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Very nice, Soarin/jack and twi/pie are my favorite combos and this one did not disappoint.
Definitely does the "Romance" tag justice.
i love these cos theyre so delightfully cheesy but so well written
Finally! A Soarin/Applejack fic. Well done sir.
I approve.
Very well written. I've always like this particular pairing. From what we see of Soarin' he seems like a laid back kind of guy who loves his sweets. Who's more paerfect for the hard working farmgirl? I like the bait and switch at the beginning and the lead up was sweet. I must say that's the first time I've read a love-making scene taking place on a cloud. (I so jelly!) Guess you could say AJ and Soarin' were on . . . . Cloud 9! hehehehe *gets shot*
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Dang very kinky I'll say
but keep up the good work and BRING ON SOME MORE!!!!!!!
Damn...this is good. Thumbs up everyone!!!
you have earned another watch friend
your writing style is wonderful
and i would like to see more of it
577338 In that case, you should take a look at my other account on this site, featuring my more family-friendly works:
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/nerothewizard
Also, a thousand thanks to you and everybody else for the positive comments, thumbs-ups, faves, and all the acknowledgements that let me know other humans actually enjoy reading things I've written, a feeling that is simultaneously gratifying and terrifying.
ME GUSTA. very well done and I think i might just read some more of your stories
699095 Thanks! I hope you enjoy them.
Just a warning, the title is very similar to Cloudy's Where Earth Meets Sky. I would recommend changing it if at all possible.
Simply remarkable, as always. I never thought Soarin'XAjay would work, but hell, you did it, haha. Very enjoyable read, I'll be keeping up with your fics. Keep it up!
711335 Thanks again, man. I really do like these two together.
Good pairing. Very well written, no grammatical errors to be seen. All-in-all a great read. I loved it!
728269 Thanks for the read and the positive comment! Every bit of feedback I get is much appreciated.
Usually I'm that guy that finds as many things wrong as possible to try and make the story better.
I am actually finding a hard time doing that first time around. Great job!
One thing: Before the "main event", it almost seemed as though they were making two long speeches. I found myself skipping it. Just to make sure you're clear about the section I'm talking about, it's this one:
Soarin smiled softly. A flood of clarity ran through his brain, and as the ideas raced through his mind, he formed them into words. “Ever since we met, I think, somewhere deep inside, I've always been ready, but the time was never right. I didn't want to do anything we were gonna regret; I didn't want to risk losing you.” Her expression softened as he poured out his heart, the faintest glimmer of moisture forming in the corners of her eyes. “I've never wanted another pony more than I've wanted you these last few months, because I...love you, AJ. I'm not just saying that because it sounds good, or because it's what you want to hear; I mean it with every fiber of my being. You're the most...real, down-to-earth pony I've ever met, and every time you talk, I know it's coming straight from your heart. I love it when you smile, and when you frown, all I can think about is what I can do to cheer you up. I...can't see myself with anypony else in Equestria.” He sighed as his confession ended, a weight lifted from his spirit.
A single tear ran down her freckled cheek, and she sniffled once before she said, “Ah know how ya feel, Soarin, cause Ah'm in the same boat. Yer an amazin' stallion, sweet an' thoughtful an' kind even though yer famous an' all, an' Ah think Ah'm the luckiest mare this side of Canterlot to have ya fer mah own.” A look of determination came over her face. “Y'all were waitin' fer the right moment, an' Ah'm gonna tell ya straight, this is it.” She stamped her hoof emphatically, and her voice soared with new strength as she said, “Yer the feller fer me, sugarcube, an' Ah'm ready for us ta go all th' way.” With a giggle, she turned her attention back to his erection, which still pointed toward the sky. “And from the look of it, Ah ain't the only one.”
There are two conclusions I have come to:
1: It is a little misplaced
OR
2: The section (particularly the section with Soarin) looks too much like a wall of dialogue that prevents you from the "good part", and needs to be a. flavored with a little bit more description, b. needs to have less dialogue, and/or c. the paragraphs need to be split up in some way.
Does that make sense to you?
CHERLA CANEA FORTWO
(ENG) I LOVE THIS STORY!!
i just realised i never commented on this...i read this over a month ago...wow
Hot pony sex, now with excessive use of the word Testacles!
1220319 *ahem* Scrotum. That is all.
But seriously, I hope you liked it.
I love this so much, I cried.
1378586 *hands you a tissue* I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the read!
I Liked it,very good.I actually like this pair.Anyways,i was hearing Carry on and seize the day by Avenged sevenfold when i was reading this.It actually goes great with it.THAT'S BESIDES THE POINT,THIS STORY ROCKS NICE JOB 10/10
1390374 I find a stimulating musical soundtrack provides the perfect backdrop for a good read. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
1378682 I think that tissue might be useful for more than crying (wink wink nudge nudge)
SoarinJack is a very very good ship and you did them justice. Its nice seeing you not just rushing into the main event. The build up was lots of fun to read and the flying style was pure awesomeness!
1835054 Thanks very much! I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and I agree that it is a very fun ship. If you'd like to take a look at a couple shorter fics of mine involving those two, feel free to check out Lunch Break and That's the Spot. Thanks again for the read, comment, and fave!
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Don't AJ and Soarin' break up though?!
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For some reason this made me think that... MURICA! I had the team America world police playing in my head the entire time...
1579197
Lul
1579197 I have no doubt that this guy is a Monty Python fan. Say no more, Say no more. wink wink, nudge nudge.
2338262 "Your wife...does she 'go?'"
"What?"
"Your wife. Is she a 'goer?'"
Classic sketch. Thanks for the comment and fave!
2339018 It'sssssssssssss Monty Python's flying circus.
never have been much of a soarinjack fan and while this fic didn't change the way i feel about it was okay
Damn it. You just made me make SoarJack my backup shipping
2673612 Nice. You should totally check out my other two SoarinJack fics; it might just move beyond backup!
...the spell on AJ weares off while their sleeping and she falls through the cloud...
Still fantastic
2738585 Oh you...
Glad you liked it!
I think you forgot about his wings.
2898120 In what respect?
That line of inquiry aside, let me say thanks for the ton of faves! I'm truly honored.
2898814 His wings are supposed to pop out when he's excited right?
2899429 While that is the conventional idea associated with pegasi, if I excluded that detail, it's likely because I didn't feel it was crucial to the narrative at the time. Certain assumptions can be made by the reader, and if they wish to imagine Soarin with a "wingboner," as it were, there's absolutely nothing wrong with that. Also, it's been so long since this story was written, I can't remember my exact thought process at the time, so it may have been an oversight. Either way, I hope that didn't detract from your enjoyment of the story as a whole, and once again, I have to say thank you for the avalanche of faves.
Omg Sorains confession to applejack. Its what I call cuteness overload! omg Squeeee it was SO cute!
3006606 Heh...you can tell it's a good story when you make the audience "squee." Again, thank you for the comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story. If you like, feel free to check out my other two tales featuring Soarin and Applejack!
I don't often (read:don't) comment on clop stories... but this will be an exception.
I really liked this story, as it didn't seem like meaningless sex or thinly veiled author gratification; it felt like they were making love. I could tell how much they meant to one another, and I can only hope to match that.
Mechanically, I don't think I've ever seen a better edited... well... story in general for a long time. Good on you, author. Well done. There were only two things that jumped out at me, the "single tear" bit and the whole "Applejack tastes like apples" thing. Other than those small issues, I really liked this and actually intend to use it as a sort of guide in lieu of a clop writing guide.
I have arrived at a place where I feel almost like I should give you a watch... Another story of yours should confirm or debunk that idea. I don't foresee the latter happening.