It's Hearts and Hooves day and while Scootaloo doesn't have a special somepony she has romantic feelings for, there is someone she still has feelings for, and thinks needs a little proof of her love. She'll need a little bit of help to make the delivery, and she's nervous about what might happen, but she's going to do it anyway.
This is my first fanfic, not just of MLP but ever really. It's an idea I've been sitting on for a while now and my thanks go out to PSP7Master for giving me the nudge to actually write it. Also just to clarify, the romance is NOT between Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash.
Chapters (3)
Aww that letter was sooo sweet. Great first story you have, keep it up
(Joke) Alt. Title: Hearts And Hooves Day The Hard Way
If anybody does mistake this for a Scootaloo/Rainbow Dash shipfic, that means they don't give a damn about Fluttershy.
Also, PSP7Master? Huh. Convinced me to make The Living Tombstone and Wooden Toaster play gospel, now this. Strange, eh?
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If you enjoyed that you'll really like the next part.
PSP7Master sure does get around huh?
Thank you
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Normally I do use puns and references in titles, so I do wish I had known about that
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Well, if you like my title, you can always change it to that. It's happened before, where I come in with a (Joke) Alt. Title and the author of the story changes it to my joke (see I Am He As You Are She As You Are Me And We Are All Rule 63'd and Bucking Magnets, How Do They Work?). I'm not saying you should, but y'know...
I did not see anything grammatically that stuck out, but I generally ignore them when I read anyway... unless its something major.
The story itself was good; however, I felt Fluttershy randomly bursting into full blown crying was slightly out of character. She is very empathetic, so It would make sense for her to tear up a little, but not necessarily cry the way she did. Unless, she knows why Rainbow was crying as well.
I feel like there's a lot left to tell here, and am interested to see were it leads.
I know how hard it can be to finally hit that submit button, just did it myself for the first time last week as well.
Good Luck
Ooh, I really like this so far.
It's cute! I really like the sisterhood between Rainbow and Scootaloo, and the romance hinting seems promising. 
It's a good start!
Great story, looking forward what's next, keep up the good work!
Full of D'Aaaaaaw, but since the crying is unexplained, it feels very awkward in this fic.
Is it safe to guess that Fluttershy is going to be involved in a romance?
I like this story. Keep it up!
It definitely has potential, and that letter is the easily the sweetest thing I've read all week so there's that. Consider this followed until further notice.
I love FlutterDash, it's my favourite pairing. I love the sisterhood between Rainbow and Scootaloo. And when all three factors, with all three pegasi together, like a little family, it's awesome!
What a sweet letter and a lovely photo too!
Awww, and Rainbow got two wonderful gifts, truly showing she's not alone.
You really can give any kind of love on Hearts and Hooves Day. 
Another chapter and plenty more AWWWS to be had. This is why I love everyone rated romance stories more than any other. All cute and fluffy and makes you smile. I'm looking forward to more.
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Glad you liked it, and I think you'll enjoy the epilogue.
I love fluffly stories, so the story I inevitably wrote was bound to be one
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That was basically the inital idea going in to it. That in the end they become like one giant, happy family. I was incredibly self conscious over the letter so I'm glad you liked it
What if, like, Dash and Fluttershy become a thing and then they like, take in scootaloo as their own? Happy family complete at last!
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One big, happy, adorable family 
That was the idea
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i smell a sweet and awesome fic on the wayy!
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I'm still surprised I wrote and published it 
Well right now there's just the short epilogue left, but there is always room for a sequel to extend it. Right now though I'm not so sure, I'll see how the ending gets received. My pre-reader said that she felt it could be part of a larger story, and it could, so I guess we'll have to wait and see.
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I'll keep eyes, ears, and hooves open for anything. besides, maybe i'll have to write one! I'm all inspired and stuff now. have a follow!
2047382 We all have our styles of writing letters the way we believe characters would! Looks like they really do dictate when writing them.
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It's like cotton candy; fluffy and sweet. I like it.
There are at most a few sentences I would rephrase, and occasionally I would have separated the paragraphs differently, but it's easy to read and nothing sticks out as a glaring flaw. Great job on your first try, and make sure to thank your proofreader.
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Normally I format my stories differently, I used the formatting I did here because that's just how I generally see people format around here. As for the sentences, well using passive sentences is my biggest flaw when it comes to writing and the one I seem to have the most trouble overcoming. I'll get there though 
I'm glad you liked it, and yes, its pretty fluffy. Even I was amazed at how fluffy it ended up.
She only pre-read, not proof read, but I did thank her immensely
I LOVED IT!!! Most Interesting.....
(i dont care if i mispelt that, its cute!)
Here have a stache
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Although, sadly, I can't grow facial hair very well 
I'm really glad you liked it
Short sweet and fantastic. Good job!
For a first effort at fanfiction, this is really good! You've got a nice feel for sentence structure, and your writing flows well. I think you're getting a good handle on characterization with these three. There are a few bits of characterization I'd like to see more of. For example, Fluttershy rarely comes off as nervous in delivering her card to Rainbow Dash, even though she's gone years without giving her one and apparently spent a long night working on getting it right. I also found the immediate physical signs of affection between Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy kind of surprising. I do feel like your story put in the work to let me buy into the appearance of that affection, but I feel like you might have overplayed your hand by putting in so much of it right after the letter was read. In a similar vein, Scootaloo slept her way out of the picture kind of abruptly, but I decided I was willing to overlook that one. I do feel like you did a good job setting up the through-line of the story, though. Like I said, you definitely got me to buy into the exchanges between the characters. It was only these two points that I felt could have been either toned down, slowed down, or justified a little more thoroughly. I thought you generally did a good job with characterization on Rainbow Dash and an even better job with Scootaloo.
If you were planning to keep writing - and I'd encourage you to do so, I think this shows a lot of promise - I'd suggest you try to work on tightening up your language some, too. Like I said, your writing flows well, and that's a great starting point. But it will flow even better if you cut out extraneous sentences and words/phrases that don't really add meaning to the story. Trust your reader to be able to fill in some blanks. That will spare you from walking through the particulars of every action, and from worrying about crafting precise descriptions when you'd be better off trying for evocative ones.
Very good effort. I've given you a thumb's up and tossed this into my favorites list.
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What happened to Scootaloo is explained very nicely in the epilogue I'll be posting in a bit, so hopefully that will assuage that particular feeling. As for the descriptions, it seems I either write too descriptively, or not descriptively enough. I'm writing a science fiction story in my spare time and I feel a lot of the time that it's just very bare bones, and there's not enough to it. It's basically just the story, what's happening. Also one of the reasons I went so descrpitive here is because it seems people didn't quite get everything. Although that was mostly really in the second part.
Thank you though, for being nice about criticism
I'll take what you've said on board, and see how my writing does (or I suppose doesn't) change. Naturally I'm quite a verbose person with a flair for the dramatic and I think when I'm writing something I enjoy, like this, it really comes through. Perhaps a little too much.
Cute, I always liked the idea of Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy getting together and adding Scootaloo to their little family
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Definitely enjoyed that ending. I like to flip between sadfics and sweetfics, and I'm happy I'll have this in my favorites list to come read again in the future when I need a pick-me-up. I know what you mean about finding the balance on description, too. Your writing style reminds me a lot of how I used to write, and for me it took a while to really teach myself to tighten up my sentences. The balance between giving the reader too much information and too little can be hard to pin down. That said, I think you're always better off erring on the side of too much information, and I wouldn't have favorited this story if you weren't already doing pretty well with that balance. Again, great job and thank you for the story!
For your first story, this was pretty good! A lot better than when I first started writing. XD So hey, good for you! You're off to a very promising start.
This was so cute. Once again, you know how much I love the idea of the three of them coming together as a family. It's nice to actually see the idea of it more and more, since it's really an underplayed story idea. Well done! So cute and so sweet.
This was a nice piece of fiction. I like the little ones that don't have any kind of grand adventure or heart-breaking story once in a while.
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I like some sadfics, but I have to be in the mood for them really, and tend to stick to fluffy stories.
I write a lot in my spare time, mostly a scifi novel I'm working on. I fancied doing something fun for a break and I had this idea forever so I just finally wrote it.
Thank you very much for reading it too. Glad you liked the ending and I've appreciated all the advice
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I don't think I've actually come across a story like this, which helped me write it. I really hate doing things that have done before. This is my first fanfic, but not my first story
ISH OKAYS WE STILL WUVZ YOUR STORIES! stupid caps again....
Loved it, hope you plan on continuing this story if you feel like it =)
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But I'm glad you enjoyed the story 
There's certainly room for an extension, and if I get an idea I'll be happy to do it. Right now I have an idea for another fic entirely, but I'm focusing more on my non-poni writings right now. Which seems like a huge shame because I only just started writing poni
So...adorably sweet. It brought so much happy tears.
THank you for this story. THank you so much!
2043285 what do you mean unexplained? they're crying cause its so sweet. tears of joy, man.
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*it's
2043285 Shy is crying both because of Scootaloo's card and also the fact that she herself had a card for Rainbow
You had no reason to be fearful this was a fun and heartwarming story. Moving on to the next chapter now.....
This was a nice squishy happy story good job.
Aww, that letter was so sweet.
Great story, sorry I hadn't read it before now!
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You read it, that's all that matters
This is a very sweet story so far.
Minor typo:
The last two words shouldn't be italic (assuming they aren't actually written in the card).
Beautiful. Short and sweet, packed with emotion. Well done.
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Thanks for pointing it out, I'll go fix it now. I'm also glad you enjoyed the story 
Ahhh crud. I think I did it properly in G-Doc and then when I tried to transfer it over things went a little wrong. That typo has been there for Celestia knows how long
So sweet
Oh my goodness, this was amazing!