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  • 2w, 5d
    10 Tips for Beginning MLP Writers

    Just something I decided to do real quick after noticing some recurring cliches in the fandom.

    1) Having your OC villain beat the Princesses/mane six easily is not badflank. It's overdone and cliche. Having them be able to MATCH the Princesses and barely edge out a win is better, but often times it's simply better to keep the Princesses occupied elsewhere. Having Rainbow Dash be curbstomped in a race by a character or a character outmagic Twilight is NOT a good idea, if a character needs to beat them, justify it somehow. Be more creative than simply 'my character pwns everything'.

    2) Having your OC no sell the Elements of Harmony/Rainbow Power is not badflank. It is 'how to make your character a Mary Sue in one simple step'. The Elements of Harmony/Rainbow are canonically the most powerful magic in the setting that not even Discord can overcome. The canon writers have been able to avoid this trap cleverly, so can you.

    3) Having your OC HERO easily beat up Discord or fullpower Tirek does not make him Badflank. It makes them ALSO a Mary Sue. Having them HELP the heroes defeat a villain however, is perfectly fine, so long as it's done completely organically and that the story's logic SUPPORTS them being able to do it.

    4) Making your character a new Element of Harmony is...actually okay, but make sure you do it ORGANICALLY AND WELL. Remember that to be able to use the Elements with the others requires having an organic, genuine friendship with the rest of the Bearers and to truly, genuinely represent that trait. Saying 'my character is the Element of Trust!' without any build up or them actually DEMONSTRATING this trait is bad, having them organically build friendships with the mane six over a story and actually show they're trust worthy and reliable, but still flawed, is good writing. See the Pony POV Series and "To Forgive Is Equine" for good examples of how to handle this well.

    5) If you're writing a crossover, don't let one side overshadow the other. To quote Linkara: the cardinal sin any crossover can make is to make one side look worse than the other. Don't let one side help the OTHER solve all their problems, have them HELP each other solve one another's problems. They can make solving canon things EASIER for the other, but it should be a two way street. Don't have Link kick Discord and Chrysalis' flanks but Ganondorf no selling the Elements. If one side has trouble with the other hero's villain, the other hero should have trouble with that side's as well. For a great example of handling this well, see "Friendship is Showtime" by MangaKamen.

    6) No matter how much we don't like it, that one character you don't like? Odds are there's someone, somewhere out there that likes them. Do NOT just write a fanfic for the sole purpose of beating up a character you don't like. You WILL offend those who DO like them and it hurts the story. If you don't like something about a character, Rescue From the Scrappy Heap in your own eyes and give them some growth or development that GENUINELY and organically overcomes that flaw without beating them up.

    7) Let your own desires take a back seat if it's what makes a better story. If you think Equestria's geocentric orbit is stupid and makes no sense, fine, more power to you, but incorporating that into a story just because you want to make a point rather than it supporting the story. It's not a good use of your space or the reader's time if it serves no purpose other than to vent your anger at something you dislike. Think of what's best for the plot, keeping the characters IN character, and the audience, not what's best for YOU. If a plot line you REALLY wanted conflicts with the theme, tone, or direction the plot has taken, either scrap it completely or rework it to fit organically.

    8) If you're going to do a 'Mare do Well Aftermath' or 'Canterlot Wedding 'Twilight was right everyone else was wrong!' or other commonly used storylines, rethink your position and look up what others have already done. Write it in a new, refreshing way. Have the OTHERS realize they were wrong with the Mare-Do-Well incident and come to talk to Rainbow Dash who's actually FORGOTTEN the whole darn thing and wanted to leave it as water under the bridge for example.

    9) perfectly fine so long as it's done well. Having your OC be a canon character's love interest is PERFECTLY fine so long as you remember one thing: even if your character has an identical personality to a canon character, they should still have VISIBLE chemistry and characterization that meshes well together. There should be interactions where the characters work off one another and their personalities mesh. Having your character bump into Fluttershy say 'hi' and suddenly she's smitten by him is not a good idea. Having your character bump into her, the two begin a conversation where they work off of each other organically and fluidly in a natural fashion, and walk away with a crush on each other is a good idea. I suggest looking up "On A Cross and Arrow" for a good example of how to write this, but I also actually recommend watching G2 My Little Pony Tales, which had some actually legitimately good, fleshed out romances.

    A good rule of thumb is the audience should feel 'aww, aren't they cute together' or 'Hmm...yeah, I could ship those two' BEFORE the words 'love', 'he's so cute' or other 'I'm in love' phrases are even MENTIONED. The audience should feel the two work well as a couple before you TELL them one is in love with the other.

    10) There is no such thing as a used up premise. You want to write a 'Rainbow Dash's wings are lost, hurt, crippled, ect' story? Go ahead, just remember one VERY important rule: make it new. Make it fresh. Add ideas and situations that most wouldn't expect or that other stories haven't done. Any premise can be good if it brings something new to the table.

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  • 18w, 2d
    I now have a Patreon

    Hello everyone, sorry for the lack of posts, but I now have a patreon, which will hopefully enable me to speed up my production of content to a more reasonable level.

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  • ...

Warning! Spoilers for "Keep Calm and Flutter On!"

Fluttershy managed to do the impossible. She's befriended Discord, the Spirit of Chaos, former evil overlord of Equestria and taught him that friendship is magic. However, in the aftermath of all this, the master of confusion finds himself completely baffled by one thing. One question that in his entire life he'd never desired to have an answer to; why? Why after so many eons, was friendship important to him?

My Little Pony Belongs to Hasbro.

Preview pic by C-Puff on Deviantart!

First Published
14th Mar 2013
Last Modified
14th Mar 2013
#1 · 89w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I just read this on DA.  This is a sweet little story with a bit of character analysis, which is something I like.  It gives me insight into how the characters are seen as well as insight on the person writing the story.  Well done.

Also, FIRST!.

Edit: Also, I was wondering, will there be a story on Trixie's reaction to Twilight's apotheosis?  That might be an interesting read.

#2 · 89w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>2266996 Thanks! Glad you liked it! I really did try to make her a complex character.

I don't know, considering it.

#3 · 89w, 1d ago · 8 · ·

Discord is best pony/good guy. A heart warming little story which I thoroughly enjoyed.:ajsmug:

Comment posted by Godzillawolf deleted at 5:46pm on the 18th of March, 2013
#5 · 80w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Very nice.  I really hope that they bring Discord back again to help them in one of their quests.  Maybe he'd help Twilight learn how to use her Alicorn powers.

#6 · 71w, 6d ago · 4 · ·

I had my doubts when deciding to read this story. It would be very easy to simply write a story about Discord feeling guilty, sad, or repentant.

This story, however, does a good job at making Discord still "feel" like Discord to a reader. His well-chosen transformations (or allusions to hypothetical transformations), his playful and blasé (and sometimes rhyming) original lines, his repeated shifting between lighthearted and serious demeanor, and his ironically echoing his lines from his debut episode all serve to keep Discord in character.

In my opinion, of course.

There are grammar errors, but there are always grammar errors. The story no less good for it.

I enjoyed this story and think it well done. Thank you for sharing it with us.

#7 · 52w, 2d ago · · ·

It was...okay. I did like little joke you went out on.

#8 · 40w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Not bad. I kind of like the explanation of why Discord enjoys friendship. "What's the fun in making sense."

Short and sweet. Liked.

#9 · 35w, 5d ago · · ·


I doubt Trixie was happy to learn that. The unicorn who had proven better than her at EVERYTHING was now a goddess.

#10 · 33w, 5d ago · · ·

Interesting take and interesting look to say the least.

#11 · 2w, 2d ago · · ·

I really like how you made Discord feel like Discord. I actually wish this was canon, the idea that friendship doesn't make or rather doesn't have to make sense is pretty appealing. I also really like how you use his abilities in regards to the scenery it was a good way of showing he had really became less malviolent.

It also got me thinking about the Elements.

When Discord mentioned empathy I realized that there wasn't anything representing it. You have Loyalty, Honesty, Kindness, Generosity, Laughter, and... Magic.

Why isn't Element of Magic called the Element of Empathy?

That was the whole point of season one. Twilight learning how to understand the others and sending her letters and it was reinforced in season two where everyone was send the friendship letters and it even saved the day.

wAIT A MINTUE  Twilight's memory spell! Didn't that work by having the Mane V see their friendship from her prespective? Did Twilight defeat Discord's magic using Empathy?

I feel like an idiot.


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