivals and such.
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Ah! That makes sense! Sheesh, you had me worried as to whether I knew my own language, then! Okay, now I get it. I'm not going to attempt to guess the other languages, because I don't have a clue. The last fluent Manx speaker died in the 70's (Avatar: The Last Manxbender) so, yeah, you're probably right. I probably have sounded like a right idiot in this whole comment chain, but who cares, right? 'S all in good fun. I really want to learn Old Pegasus now. It sounds incredibly complicated but incredibly fun.
Nôs da!
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Well someone'll have to develop it first. Maybe I'll do that when I have a spare . . . five and a half years. Then, I'll hunt ye down and thrust the manuscripts and say "I did this all for you!"
A nos da i chi eich hun, hefyd!
( Mae'n debyg werth nodi bod Dydw i ddim mewn gwirionedd yn rhugl yn y Gymraeg eto; . Y rhan fwyaf o hyn yw Google Translate Peidiwch fi Cymraeg i farwolaeth. )
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Much obliged! I'll be waiting for those manuscripts!
Wel, er bod ei Gymraeg chi'n waith Gwgl, mae'n eithaf dda! Gall deuall yn iawn.I fod yn hollol onest rwan, rhaid imi defnyddio y rhaglen hon weithiau - am y geiriau mawr 'na, ti'n weld. A hefyd, mae'n anhygoel fod y codi the yn rhoi'r ymdrech i mean i deuall y iaeth yn y lle cyntaf! Diolch yn ofnadwy - rydych wedi wneud fy niwrnod.
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Off-topic question, my Welsh compatriot: How different is the Patagonian dialect of Welsh from the one you speak? Reason I ask being that I was doing research for a possible future novel of mine and for reasons I don't feel like fully explaining this lead me to Celtic tribes and I learned about the Welsh immigration to Patagonia in South America a century or two ago.
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Patagonia? Now that's an interesting question - and one I will try to answer to the best of my knowledge. I've visited Patagonia once before, for a school event a few years back. To be honest, despite the migration being, as you said, some centuries ago, the dialect is very similar. Both the Welsh and the natives of Patagonia speak similar Welsh with the main difference being in slang, with the odd word being different. For instance, saying "llefrith" instead of "llaeth" for milk. All in all, the two versions of the language are very similar, and in some instances the Patagonians actually speak better Welsh (my people have the unusual tendency of speaking what I like to call "Wenglish", where we speak Welsh but randomly throw in an English word without realising it). I hope this answers your question! If not, or if you have any other questions, just tell me and I'll try my best to answer.
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Thanks a bunch! I know it may be a bit unfair to assume that just because you're Welsh you know literally everything about Wales and Celtic languages and cultures and such, but I appreciate your help. And I may come back to you from time to time if the internet can't answer whatever question I need an answer to.
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Hey, I'm glad to help! It's a good way to test my knowledge and memory, so I'm fine with it. In fact, I welcome it. Besides, if I didn't have a clue do what the answer may be, I'd have simply said that. If you do have any questions, I'm always here (as sad as that undoubtedly sounds).
So when's the next chapter coming out? This story is basically the only thing making me visit this site once in a while Dx