Story was good, grammar and spelling was borderline horrendous. Normally I would dismiss a story outright for bad spellling and grammar but here I think you could benefit from improvement. The pacing was excellent, the scenes believable, and the characters understandable. Good job.
Well sadly it´s nearly over i think, i would like them to adopted a little filly or something like that, maybe you want to make a second story with them and more from the other main six?
I really do like this story but im sorry this typo broke me in so many ways, that i just had to take a break: Mrs. Cack . Still though loved this story so much. Have a favourite, follow and a like for your troubles kind sir.
Hmmm I still see an incomplete on this story so heres hoping for more
i agree with Darkheretic, very good read, needs MOAR!
Nooo! Don't end this I want more!
please...
2892976 more chapters please
Great chapter a few minor errors but nothing too bad. so far this has been an amazing read keep up the great work.
Don't you mean "hugged"?
i almost cried becuse of the ending theme. almost and becuse of re-reading this and remembering how awesome of a story this is/was
Story was good, grammar and spelling was borderline horrendous. Normally I would dismiss a story outright for bad spellling and grammar but here I think you could benefit from improvement. The pacing was excellent, the scenes believable, and the characters understandable. Good job.
Well sadly it´s nearly over i think, i would like them to adopted a little filly or something like that, maybe you want to make a second story with them and more from the other main six?
excellent story. even the outro song was fitting for an imaginary rolling of the credits lol.
Love it man.
sequel? because I would love a sequel
Well, the grammar is pretty awful, and the main character is a complete, and utter moron, but it's not all that bad.
I really do like this story but im sorry this typo broke me in so many ways, that i just had to take a break: Mrs. Cack . Still though loved this story so much. Have a favourite, follow and a like for your troubles kind sir.
I ran.
I ran harder and faster than I had ever run before. I ran until my lungs were on fire and my veins pumped battery acid……..and I still lost.
Love the 'Fight Club' reference!
This is embarrassing