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Imprisoned in the tunnels beneath Canterlot, she withers away in hunger and despair. In the castle above, curiosity leads him to a door that he is forbidden to open. When they finally meet, it is just the opportunity she has waited for. Mislead by a child's trusting innocence, Spike unknowingly stumbles into the clutches of Equestria's greatest foe. And once you embrace the darkness, the darkness never lets you go...
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This fic can only lead to greatness.
Pre-liked, will read later~
as I have said on FanFiction: as long as the story's secret is what I hope it is, I would love to read it to the end
Ooooo I like this story. Now I will wait for more.
This story is amazing. I absolutely love the detail and the concept. And is that a reference to the Spider and the Fly I see in the chapter title?
I love this. Keep up the good work. I'll be tracking this.
Mein gutt, new Crosis story!
"Said the spider to the fly."
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It is indeed. This particular story was initially inspired by the Tony DiTerlizzi version of that story, and I immediately drew a parallel between Chrysalis and the spider as these charming, silver-tongued devils.
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Thanks for the kind words. I'm glad you thought my portrayal of Chrysalis' feeding was unique. I felt like it was shown in a very one-dimensional way in the show, and wanted to show it in a more multifaceted light. Residual emotion provides the barest of nutrients, or physical contact creating a slow and harmless drain.
As for your last point, this story takes place several years before the pilot episode, and Spike is meant to be much younger and more naive than he is portrayed on the show. It takes place before he moves in with Twilight, and I feel like Celestia would be a very sheltering parent, hence his timidity.
moar
I always waited someone to make a SpikeXChrysalis fic... and now this! INSTA FAVED N LIKE!
It was good, very good in fact. I just hope that Chrysalis would lighten up soon. I am feeling like this a one side love to me though.
Insta fave and like
2180949im with you on that!
The last line of the description basically says, "Once you go black, you never go back."
Just sayian.
Oh this fic has promise.
The sweet innocence of the young dragon,
And the cold desperation of the queen of the changelings.
I just set up a account to say this is the first fic i have evar read and it is epic. :D also when will you release more?
This fic is pretty damn amazing. Faved!
Is spike the same age as he is in the show or is he bigger and older like in ss2sonic's artwork, I hope he's older
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Probably is, though, as this isnt the first Spike X Chrysalis story I have read.
No Tragedy Spike x Chrysalis? Do want, do want.
Is this an anthropomorphied fic? Because I know that they're anthropomorphic on the cover!
faved and liked
my only question is, how long until Chrysalis falls for our swagon dragon?
Celestia is Spike's mother????
Dafuq?
Oh, no. This doesn't bode well at all for Spike. Yes, he might get caught by Twilight, Cadence, and his mother Princess Celestia, and scolded, but that does not compare to what Chrysalis has in store for him. Oh, gosh, I feel for Spike, and he is blind to Chrysalis' mind games and manipulation
. Liking this fimfic, please continue with it. 
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As of chapter 1, Spike is quite a bit younger than he is portrayed in the show or the picture, as the story begins several years before the pilot episode.
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It is not an anthro story I'm afraid, but that picture is probably the best Spike/Chrys picture I've seen, so it was the one to be used.
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*boggles* I'm gonna get this question in every story, aren't I?
2182688 His adoptive mother, which matches what Faust herself has said on the matter.
2182730 please tell me he this story will progress the point where he does grow up? The idea of a baby dragon and the queen might not bold well, this story might get more attention if spike was a teenager
Ok, major plot hole time!
1. How does Spike even know about this mysterious door and why has he never simply asked anypony about it? You'd think they'd have given him a warning.
2. Why does the door have no magical warning system whatsoever in case unauthorized ponies/creatures try to enter? Remember, Celestia can make a ward that only an alicorn or Discord can break.
3. Why does Cadance carry the key around with her? When she dropped the key, how did Spike even know it was for this door?
4. They use the same key for two different doors? Why even have the other door? The force field is the only real barrier to Chrysalis. The other door makes no sense.
5. A force field that anything from the outside can enter? Not very bright.
6. They never think to check in on Chrysalis to see what she's doing? Remember, they obviously have no magical intruder alarms. Given that other changelings could try to infiltrate, or changeling-controlled ponies, this is an incredibly stupid oversight.
This entire set up is a very contrived mechanism for mere plot convenience.
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Makes sense (sort of)
(Not really)
2182893 She's the one who raised him, it's not like his biological mother was around.
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But didn't Twilight raise him?
2181697 Then is there some way you could edit the chapter somewhere to reflect it? I thought for forever that he was referring to Twilight, not Celestia as his mother, and yeah, he DID seem a little naive from what we've seen in the show. I mean, it makes sense NOW, but we the readers shouldn't have to be told by a comment outside of the fic to know how old he is and stuff. That's something you need to edit in or find some way to address without really changing much of the first chapter. Just a sentence or two would help, like how his mother was in the middle of a lesson with that purple pony again, or something. Just something to think about adding...
Stop questioning the plot contrivances grasshopperherder.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/05/manbehind-1.jpg
“Oh course it does,”
*Of
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I was just about to read the story, but your comment really put me off. If it has that many plot holes, then it doesn't seem that appetizing, admittedly.
I apologize, author. I am a fan of Spike shipfic stories, and I love the fact that you got featured!
Also, the critical comment I am replying to should not be deleted. A good author can handle criticism and trusts the reader to enjoy an experience no matter what anyone drawls out.
Have a wonderful time with the story, my friend! I am sure you will do well! :)
*Reading* Mmmhmmm...
*Keep Reading* ...
*Stopped Reading about halfway* Really?
This thing is... Reminding me of the Depths Of Despair in a really.... Really horrible way...
Enough Patapons today. Need sleep I guess.
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All valid points. I'll do what I can to address each in turn:
1. Spike had been told by Celestia to stay away from the door, but not the reason why. Now, this might seem to be a blunder on Celestia's part, not explaining further, but being that she's been the kingdom's ruler for several uninterrupted centuries, she's so used to ponies following her instructions that she felt like any further information was unnecessary.
2. I'll admit that I hadn't considered any subtle magical defenses to go along with it, but looking at Celestia's track record, is their absence that implausible? She left the Elements of Harmony sitting in the those ruins for god knows how long with no safeguards whatsoever. She propped Discord up as a lawn ornament where any random passerby could get into an argument and accidentally bust him out.
3. That section was cut from the final draft. The prologue had originally featured more of a play-by-play history, detailing how Spike learned of the door, made the connection that the two alicorns were able to get in, and made several attempts himself before lucking out and getting the key. I wasn't able to get the section to work in a way that didn't feel like overt exposition though. To be honest (and this may be the root cause of any and all problems with that first section) my primary focus with this chapter was Spike's meeting with Chrysalis, and not the exact logistics of how he got down there.
4. Admittedly, the second door is completely superfluous. Looking back, I think it was just an oversight on my part that I'll need to correct.
5 and 6. Going back to #2, routine breeds complacency. One thing I'd planned to touch on in the future (can't fit everything into one chapter) is how Celestia gradually slackened her vigil on the prison. Originally, that checkpoint hallway was guarded. Originally, that barrier was impassible from either side. Originally, she had gone to check on Chrysalis regularly, etc. But as time goes by, the sentries are moved to more pertinent tasks. The barrier's magical cost is lessened by altering it to only affect her, and after so many years pass without incident, the danger loses its strength.
Ah, Krosis...
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You make a good point. I'll see what I can do.
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Hmm, not familiar with Depths of Despair or Patapons, unfortunately. Guessing any resemblance is a bad thing though?
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Saddens me that you decided not to give it a try, but understandable if the review made such an impact. I do have to admit I'm a bit puzzled by that last comment about not deleting the critique, as I've never done such a thing in the past or plan to in the future.
Didn't realize that Chrysalis was such a masochist.
Oh my gosh. That fic read itself. It was interesting, well conceived, had just the right amount of detail to let you know what was happening but still gave some room for creative interpretations, and the pacing was exquisite. The details of the story were spot on; everything flowed together perfectly and left nothing to be desired… well, except more. The technical nuts and bolts like grammar and word choice were perfect as well. You obviously put a lot of time and thought into this and it really shows. Good job with everything. Liked, faved and followed.
Oh, Chrysalis, I now know exactly how you feel. This one fic was absolutely decadent; it satisfied my hunger for good fics and yet at the same time… all I want is more.
2182940 How much was Twilight and how much Celestia is not really covered in the show. Lauren Faust has said that it was largely, if not almost totally, Celestia.
Considering how old Twilight was when Spike was hatched, it is safe to assume that Celestia was the primary maternal figure early on. For the purposes of a fanfic, a writer would be safe in having Spike consider Celestia 'mother', this would still work even if he also sees Twilight as a mother figure.
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Nah, Celestia did. What responsible monarch would put a small child in charge of a newborn? Spike eventually became Twilight's assistant (and thus, Twilight became more or less his guardian), but no alicorn in their right mind would put a child in charge of the midnight feedings and diaper changes, or Spike's early socialization.
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Both makes sense
2183588 Having two doors that work with the same key can make sense:
The outer door is mostly cosmetic, it has to look good and can't have any high power magic radiating from it.
The inner door is the strong one, being hidden it does not have to look like anything but a strong door and being set back there are fewer concerns with any magical protections having interactions with passing unicorns.
Both doors would need to be locked, (the outer to avoid incidental opening, the inner to actually keep people from going through it), but there would be little reason to have they keys be different.