The Wedding of Spike and Rarity

by Snivypony

Epilogue

Spike and Rarity's honeymoon in Manehatton was the most romantic night of their lives. All night they sleep together and cuddled and kissed till they fell asleep happily. After that they went back home to receive the special wedding present that Twilight told them about before they left. To their surprise it was something they never would expect. Apparently Twilight used her new alucorn powers to fuse the Library and the Boutique into one building. It made them both happy that they now do both their jobs and live together at the same time. So they went to their new home where they will live from now on.

Twilight also came one day for another gift to give them. She used her magic to make Rarity live as long as a dragon and make her and Spike compatible. Now the two can live for thousands of years and have children.

In the years to come they had a mare named Gemstone and a dragon named Neku. Their family was well known around the world as the family that united two races. When their parents are dead their children will continue their legacy of the dragon and unicorn who became lovers.

The True End!

Author's Note:

I hope you all enjoyed my love story. Hope to enjoy the season 3 finale.

Comments

[TheCloudtop]

Not quite sure what to think. From the comments that I have seen from you, I would have expected a much more polished fic.

[TheSexyMenhir]

The minimalistic descriptions and the lack of form (no quotation marks etc.) actually are quite interesting to read, but the story could still have used some padding here and there.

[Racko]

While I don't want to hate on this, there is so much missed potential. This is more minimalist than a report I would write in 5 minute
You are telling what is happening than showing what is going on. It feels more like a short puppet show I witnessed in elementary. And there is enough in the story to make a description.

As I said, there is so much missed potential here, it hurts. I will not dislike because it is a nice idea, even if it did leave me wanting something to actually read

[Draco Dei]

RE: Chapter Titles: It is "Epilogue".

[Snivypony]

2139707 It is fixed.

[Rarityfan87]

Well, this story is... interesting. Don't get me wrong, this has potential, but it needs a lot of work. There needs to be more dialog and description. And I think you should add some emotion to them. Things like "she/he blushed" "she/he said in a _____ tone".
For me the chapters are too short, and need more content. And to me, I don't think Rarity would accept Spike's proposal so fast.
My suggestion would be to start over and re-write every chapter. Take your time and make sure they flow nicely. I'd be happy to help you if you would like. I would definitely read the re-write.

So in the end it's an okay story. Hope this helps!

[Snivypony]

2144328 I fixed all the mistakes listed. My intention was to be narration focused then dialog. And as for the whole too fast thing, in my version they have been dating so long that it would be impossible to refuse his proposal. What do you think of the invisible bag thing?

[Rarityfan87]

2144623
I like it. I called it a pouch myself. I would explain that in the description. It just helps people understand that. But I would suggest you add more. I think this story could have more to it.

[Rarityfan87]

Good job. I like the improvements.

[Snivypony]

2160002 Glad you approve.

[Spikester]

This is a genius ending!

[Snivypony]

2685234 Thank you.

[Sketch D Tail]

That's a really good first fic Snivy, well done. There are a few spelling and grammar errors I saw throughout the story but it was still good.

[Snivypony]

3013870Thank you Natsu and Happy.

[Sketch D Tail]

3014332 Aye sir!

[Sky Hawk]

I just finished your first story. It felt rushed a little. It was also short. However I'm a novice writer too. It is difficult to write a short story and I like what you have. Good job in finishing the story. There is nothing more maddening when a story isn't finished. It is even more insane when the writer gets writers block. However it takes really courage to post a story for all the world to see and comment on. Keep writing and we'll keep reading. Nice job and see ya next time.

[beeee]

Loved it

just want to let you know its allicorn

[The Background Conquerer]

Loved this fic even though it was short and a bit rushed!

[Snivypony]

10971482
Thank you.