I was looking for a place to call home, what I found was a rainbow.
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Wow. Again, I see the sheeping coming full-force.
Okay guys, I can understand (no, I can't) your love of HiEs, but the complete disregard for grammar and punctuation in the description, chapter titles, and story title just baffles me.
Anyway, I will give you a PARTIAL read-through of the first chapter and post a list of everything I find that's wrong with the writing until I either: A. Kill myself, or B. Quit.
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As usual, Peppy is right.
U are going to hav a sequel right?
No no no no no why would you do this? this fic had so much promise and then you go and do the single most over-used and lame plot point.
This fic had promise, and now its falling.
I am dissapoint
3048830 I told you I'm not saying much. ;)
i really hope there will be a sequel because the story feels like it hasn't even broken out of the introduction phase of the story where you get the readers attention but i like it keep it up man
so far it is good very good actually you should make a sequel or add to it or something
Hay all, the new sequel to Dashing Hearts is out. its called "the tainted crown" give it a look.
Would you kindly.
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3237931oh god I MEAN UHH..,,..,.UUHH
3243013 well hello there! fancy meeting you here
The gammatical and spelling errors really killed it for me. I wanted to keep reading it but.... yea. Just i couldn't pay attention to the story when the mistakes kept smacking against the wall i build in my mind for each universe/movie in my head. If you can find a proof reader to clean this up or rewrite it, i may give it another chance.
i liked this fic alot. very lovely ;_;
3664240 I always like reading my readers analyst of my stories, it says that you actually absorbed the emotion that I was trying to convey
What is it with you and romance... Don't get me wrong, I may be one of the most violent & vulgar friends of my group but I'm a sucker for good romance. But with you and Zim it's gotten to the point where I deleted all the individual stories & just bookmarked your respective profiles. That being said, aside from the occasional grammar mistake (I'm in college & can't do algebra to save my life, don't feel bad) you're an excellent writer. You have excellent characterization & good pace timing. Keep up the good work.
Although..if you wouldn't mind I would question the sequel to this...if that's ok with you..
it was a good story, but somehow it feels like something is missing.
6052757 one of my first stories. I've been meaning to correct a lot of things.
That ending! Overall it was pretty good with a cute light hearted atmosphere, but that ending!
This was a decent first story. I wonder about Rainbow’s motivations as she escalated this relationship quite quickly -fast for a fast pegasus but too fast for an inexperienced pony and element of loyalty, I think. I liked the world building employed but would not have said, “No,” to more. The spelling and grammar was difficult, but I was able to understand the intentions.
Loved the fanfic and keep it up