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Very well done! I've never seen a TwilightxSoarin story before and you executed it perfectly! It was pretty neat the way you inputted the past events that lead to the current scene. I applaud you sir/madam!
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I love TwilightxSoarin shipping! Glad to see some sexy time between the two.
Well, overall I enjoyed reading the story. The history of Twi's and Soarin's relationship was believable and not rushed, unlike as in many other short clops. That's a plus.
I have spotted maybe two little typos, but I'm too lazy to point them out
However, this hit me like a bucket of cold water while reading:
Maybe it's my personal preference, but I was shocked when I got to this fragment. You surprised me with usage of such vulgar words (and not in a positive way), considering that the rest of your story was more sophisticated in terms of wording. Personally, this was the biggest flaw of your story for me.
Also, I'd refrain from writing the exact size of his equipment and opt to use some clever parallel instead. But again, this might be my personal preference.
This sentence is plain weird to me. Maybe it's because I'm not a native English speaker... but I actually imagined him thrusting his jewels into the poor mare's sphincer... *shivers*
Maybe "on"' would be a better word to use here? And yeah... ass.
That's all I have to say. I hope that I was at least a little bit helpful
2068143 I'll admit, I was unsure of using those words, and I believe that going back for an edit would be a good idea, and I have done so recently.
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that was the fastest and best 4,000 words i've ever read.
Well, I never shipping TwiSoarin before, but the non-clop parts of this made me like this shipping. Sure, SoarDash is still OTP, but TwiSoarin is certainly nothing to sneeze at.
Now only if this was purely non-clop.
2068307 Tis a good story, I like clop with some story to it not just mindless sex since that gets old after a while.
iEspeon used Blast of Feels. Its Super Effective. Critical Hit. Nightwatch has fainted.... umm I think he is going into cardiac arrest from the pure feels behind that.....someone call 911.
@cover image: forever alone
Not
I need to stop reading all this romantic clop before my brain atrophies from the fact that this fandom has mind-meltingly fantastic writers.
A nice, feels-y story!
Wouldn't mind seeing a prequel with the courtship, mind you...
I love it. While not my favorite Twi-pairing, it is definitely high on my list. You did an excellent job with the story, even if I did have trouble noticing when it switched from past to present.
B is for Bow-ties-are-Beastly
Now my favorite two pairing mostly due to the fact I don't read anything twilight
I like this. It was sweet and funny in some parts, but sweet. Good job.
Forgive me if this sounds a bit odd or out of place, do you have plans for a sequel or followup?