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    Idle chitchat between Discord and Lero from the Xenophilia world
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  • 2w, 3d
    A New Ask The Swapped Ponies Is Out!


    Whew!  It's been a while in the making, but I got it in!  It's called:  The Importance Of Combat Quips.

    Come in, enjoy, and have new questions ready to ask the Swapped ponies!  

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  • 3w, 3d
    Two Previews

    ...One from my own Divided Rainbow, one from Into The Hedge.  Let's start with Into The Hedge...


    Twilight instantly recognized him as a creature of influence. Having grown up in Canterlot and lived for many years in the Royal Palace, she had seen plenty of his type before; wealthy, pompous, bloated individuals who would trample anypony to accomplish their agendas. And always with smiles to distract you from the daggers they hid behind them.

    Apparently, some trends were universal.

    The goblin looked over each of the newcomers appraisingly before settling his gaze on the Lost. His smile seemed to grow wider as he walked forward.

    “Do I have the pleasure of addressing the leader of this lovely company, good sir?” he asked.

    The Lost exited the craft, stepping between several of the brutes, crossed his arms and squared his stance. “You do,” he answered neutrally.

    The goblin bowed with a flourish of his hand. “Then I bid you good morrow and warm welcomes to the great township of Gladesrest, good sir,” he said. “Allow me to introduce myself. Among friends and partners, I am known Gilded Jack and I have the honorable distinction of bearing the title of Master of the Town.” He rose from his bow and offered a hand to the Lost. “To whom does this humble hob have the pleasure of addressing?”

    The Lost offered his own hand. “You may simply call me the Lost.”

    “But of course, good sir, an appropriate alias. I realize that men of your profession must keep a low profile. But let me assure you, unlike other, less civilized townships, Gladesrest is very accommodating to those that curry favor among the Gentry and procure merchandise on their behalf.”

    “...Of course, Master Jack,” said the Lost.

    The goblin turned his gaze back towards the rest of the group. “And shall I assume that these… very lovely visions accompanying you are your…”

    “My compatriots, yes,” said the Lost. He positioned himself between them and Jack, forcing the goblin’s attention back on himself. “I must say it is rather curious that the Master of the Town would greet us personally.”

    “But of course, good sir, but of course!  I can always sense a grand opportunity when one comes across.” Jack tapped his elongated nose with a pudgy finger.

    “And when one such as you, that is to say, a respectable man of the trade comes to my city, I am always eager to personally greet them.”

    The Lost thought for a moment. Then an arrogant smirk crossed his face and he shrugged his shoulders nonchalantly. “I know the feeling, Jack,” he said. “Can’t tell you how many times I’ve had to cross off some pack of punks thinking they can do business without a proper patron. Honestly, it’s bottom feeders like that that give my trade such a dirty reputation!”

    As the girls glanced at each other in hidden uncertainty, the goblin burst into laughter. “Indeed, indeed! These so called ‘freelancers’, always thinking they can get one over on their betters. But you, Master Lost, you have the honor of such a distinguished patron. I knew instantly the moment the pixies alerted me that you were a gentleman that I could do business with!”

    The Lost shook Jack’s hand again. “You said it, Jack,” he said, then jerked a thumb back at the women behind him. “Now then, we’ve got some good loot to trade and I’m looking for some fresh gear for myself and my crew. We need weapons, supplies, the works.  Also some place to put our feet up for a while. None of this flea-infested crap, we want the best you’ve got.”  The Lost’s arrogant smile showed off a budding set of sharp teeth that reminded Rainbow of a hungry wolf she once met.

    Gilded Jack chuckled and motioned for the to the guards. A pair of brutes moved to a large spoked wheel and began turning it, raising the inner gate. “But of course, Sir,” said Jack. “Allow me to escort you and your companions through the canals. Since this is your first visit to our city, best that I show you where to go. Goodness knows we’ve seen our fair share of travellers get lost in the Market’s waters.”

    The inner gate had been raised, revealing another enclosed area. This was a place teeming with more soldiers. Some were more of the large, brutish bipeds, while others were taller and more lithe, their long limbs holding wooden bows or, as the Lost instantly recognized, long muskets. Kyria was allowed to propel the punt forwards and the gate was closed behind them.  The Lost followed Gilded Jack along the wooden docks to a spot where a few other, sleeker gondolas were tied off.

    The red-skinned leader gave one last growl before stomping off towards the battlements. “Ogres,” commented Gilded Jack. “They are not very bright but they certainly have their uses. Now then, if you would allow one of my guards to accompany your own craft, you would be more than welcome to join me on my own craft. A simple precaution, I can assure you.”


    For Full Context: Into The Hedge, Chapter 8: Welcome To Gladerest

    Or read this story from its beginning here:  Into The Hedge, Prologue: The Silken Harpist.

    And now... an early sneak peek of Divided Rainbow's thirty-third chapter!  


    As Twilight Sparkle lay face-up on the floor, staring at the fevered eyes and quaking cutie mark of Rainbow Dash, her rapidly-working mind jumped to thoughts of Spike and Discord.  

    Spike had gotten angry that one time and wrote to Celestia asking for Discord to put him under his Bewitchment.  Through some means, Celestia had contacted Discord after getting Spike’s letter.  And Discord had come to Spike to alter his memory.  

    Her conclusion: she needed to get to Spike, pronto, and have him write to Celestia, asking to have Discord alter Rainbow’s memories.  The draconequus had already done it once… back after Lero had tried going to Rainbow’s cottage to show her all her old Wonderbolts and weatherpony stuff.  

    “Okay, Rainbow Dash,” said Twilight, in her most pacifying tone, getting up back up to a stand.  “We’re… we’re going to get to the bottom of this.  We’re your herdmates, there’s no need to lash out at us...”  

    “It’s wrong!” Rainbow moaned.  “It feels like acid’s been poured onto my skull!  Those moves… those moves I used on Honeydew… how could I have possibly…?”  

    “Don’t think about any of it,” Lyra told Rainbow firmly. “Just do not let yourself think about it.  Refuse to.”

    Rainbow’s face scrunched up, as if she was trying to shove the offending thoughts away… before she let go an anguished cry. “I can’t!”

    A screaming Sicklefin ran past the three of them into the next room, her entire hindquarters on fire.

    Their gazes followed the horrific sight, before Twilight snapped out of it.  “Look, girls, this isn’t the place for chatter.  Rainbow, Lyra, get yourselves up against me.  I’m going to teleport us outside this building; then we can talk.”  

    The other two mares pressed themselves as closely against either side of Twilight Sparkle as they could.  It was downright unnerving, how Rainbow Dash shivered against her as if she were standing in a freezer.  As though to be extra-sure, Lyra Heartstrings wound her tail tightly around Twilight Sparkle’s.  Rainbow Dash saw this happen and wrapped her own tail around Twilight and Lyra’s as well.  The unicorns gave the pegasus reassuring looks.  

    Twilight Sparkle let her horn fill up with a large amount power.  In her mind, she pictured the exterior of the quarry mill.  When teleporting, it was always important to visualize a vacant, unoccupied area, away from other living beings… in order to avoid the horror that was ‘teleportation splicing.’  

    There had been a point southeast of the mill’s front entrance, a point that was quite a few yards away from where Corporal Wolf Pack and the ponies in her squadron would probably be standing.  Wildflowers had been there...

    * * *

    Perhaps Twilight’s own agitation had distracted her.  Perhaps Exit Wound had cast some sort of spell on the quarry mill, itself, preventing teleporters from teleporting in and out of the building.  Perhaps all her recent injuries and fighting had fatigued her.  Whatever the case, Twilight Sparkle and her herd-sisters now found themselves standing inside some sort of office instead of a small grove of wildflowers.  Twilight knew immediately that she was still within the Boulder & Daughters Quarry Mill because she could hear Sicklefins in other rooms, yelling loudly.  

    This side office was a very unimportant-looking room; a metal desk, two filing cabinets, and lots of undisturbed dust.  The door was closed, so the strange cold mist hadn’t crept inside.  Twilight had a hunch that they could hide in this place successfully for a long time if they all kept quiet.  But Rainbow Dash wasn’t really cooperating on that account.  

    “It’s wrong, it’s really wrong, the whole thing doesn’t make sense,” the pegasus was saying, baring her teeth in a hostile way, like one of her animals, breathing hard, foaming spittle building along her lips.  

    Cozy Flow’s Dreamless Doze; yes, that’d be the spell to use on Rainbow Dash.  Not only was it a powerful slumber spell, Rainbow Dash’s sleep would need to be a dreamless one.  With her sanity crumbling like this, Twilight didn’t want to think what kind of nightmares her subconscious might concoct.  

    “No matter how I look at it, I don’t understand it…!”  

    Then Twilight could levitate Rainbow onto her back and try teleporting again.  This time, she’d try appearing at the quarry mill’s front entrance, and then…

    “Of course you don’t,” Lyra told Rainbow Dash, reasonably.  “You’re lacking a vital piece of information.  Information I have.”

    Both Twilight and Dash snapped their heads around at their aqua-coated herd-sister.  “You have?”  They responded in baffled unison.

    When Lyra placed her hoof on the Swapped pony’s shoulder, she was not attacked for it, Rainbow’s attention focused on her, desperate for the explanation.   “Now, Rainbow, I need you to keep it together, and stay with me on this.  Can you do that?  Because I am telling you the information you need.”

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  • 7w, 1d
    Preview Of Next Upcoming 'Ask The Swapped Ponies'

    Draziw Asks:

    Dear Twilight,

    Do you believe cutie marks are a manifestation of a pony's destiny or a representation of a pony's driving interest?

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    My personal belief is that the former stems from the latter, that a pony’s driving interest plays a large part in determining her destiny.  Here’s an example: if swimming is my passion, then I am destined to get wet.  If garbage collecting is my passion, I am destined to get stinky.  

    She smiles.

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    And I believe that cutie marks play into both.

    DRAZIW

    If a cutie mark is linked to destiny, would that mean a pony's destiny is undetermined until his or her cutie mark finally appears? Or is it set at birth and later revealed through the cutie mark?

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    It can be tempting to believe that one’s life is ‘set at birth,’ but I don’t.  I think back to some of those alternate universes which I saw in my dreams.  Like me, those other Twilight Sparkles were born as unicorns with a phenomenal level of magic power.  But one became a farmer.  One became Captain of the Wonderbolts.  And I became the Element of Magic.  

    She smiles.

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    So it’s not so much who you were born, as how you decide to use the abilities you were given at birth.  As well as your overall attitude, and how you react to things.  And birth is too early for anything like that.

    DRAZIW

    If a cutie mark's meaning has to be interpreted, does that mean a single cutie mark can have multiple meanings?

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    It can.  Depends on the pony.  

    DRAZIW

    How does The Swap know which meaning to use as a compulsion for the affected pony? How does The Swap even know how to interpret the cutie mark in the first place?

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    (laughs a little)

    You don’t wanna know HOW close I almost came to saying, ‘You should go ask the Swap.’

    She sits herself on the couch.

    TWILIGHT SPARKLE

    Let’s see… I think The Swap first considers what’s possible on a PHYSICAL scale.  Take Rarity, as she is now.  The old Rainbow Dash… her biggest ambition was to become a Wonderbolt.  But unicorns can’t be Wonderbolts, any more than they can live underwater.  So the Swap settled on having Rarity refocus on weather.   From there… um… it interprets the cutie mark like… like a… what’s it called… like a caricature!  Yes!  Let’s say you have a nose that’s slightly larger-than-average.  Sit in front of a caricaturist, and she’ll make that nose your entire face.  Whatever’s most conspicuous about you as a person; it’ll take it and exaggerate it further.   That’s how the Swap would interpret your personality traits, and pass them onto another.

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  • 12w, 1d
    Perhaps This Is Simply Karma, Finally Catching Up To You

    Finally, he collapsed to his side, mindful of the woman beneath him.

    “Wow,” he said raggedly. “That… that was…”

    “Unbelievable,” she finished.

    A moment passed as they caught their breaths, Rarity’s perfect breasts heaving beneath the furs.

    She truly was an angel.  She made him feel so blessed.  Being in love with a girl as sweet and good and unconditionally loving as Rarity felt absolutely soul-cleansing.  And that was no small matter in a hell like this.

    Hell…

    The voice now speaking in Lero’s head wasn’t that of the Lost, nor that of any telepathic ‘outsider.’  The voice was that of Lero’s own self-condemnation.  

    Hell is for sinners… like you...

    But he wasn’t any such thing!  He was an innocent victim in all this.  His memories of this place might not all be there, but he still knew enough to know that whatever he might’ve done, it had been done under duress, it had only been necessary for survival...

    Excuses…

    No! He was a-

    ...Killer… Murderer… what else…?  The Lost WAS you.  Is STILL you.

    Unwelcome grief and shame threatened to flood his heart.  

    On one hand, there is no denying this fact: when you escaped to Equestria, you did everything in your power to turn over a new leaf.  But while your self-induced amnesia may have erased your memories, nothing can erase your deeds.  Did a man such as you even DESERVE the luxury of a second chance to begin with?  

    Equestria was such a funny place.  With all its many reversals, The Swap was practically just a drop in the bucket.  

    A world where magic was a legitimate science.  A world where equines were not beasts of burden, but the dominant species.  A world where unicorns, pegasi, minotaurs and dragons existed, but men didn’t, (or at least hadn’t for the longest while.)    

    And then was the matter of the girls acting as valiant bodyguards of the boys.  How wholeheartedly his own girls had embraced that role, especially his sweet lead mare!  First Rainbow Dash, and then Rarity… each proudly playing ‘knight’ to his ‘princess.’

    But… pony or human, male or female… one thing could not be denied: his lead mare made for a far nobler, worthier ‘knight’ than HE ever had.  Just ask Old Mossbeard.

    Perhaps this is simply karma, finally catching up to you.  

    “What’s wrong, darling?” asked Rarity, who sensed the gnawing doubt in her lover.


    For Full Context: Into The Hedge, Chapter 7: The Frozen Marshes

    Or read this story from its beginning here:  Into The Hedge, Prologue: The Silken Harpist.

    Kindly leave all commentary on the Into The Hedge page, instead of this blog.

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  • 12w, 4d
    Steakeos: New Chapter Up!

    It's the story series we all thought would never again be updated!  Many heartfelt thanks, Zontargs, for proving us wrong!  

    Check it out here:  Door's On The Left!

    Kindly leave all commentary on the Steakeos page, as opposed to this blog.  

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I feel like the characterization differs a bit from the original, but the plot is somewhat promising.

Well the quality is on par with the main story. The general feel and atmosphere is the same, which is a BIG factor of playing in someone else's alt. universe.

I eagerly await more.

I feel like Rarity is off somehow, but I do really want to see where this goes.

Oh my stars, it actually exists.

Bravo! :raritystarry:

Not bad for an A/U here. There are a few things that I found rather off-putting however. I am not very fond of using CAPS and/or bold letters for emphasis when writing, and I'm sure that I'm not the only one who feels this way. While you can use caps to express yelling and loudness, it simply becomes some what of a tacky eyesore when used to emphasize a sentence. I would attempt to find another way to get your points across.

There are spelling and grammar issues throughout the story, but I'm pretty terrible with that myself so I wont waste your time trying to pick out what I found there. Just know that they are there and probably should get fixed. i.e.

    

"Her Still Way sensei wrote her a letter, and now she’s traveling aboard..."

Your story's summary at it's title page should be shortened. As of right now it sits at about 400 words, when a short paragraph at best is all that's needed.

The comedic dialogue between Dash and Lero while at Rarity's was a little awkward as well, but that's only my opinion.

So on the positive side, I really like the idea you have going here. Its a really nifty "What if..." situation that deserves to get written. Keep it up and just try and smooth out the wrinkles with your finished product. What you have here is a decent rough draft and it deserves to be molded into something even more awesome. Maybe try passing it by several editors in one of the groups on here, or try braving the "training grounds" on ponychan. What ever you end up doing though, please keep it up, I want to read what you come up with for this story.

Oh! another story I can check out in the the leroverse awesome! concept is good but how's the execution? (Begins reading)

alright all done. my honest thought? I really like the promise this story provides its well written there wasn't anything jarring about this as story wise, that joke between lero, rare and dash however was a tad TAD bit strange hilarious non the less though I loved it xD

ah yes just as absinthe said his name I had a horrified face as well as I stared at his name (who names there kid that?!)

so please continue! I want more! (Holds poridge  bowl out towards you)

Wow o.o I didn't expect rarity to have her thoughts be like this :/ makes me sad actually anyhow the chapter was nicely done! to the next :D

Ooh, a Xenoverse version of Magical Mystery Cure! Also, at the end of chapter 2, "High Ho Silver, Away!"

Dark? meh. When people discussed this idea, a comedy seemed far more appropriate. Making this into a dramasplosion... :pinkiesick: meh.

Same principle applies to running; in terms of both speed and endurance.
Its likely Rarity is unaware of well most anything about humans but this one actually made me giggle a little considering primitive humans primary method of hunting was "persistence hunting" involving chasing an animal until it died from exhaustion or fear, sometimes for days without resting. Humans may not be the fastest true but in endurance there is no animal on this planet that can maintain our level of activity for anything even approaching the same amount of time. When the spell hits her rewrote memories are going to be very appreciative of this fact :raritywink:.

This seems a lot like Xenophilia. No, correction; it seems almost exactly like Xenophilia by Anonpony Dashie. I'll have to read it to be sure, but I'm a bit wary of the originality of this.

>>2451342

"Its likely Rarity is unaware of well most anything about humans but this one actually made me giggle a little considering primitive humans primary method of hunting was "persistence hunting" involving chasing an animal until it died from exhaustion or fear," sometimes for days without resting."

--  Hey, good observation!  I honestly never considered that angle!   On one hand you are right: even though Rarity and Lero are both friends, she understands his humanity only on a superficial level.

On the other hand, (and in all fairness to Rarity,) Lero is not a prehistoric nomad.  Fit as he is, I don't see Lero as the sort of guy who'd have the physical or psychological stamina to pursue an animal for days without resting until it died from exhaustion or fear.   Especially when he has less tiring and time-consuming methods of filling his belly... such as buying food from a store.    

--  When the spell hits her rewrote memories are going to be very appreciative of this fact.

Just wait and see!  :)

>>2451554

"This seems a lot like Xenophilia. No, correction; it seems almost exactly like Xenophilia by Anonpony Dashie. I'll have to read it to be sure, but I'm a bit wary of the originality of this."

--  Please do read it!  

>>2451254

"Dark? meh. When people discussed this idea, a comedy seemed far more appropriate. Making this into a dramasplosion...  meh."

--  I'm curious, do you dislike "dramasplosions" in general, or just the idea of drama being applied to the premise of this story?

>>2451571 modern human vs. modern horse landspeed and endurance The chat group I am on occasionally discusses Xenophilia and I hammered out an idea once of Lero et all in the crystal empire while other nations/species discussed opening trade and Lero wins over the Griffons by going off on a hundred kilometer weekend hike to go ice fishing while everyone is busy hammering out deals.

Did you actually at least inform the original author of Xeno that you were going to write something?  I mean, I know anonauthor is extremely permissive where that's concerned, but I admit, I'm a little leery of this if you didn't at least make a token effort to give credit where it's due.

Story summary is too long.  No credit was given to the original author and their story.  Fairly sure you probably didn't at least be somewhat courteous and ask the original author for permission either.

:facehoof:

I'd ease up a little on the caps lock, but otherwise I like where this is going.  Keep it up!

Faved, and I'll be keeping an eye on this, but I do have a large problem with the plot:

Twilight has to know something's gone wrong - otherwise she has no reason to turn things back.

Going by your summary, Lero will also know things are wrong, otherwise he wouldn't be trying to convince them of anything. If he was unaware, then it would just give Twilight something else to freak out about.

So why doesn't Lero just bugger off for a week or so whilst Twilight sorts out the spell? Or even just move in with her, and out from with Rarity, for "more highly contaminatable magical procedures" or somesuch.

Definitely has potential, so cautiously optimistic.

>>2452108

"Twilight has to know something's gone wrong - otherwise she has no reason to turn things back."

-  I assure you, she WILL be aware that something's amiss.  Just like in the TV episode.  

Going by your summary, Lero will also know things are wrong, otherwise he wouldn't be trying to convince them of anything.

-  Yes, that is true, Lero will also be conscious Things Are Not Right.  

So why doesn't Lero just bugger off for a week or so whilst Twilight sorts out the spell?

-  To tell you would be spoilers.  But I assure you, the reasons for what he does reason WILL make sense.  

Or even just move in with her, and out from with Rarity, for "more highly contaminatable magical procedures" or somesuch.    

-  Spoiler territory.  Will be revealed.  

Definitely has potential, so cautiously optimistic.

Yay!  Glad you think so!

Damn, I'm usually quicker to respond to new Xenophilia projects. Sorry, m'friend. I'll make it up to you by following your story fanatically, and good luck to you!

>>2449744

This is actually why I'm enjoying it so much. Lero is usually written as a super-eloquent, borderline whipped man-puppet devoid of opinion. I like that the author is breathing some life into him.

Just to begin:

With no way of returning to his home world, he rolled up his sleeves and fashioned a new life for himself in this world of sentient ponies

You mean SAPIENT. Every animal is sentient; they can feel after all.

Its has potential, I'm curios about Lyra being a martial art artist in this story instead of playing the Lyra, must be something with Xenophila o well I want to see where this is going, I'm kind of curious about what is his job, or if he had mention before that between the animals humans eat were cows.

Also, if he spent so much time in the Everfree, does that mean that he at some point was force to be a hunter?

I wonder if the ponys know about the human ability to create weapons rather quickly.

P.S: If this story is heading were I think is heading I can't wait to see what Rarity will do, and if she will be having feelings in the long run (spoilers, I know, I know, but yeah i'm curious about that)

Wait, did Lero just plummet several hundred feet into a bramble forest? Dude must be tougher than he looks...

Oh God here goes @w@ I can't wait for more :D this is gunna get good :3 I liked the dream lero had lero the stallion and RD the human ^^

Now the shenanigans begins.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Give me more:heart::scootangel:

Good thing that spell only affect, the elements, I don't want to think what would have happen if Pinkie and Celestia switch, cutie marks.

And Rarity, must walk A LOT, if Lero is almost reaching minotaurus countries.  Men I can't wait to see, the REAL fun begin, and watch Rarity all mushi and mellow toward Lero.

P.S: The weird dream was Lero in antropormorfic, pony form, or full pony form?

it begins...

>>2466623

Yeah, something like that,

I just gave Lero a lot MORE brambles, just to be on the safe side.

You're so generous. Owie...

Poor Lero, and that spider is so clever using him as bait. At least Rarity is going to save the day. Much to Lero's confusion.

I imagine that when Lero dies his soul might be debated over by whatever higher power exists. Twilight would petition for his soul to go to pony afterlife.

... All right, I concede. It is possible. Unlikely, but possible.

Now explain the shock of being stabbed thousands of times and the inevitable sepsis. :twilightsmile:

>>2471690

"... All right, I concede. It is possible. Unlikely, but possible.

Now explain the shock of being stabbed thousands of times and the inevitable sepsis."

Yay!  "Sepsis!"  I just learned a new word!  

My explanation is: Lero's body is blessed with the same resistance to death as Rasputin.  He CAN be killed, but he can take a LOT of punishment.  

>>2471673

Yep, Twilight would.  That'd be a neat little debate to see!

>>2471752 Perhaps part of his, ah, prior experience included certain enhancements to make him more durable so the fun could be doubled. For them, obviously. He wasn't meant to have fun, that would ruing the game.

Aaaaaaanyway yes, I promised something more constructive and then completely disappeared. To be frank constructive criticism isn't my thing but I wanted to encourage you to keep going with this. Despite the rather icky content of the current chapter there's been a lot of light-hearted and entertaining moments so far. Everything has been just... just fine. :twilightsmile:

>>2471773

"Perhaps part of his, ah, prior experience included certain enhancements to make him more durable so the fun could be doubled."

--  'Enhancements' for durability, you say?  :pinkiehappy:  I love the way you think, sir!  

Aaaaaaanyway yes, I promised something more constructive and then completely disappeared. To be frank constructive criticism isn't my thing but I wanted to encourage you to keep going with this. Despite the rather icky content of the current chapter there's been a lot of light-hearted and entertaining moments so far. Everything has been just... just fine.

--  Well, I'm glad you approve!  I'll tell you this: in spite of every horrible thing Lero's gone through in this chapter... I assure you that "Divided Rainbow" is not meant to be a gorefest horror story.   The reason why I subjected him to the likes of the Bramble Tower and Mr. 7... it'll all be made plain as the story progresses, I promise.  

Please, if you could, spread the word to all your friends about this story!

Well, Lero, just got Frodo in his ass, and was torture for who knows how many days. I bet he still paralyzed and in his condition, returning to Ponyville will be suicidal, his only option is that when Rarity kill that spider (And she will make slowly) she will take Lero to the minotaur country as fast as she can't (unless she knows the teleportation spell) and boy if it will be confuse it, when Rarity will start to pounce Lero with quick kiss, depth kiss and french kiss, something tells me he will reach the minotaur country cover in lipstick

owch! thorns from hell @w@ damn this chapter was intense! looks like rarity will have her revenge completly and utterly Pissed Off!

Well, that bit with the spider eating the minotaur was downright terrifying and nauseating. I have never been afraid of spiders, but I'm starting to reconsider. :pinkiesick:

>>2474721

I actually really did a lot of research on many different species of spiders before settling on just how Mr. 7 hunted prey.  

They're ALL rather frightening creatures -- as much for their behavior as their appearance.  Spiders feed by liquifying the insides of their prey, and cannibalism is VERY common among them, (a few spider species ONLY feed on OTHER spiders.)  They can be incredibly cunning for creatures of such a small size, (easily able to outthink the insects that serve as their prey.)

I wanted to capture some of that ruthless cleverness with Mr. 7, instead of having him be just a dumb ugly bug with too many legs, like most fantasy stories.      

His world keeps falling apart the more Rarity helps.

rainbow dash cutie mark or rarity i am confused.:raritycry:

>>2477419

Lero-verse version of, I think, the last or last but one episode of season 3. Twi mucked a spell and switched everyone's cutie marks but hers in the Mane 6. In this version it happened while Dash was trying to rescue Lero from freefall over the forest the town they're going to now is named after. Of course he doesn't know what happened so he's freaking out due to Dash's love and loyalty, and a few other things, being switched into Rarity while Dash ended up with Fluttershy's traits.

>>2477419

Even if you haven't had the opportunity to watch the Magical Mystery Cure episode for yourself... I do have this bit written into my story:

"When the trio of diamonds faded off Rarity’s body, it was like a puppet’s strings were cut.  The fashionista fell face-forward against the side of her own sewing machine, and just remained that way, unmoving, until the mark which had vanished from Rainbow Dash’s flank reappeared on her own. "

... Is it weird that I'm beginning to prefer Rarity over Rainbow Dash?

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