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Ok, it was interesting coming across a Blazblue crossover story. Didn't think anyone would've made one.
First, lets approach this as a Blazblue fan. I can only wonder what's going to happen with all the characters, just imagining Tager or Lambda in that world is bringing up some crazy times. Also, if Arakune got loose, boy oh boy.
Now, approaching as a writer. I'm going to level with you, there are quite a few problems with this story. I'd suggest taking this story to a ponychan review thread and getting some feedback from writers (at least, writers that can explain the issues better than I can.)
In terms of non-grammar, this story seems too ambiguous for its own good. Since I'm a fan of Blazblue, I already know who's who and what's what. However, anyone who has never taken a look at the franchise would be completely lost, I'd imagine. Given that its a crossover story, knowing the two worlds is essential to fully grasping the plot rather than getting tid bits and slowly fitting the pieces together.
So yeah, its not terrible, it just needs some work. I hope this helped!
4767 I'm actually thinking of re-writing the first part. I didn't properly spell-check and all that and hopefully make it more so that people who have never played a Blazblue game can better understand it.
Hopefully I can make the story a tiny bit better, by starting over.
Thank you for the comment!
I've waited long for a blazblue/mlp:fim crossover fanfic! Although it ain't perfect, it has potential.
Please update!
im sad i just found this and its not being updated T.T
Sadly man its the 13th city not the 7th. And if I wasn't a huge fan of BlazBlue, I would be completely lost on the humans... Though its still good, better then anything I wrote...