Ridley, the dreaded leader of the Space Pirates, was finally put rest after his battle with Samus Aran, on planet Zebes, but after being cloned on the B.O.T.T.L.E ship, a reject clone was sent in a pod to a far off planet, Equestria.
This clone is no ordinary clone though, he has a benevolent soul. As he becomes accustomed to his new home, the only companion he can find is a young cream colored mare.
How will Ridley live his life in Equestria?
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Maybe you could go into past events, as well as maybe going further into our new Ridley's character. I'd like to see that.
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Yeah, that'd be a good idea, but for now, he's a baby, so he does not talk much as a character, at least, until he ages a bit.
2442409 I can understand that, it's a part of the story. But the jump after canon to Spike
with Sweetie 
and the other characters 
would probably be something to explain, it's a little jarring and is honestly something of a pet peeve of mine. 
Try and justify these events and create a good base for the current characters (and future characters) to sit on, it's a lot easier to read, even if it's only a half-assed effort. 
But I like your concept and want to see it develop more. good luck. 
This story has my approval
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Ah, the Marriage part could be explained a bit..maybe I could post that as an extra, or something... and the OC's will eventually explain themselves, and so-forth. Question for you: Should Samus be a temporary villian, or should she try and befriend the "Nice Ridley" for Galactic Federation use?
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And I approve your approval!
Idea try to make the story more in depth like don't just rush into them finding ridely set them out to do that later,in other words make it longer and more understandable
Question how old are you?
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Oh, I sortof rushed the beginning. I'm going to be going into much more detail as the story continues.
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Ah, and I'm 14, not the best grammar in the world
2442503 it might be a nice twist to put her into the villain role for awhile.
But I wouldn't know her motives for it, I haven't followed the metroid universe much. I know a little, enough to know who she is and who Ridley is. 
hey nice job your first story congrats
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Thanks!
Just so you know besides genetic memory Ridley's aggressive persona came to be because of those mentally able to dominate and use him (I.E. Mother Brain, M.B. and some minor others [telepathic domination has got to be a horrible thing to go through hope there isn't any inhabitants on Terra and near Equestria that could do that to him]). This is before I read the story I will give another 10 Cents worth or more on how I viewed it.
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Yeah, I was going to have something like that occur later in the story (The influence thing.) It's just I'm not sure which villain to use for the situation. (Probably the Space Pirates or something.)
Based on what I have read it seems pretty good but hold off on the molting to the next stage yet (Based on Wiki source he has to devour stronger creatures and gain their genetic code which enables him to molt/evolve as it were [Another note is that in the Metroid series it never stated when his evolution ends so you can take it further then where the games have been able to just don't make him too gigantic]). Oh and if you need any OCs I have a good deal of options in my blog you can skim through (Just let me know which ones you use). I will like and fav to see how this develops oh and make sure to look up the manga data on him it could give further information on him to use (I.E. intelligence level, skills, and ect during each form [Make it almost sound like he is a Pokemon or something]).
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Funny thing is the Space Pirates were also being controlled telepathically as will (though they weren't human Space Pirates so you could change it up to a different standard). Changelings are thought to have a telepathic capabilities or somewhat of a Hive Mind (Could miss with him to some degree but then again the genetic memory could also allow him to keep enough control of himself [then again you also got to think of his varying reactions to magic and how the everflowing magic of this world could affect him which could alter his evolutionary pattern as will]).
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Wow, that's some really helpful tips!
I will be sure to do some research about his life cycle, and how his evolution works. I just wonder what types of animals he will have to eat, oh and thank you for the fave!
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Based on Metroid Other M he ate the boss monster Samus killed as shown in the game up until he first molted and attacked her. It seems to play off the stronger the creature is to him the more affective it is to altering him (Start with Fruit/Vegetation and bugs [let him retain his darker secrets to himself even if he allies with the ponies be it out of Loneliness or greater need of survival]). While writing down the line think how strongly and effectively the Poison Joke will do to him (it plays to basis that anyone or anything not of their world and not properly protected would come into contact with it). Oh and if he comes across something already dead and no sentient creature is watching he could take his fill of it (though it has to be edible I don't think Timber Wolves would be acceptable but a Manticore, Cockatrice, or Hydra Corpse could do).
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Ah, I forgot about that part... I guess I will have Ridley stick to a pony diet at first, and maybe when Celestia examines him, she'll tell everypony about his diet. That, or instincts kick in.
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Will you never did say whether he has grown fangs yet or not so even then he can surprise her (that is if he can avoid her or Luna from reading his mind). Tracking him is going to be quite the problem for Samus should the pod be dismantled and even then just locating him afterwords (Technology is great but if something threatening comes to close to that side of the planet one of the deitic entities could damage it or misdirect it [You got the Alicorns, Discord, and thanks to open plot development so many more could be made to fit the varying areas on Terra so probes beware]). Since we are in Canterlot there is the Dungeon (not to mention the Sewer System and extremely dark alleys to name a few less crossed areas) he can sneak off to maybe go down into the darkest depth and consume things in the dark.
Oh and I forgot the concept of Deitic impression which could majorly alter his personality (based on which one either dominates him or subverts him to their side).
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As of next chapter, Ridley should have decently formed fangs, therefore allowing him to do some basic hunting and gathering with help from Spike. The Ridley in Other M ate lots'o'bugs, giving him an Exoskeleton, and a lighter build. I think this Ridley will feast on more intelligent creatures, ( Manticores, rats, etc.) and give him a higher IQ, and likely superior strength from a Manticore. Maybe since his memory is genetic, he will likely remember what he ate in his previous life(lives).
Now knowing Ridley and the need for survival (He would anticipate someone especially with the fact that it is always the same someone in every case coming to kill him). Making himself a hero to Equestria would help ensure his survival as will as make friends with powerful characters. Now here are some ideas at making him a hero (this all varies based on what form stage he is in):
1. Slavery (Most stories and even the show had to deal with Diamond Dogs kidnapping individuals to dig stones though it doesn't always have to be the Diamond Dogs that are doing the Slavery concept in that area).
2. War (This is considered what races are against the Equestrian Country be it the Changelings [that is if the love principle hasn't been taken care of], Diamond Dogs, Rogue Dragons, Monsters of Tartarus [the major prison talked sidely in the show and found in the MLP Wiki] escaping and running havoc/mayhem, or Forgotten Creatures of the world waking up and wanting to regain power).
3. Starting Small (This is used in reference of building himself up kinda like how video games do in RPG [I.E. finding lost things, helping those who can't help themselves, and more importantly improving their technological know how in varying things]).
Ridley is so adorable.....sorry bout that but I'm afraid of what would happen if Ridley molts in front of the princesses.
Good thing you used Luna instead of Celestia on pointing out the ship. I just think Celestia would be slightly naive to other worldly life where as Luna who was placed on the Moon for so long would have looked further out into space with her Magic out Loneliness and boredom.
Who the heck down voted this, was it you (points at Samus, Mario, Luigi, Mr. Watch, Link, Kirby, Nightmare Moon, Diamond Tiara) I bet you eight did it. Kirby do you think its funny! If you don't get that smirk off your dumb little face, I will get gunny over here from Full Metal Jacket and have him punch in the face. (everyone looks down in shame) thats what I thought.
I hope people aren't downvoting this because of Ridley speaking because in the Manga Source and Metroid Wiki he is pointed out to be able to speak. If it is because it isn't gory or anything then just understand the writer for a second before hand (Age and the fact this is the 1st story [which is really good work compared to the other writers that are older and working on higher rated stories {quite a few of them bomb harder then anything or are just plain stupid/gross}]).
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I don't know why they downvoted it, the main part of the story has not started yet ._.
I guess people just realize it's not finished and they are like "Dangit, can't read it all yet...downvoted." Lol..
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Yeah, It's probably one of those...(Moans at the fact that people don't know much..)
Maybe after I get someone to help me with the story, I could make it a bit more violent, I mean...Metroid isn't exactly known for peaceful encounters
yeah this is a improvement, its not a perfect story by any means but I like, its going to be interesting to see the ridely clone grown up and how the ponies will react, but is this ridely genuinely nice or putting up an act
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Remember Alien Resurrection. Think of the Ripley Clone she has all the memory of the person she was copied from but was yet unique and not just the Xenomorph DNA that was still part of her but the whole new personality concept. That can be said of this Ridley (May even change some evolutionary traits and whatnot).
Would be an interesting plot twist that not only Twilight became an Alicorn but all the Bearers of the Element of Harmony. Think about it each Element in itself has great potential and if the stones don't change partners they could alter em to keep the perfect host/partner (people might not like it but it would be quite interesting and explain in better concept of why Twilight became an Alicorn [You could also implement the lost Elements of Harmony at some point Hope, Trust, and Love]).
2449503 that's true, and I wonder how samus will handle seeing a nice ridely clone
Thinking of the timeline Discord could have wed one of the Bearers at some point. Yeah I feel random moments of ideas to share with ya.
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Don't much know but she is human and has major hate towards the others she has encountered and could be blinded to the truth around her. Hopefully she won't be entirely alone on the mission and can be restrained in some way be it armor locking or just someone freezing her suit (what with having the Metroid Gene but the Varia Suit would need to have been turned off or not attached to her suit to work). She is also known to not attack innocent creatures so he could be shielded by someponies or somethings to halt the attack.
2449555 im pretty sure she will have some kind of grudge against ridely, after all she went through,
I found a acceptable source material site (hopefully it works will enough):
http://metroid.wikia.com/wiki/Metroid_timeline
I say if you ever want to do a gorefest in a Metroid Crossover then use the Boss Monster Kraid (Based on what I read he is more destructive and mentally beastlike then Ridley not to mention the whole Dinosaur aspect that could be played off of). If so do it in another story when you ever feel like working up to it but sadly I don't really get into those types unless it isn't entirely the main aspect (Which is one of the reasons why I don't read Cupcake or the Rainbow Factory [I got enough nightmares as is and I don't like seeing innocent beings go that demented]).
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Meh, of course she will have somewhat of a grudge, but I gave Sammy a much braver persona then she is normally given when involving Ridley. Also, this is after she was forgiven by the GF, and after the Pirates became allies, which is why she is working with Weavel....just so you know.
I've always been a fan of monstrous rampages.
but that's up to the direction that you want the story to go.
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Well Discord DID infuse him with his own magic and DNA, so...maybe!
Who THE BLOODY HELL IS SHY HEART?! You can't really get away with introducing an OC and not explaining their origins, not to mention not explaining how much time's passed in order for Spike to not only have his wings but to be married to Sweetie Belle as well.
In short, this prologue is seven kinds of buggered and I shudder to attempt to even continue reading the story. Not to mention you've practically openly admitted to starting this while properly sloshed. So I'm afraid I won't be reading further until either it's finished and you go back and fix the damned thing or if you choose not to fix it I'll just be passing it by.
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OC will be explained in a future story, same with Spike's wings.
Also, I was not drunk when I wrote that. that was a joke
I plan on fixing that thing anyways, that was when I first started writing, and I didn't think it needed to be really good, as I thought that it would get hate anyhow.
So, that's that.
Fuck this shit. I HATE authors never explaining an OC. Thumbs DOWN and Good FUCKING Bye.
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Dude, I have said this many times, to many people.
OC's will be explained in a future story. The OC was a placeholder, nothing more.
You really need to clean up your attitude, and act like you have some sort of civility.
Loving your story.
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Thanks, although this isn't really the best story, it's my first, and I really wasn't that good when I wrote this...expect better writing in the sequels!