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I miss the days--to all my fans and supporters, you were great. I leave a ghost, honest but neglected promises, and just the tip of the worlds I wished to share...
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Expect bigger and better things in this fic, folks. The only way to go from here is up.
Damn...also it's gourd not goard >> <<
Yay! Work won't suck tonight!!
If I haven't already mentioned it in every format I have access to, I love this series. And this is a beautiful first chapter. The part with Jack and Dash makes my heart melt. It's so perfectly in character, and so touching at the same time. And the Spike and Rarity part is so awkward and sweet. Darn you guys, taking an awesome action fic and giving it an equally awesome heart!
And by "darn you" I mean "write faster!"
*stoked*
This was well worth the wait you guys. I had a small amount of worry that it might suffer from sequel-itis but you did not disappoint. Keep up the good work. Also,
Coffee, ham omelets and a side of sausage.
Unless I'm reading that wrong, shouldn't that be ham, omelets?
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You can put ham inside your omelette for maximum southern-american breakfast.
Heck, it's almost as south as biscuits 'n' gravy, I tell you what.
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Could be, if they're having both ham AND omelets. But pretty sure Merc meant they're having 'ham omelets'. As in, an omelet with ham in in it.
Yay, sequel! I really like the intro to this new mission thing, and how the characters don't seem to have immediately bounced back, completely unscathed from their previous foray into law breaking. I actually laughed when Spike walked in on Dash and AJ, and later when he fell into the pool. Poor guy can't catch a break (or maybe he can, considering he got rescued by naked Rarity. You win some, you lose some
) Anywho, loving this, and I'm super excited for the next bit, whenever its ready 
D'awww dat AppleDash!
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I tried my best on it, coach.
Wait, only four thousand words? This is a multichapter, right? I haven't read it yet, but I'm seriously gonna be disappointed if this is less than ten thousand words long.
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Someone either forgot about or didn't read my blog saying that the sequel had become longer than the first...quite a few weeks ago.
Also, the great big Incomplete at the bottom there, heh.
Don't you worry. The phrase 'Be careful what you wish for' comes to mind, heh.
Ah, alright. This is a multichapter. Disregard my previous objection.
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Ah. No I didn't read that. Woops.
So, how do you guys handle collabing? I know when I did it, we divided the characters between the two of us, and wrote it in gdocs with one of us handling the POV character, and the other handling their characters reactions. How did you guys go about writing this? Was it in a shared gdoc, or did you trade documents back and forth?
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For the most part, it's a back and forth between characters on a Gdoc, yeah. But on occasion, we all divided sections in the doc, and had free reign. In the first one, I was a sorta pseudo-DM, doing scene transitions, events and the like. In this one, PC's running the show and so me and JJ are more of the reactionary force, since the big guy's got the thing planned out already.
Awesome! It's finally here!
This was worth the wait!
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As Merc said, we each had primary control of a pair of characters. That sort of came about more accidentally, really. And there's a little back and forth. Merc had primary control of the first one--it was his idea, he added the actual plot, and JJ and I just played our characters' responses. (In all honesty, the first one was, excluding the flashbacks, almost 100% reactionary. We just kind of kept going, throwing things in as we went along.) And this one was my turn (and JJ has the next one!), though again, I tried not to plan too much, because I felt the mostly reactionary way we wrote the first one was our biggest strength. Of course, as for the larger narrative overarching the stories and, especially, the 'verse we're making, that's just us kind of bringing up our ideas and discussing them.
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Few people take a look at a just published story with 40K+ words and say, "Yeah, I'll read that right now." And, honestly, if you give up on this story just because it'll be chaptered...you'll be missing out on a pretty fan-bloody-tastic story, friend.
FINALLY!
You know, I really like how you guys do your synopses for these stories. Interested to see where this goes, and to learn the details about why exactly they have such a strong vendetta against Celestia.
You bloody bogans better make this a good story or I will hunt you down with my jarate and bushwacka!
Nah I'm kidding, loved your last story, had some good detail and context.
Also I'm not sorry for shooting jack last story, sorry Sheila it was just business.
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Hey Sniper. Spy called, he wanted his knife back--he thinks he left it in your spine.
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This seemed somewhat relevant.
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*looks at his back, sees knife protruding out*
Would ya look at that.
Graaaaaaaahhhhhhh!
Stupid bloody spies!
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"Gah! Hear me, man? Gah!"
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Considering I've done both synopses so far, that means a lot. Thanks, man. Hope you enjoy.
YES. THIS CHAPTER. ALL OF MY YES.
Nice chapter. Looking forwards to more.
I do however think that you should have given Twila's flashback more of an intro/setup than what you did. I saw this because one moment she is talking to AJ and the next it goes straight into the "Flashback" or memory or whatever you want to call it. Wasn't done badly, just think that you could have done it a little differently and/or set it up a bit more beforehand rather than a straight transition with no explanation of whats going to happen.
I'm beginning to think that 'The Tyrant' isn't Celestia
That doesn't sound like a tyrant
Great chapter! All I can say is.. MOAR!
* walks in *
So I haven't read this yet due to my unwillingness to read something unfinished. However... I'm seriously considering starting it anyway.
Also, you spelled hors d'oeuvres wrong in the description....
So much Twila! Thanks for the amazingtasticalnesskewlitty update!
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Yes, but the question then becomes: Why did you like it so much?
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Heh, yes. The first one is kind of focused on Jack and Dash. This one shall be focused on Twila and Rarity. Though I admit I might lean a bit too much on Twila, heh. I try not to play favorites, but there you go.
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I decided to do it the exact same way we did it in Fool's Gold, no real build up or hand off, just a loosely logical place to transition in with it. The feeling here is that Twila is beginning to realize she has always been a bit too dependent, though she is so capable herself. So, that thought was the transition into the flashback which backs up that thought as well as building the characters and universe. Plus, explaining the entire purposes of the Heists themselves.
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Technically speaking, Calli, we're not too far from being finished. We just felt we had enough story done to go ahead and begin releasing chapters. The story will be done much sooner than later. Also, damn, I meant to double check that. In my defense, that was actually GDoc's auto-correct. I was going to check it, because it still seemed wrong, but I forgot. Apparently, it's such a common misspelling, GDocs thinks that's what it should be. Thanks for the catch.
I was always conflicted when it came to shining armor and his human name......bloody bogan
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Mostly because it gave a realistic perspective on how Twila would be feeling about leading the mission. I enjoy seeing characters react to fallout of a plan, and this fic executed this superbly. I also enjoyed this little flashback into Twila's magic exam, and how she saw the questions as easy.
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What, you mean ours? What's so conflicting about it?
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Twila's pretty much all mine, so thanks a lot for all that. I based her experience with the test with several of mine, back in the day. I never really understood how so many people can have issues with general knowledge style tests, there are just some things you know. It's when you start specializing that things get more difficult, least as far as I've experienced.
Hope to keep entertaining you.
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No I'm talking about shining armor, I was always stuck trying to think of a good human name for him that would fit but eh.
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Ah. Well, Merc already did Shields for Twila, which worked well enough. Llewellyn was my choice, though. Heh, since it means 'shining'.
For the love of my damaged sanity!
Continue this now!
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Now? Now?! How dare you make demands of us! We shall release it when we're good and ready!...
...
It just so happens we're good and ready to release it now, heh. Oh heck, take two chapters!
Even still Spike is forced to stay behind and play the Wade of Kim Possible. Great chapters. Hope to see some cool Alice, and the rest of the Crusaders, scenes.
Damnit mini engy!
With the time it's getting really weird.....
How is it possible to write something awesome like this?
Whatever I really appreciate the work on this fiction and will check every 10 minutes for an update.
Hey, is this the completely non-magical alternate universe that's mentioned in the Laughing Shadow? The one that they contacted through the Bermuda Triangle?
If not, than woops. Anyway, cool chapter, looking forward to more.
And so the plot thickens.
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I can't say too much, but I'll say that they all have similar names to TLS for a reason.
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I'll spoil tag, but, unlike Merc, I don't mind telling you about [Information Redacted]. And man, it's so cool! Like, there's this one place, and it's [Information Redacted] and I'm going to write [Information Redacted] eventually. I hope you all enjoy it. But yeah, man, it's all one giant [Information Redacted], so I hope that's cool. It's real [Information Redacted] and [Information Redacted]. Look forward to it, man.
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That was very... helpful.
Gee. Thanks for all the... information.
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Well, I suppose I'll be better off without spoilers anyway.
I'm thinking how far mini-engy can get on her own, she can probably be a good stowaway.