Gone But Not Forgotten

by broniefrom93

Authors note

And so that's it. I'm so glad for all the support from those who commented to everyone that favorited it. This was something that i had a joy writing and gave me a hunger to write some more. But this is where my readers come in. What would you like to see next? More from after this event? or a different world with a new plot? I really want to write about Luna, but what do you think? Please comment and share this to all your brony friends. you might get a muffin if Derpy doesn't find and steal all of them.

Again:

THANK YOU!

Comments

[Nazidash]

I vote for Luna. This fandom needs more Luna.

[Agent Everfree]

can i cry know trapped forever without rainbow that wores then being dead i WANT TWILIGHT TO COME HOME!

[soulwinds]

Yeah I was hoping for some sort of happy ending. Nice story either way. As for your next story... Go for Broke!

[broniefrom93]

388301 Yeah i can attest to that but to carry on this universe or a new one with twilight still home? or even just before this crisis.

388454 Yes, yes you can cry and we are here to help

388538 Sorry, like i said i wanted to go for the "feel" story. and thanks!

[Vhett]

Good story man! Though I'm bawling my eyes out....

Um If I may say this I'd like to see this universe come back so Twilight can come home and see Rainbow Dash again......please?

[broniefrom93]

390192 Firefly? and i could work with it, idk if i want to her to come back because then it takes away from her being locked away. Like when a major character always finds a way through the problem, then all the dangers dont seem as real.

[fwamp2012]

well fug. i mean this was good but the ending kinda felt like a rude bitch-slap in a weird way. You're reading along getting further in the chapters and they keep getting closer and closer to the crystal. You're getting all ready for them to win and dash will tell her feelings to twilight, and twilight(apprehensive at first) returns them and everypony lives happily ever after . but then she gets trapped and sir broniefrom93 delivers a swift bitch slap to that happy ending with a defiant NOPE! but then your hopes start to build when dash gets to talk to her and you're like maybe her love will free her and destroy the crystals power and twilight and dash will live happily ever after! but then without fail broniefrom93 comes back around for one more go with another defiant bitch slap and one final NOPE! then it's the end. and you're just like, well fug. at least that's how i felt.

Although i may not agree with the ending i must say the story was very good. It felt like an actual episode in my opinion. the pace was not to fast, but not to slow either. many fan fictions would seriously drag out many of the smaller parts, which isn't necessarily bad, but the pace of this one definitely added to my enjoyment of it. the only things that would prevent this from being a real episode was the romance factor, the progression of the mane 6's respective businesses, and the ending. but that's why this is fan fiction right? I enjoyed the story but like so many others, i wouldn't mind seeing maybe a short alternate ending chapter to get rid of the sad. you're the author so you decide cause i can be happy with just this ending too. either way, cool story bro!

[broniefrom93]

442730 Thanks a ton, thats the longest and most comprehensive comment i've gotten so far. and if you look up top it say "sad' so its going to be a sad story. I'm in the process of writing a sequel that will more or less finish it up. Sometimes a character has to die, or in this case disappear, to show all the others their mortality and forced to come with terms with it. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[broniefrom93]

567670 her accent was the HARDEST for me, i couldnt get it down. DEAL with it, the ending is ment to be BAM! Inst-a-sad