It's not easy for anypony when they can see that two of their best friends are perfect for each other. Some would just give up and hope that the two eventually worked it out but not Pinkie Pie. She's going to get these two together no matter what and she's no stranger to playing matchmaker.
This is a just a funny little Flutterdash one shot fic that I wrote ages ago and published on Deviantart. I recently reworked the idea and added a bit more just to flesh it out some. Sorry if it's not up to my usual standard but it was written a while ago. If you notice any grammar or spelling mistakes please tell me.
Chapters (1)
It's nice. Could use some indentation, and there's the odd spelling error, but they're hardly noticeable.
Since I have a talent for finding spelling errors apparently, I'll note a few.
Whenever Fluttershy ran it to her she seemed kind of hopeful and shy at the same time
It should be in
also there's a couple of cases where fluttershy is spelled flutterhsy, and one case where stares should be spelled stars
Anyway, an excellent story, though I think Pinkie may have broken the fourth wall a little too hard.
1542674 Glad you liked it.
1542853 Thank you.
Pinkie Pie can never break the fourth wall too hard 
Even Pinkie knows Flutterdash is best ship.
1546215 What can I say? She's got a knack for that sort of thing.
Although I must admit this story made me wonder where a Gummy Tank ship could go... when I read Living In The Present, Hoping For The Future, I kinda half thought that might be where it was going. 
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Personally I would find it hilarious if Spike was shipped with one of the pets.
1546286 That would be funny but it's never really made clear if he would be able to talk to them and understand them... oh well! All we need is a little Twilight-magicy-zap-zap and that would be one hell of a story.
>w<! Cute and funny. Very nice little story. :3
1551571 Absolutely! Pinkie Pie didn't even attempt to make sense in this story!
So, I saw this yesterday. But it was late at night. For some reason when it's late at night I'm extra nit-picky. But my dad turned off the internet somewhere in the middle of it, and then went to sleep. So I didn't get to comment. But now I am.
Whatever, I'll try. 
. Anyway, love the Pinkie. Disregarding the laws of physics while trying to hook her friends up. Just an average day. And I need to read the story where she tried to get Tank and Gummy together. 
I actually devised I system to separate the corrections, so I'll post them in another comment. 
Now, I had something more intelligent to say last night, but I forgot.
Sooooooooooooo, another story. And it's epic! No shocker there
Really awesome, as per usual. I really have nothing else profound to say, so I'll head into the time-honoured tradition of CORRECTIONS!
Did I mention that I get really nit-picky at night?
1555702 Thank you.
I'm really glad you liked it. As for the Tank Gummy story... well, I might get around to writing it one day.
I'm glad, I need nit picky people, they're the ones who find the most mistakes.
TIME FOR CORRECTIONS! Corrections that I made late at night in OCD mode, some of which I don't even really see as that important anymore. But I'm too lazy to sift through them, so you're getting them all. And look at my new system! Isn't it pretty? I'm dividing them up by issue. If something has more than one issue, both issues will be addressed in the first section it falls into. It won't appear in the section for its other issue if it has already appeared once. Now, GO:
Section 1: Capitalization.
Rainbow Dash demands her name be capitalized!
Also, for the second one, I recommend putting a comma before "then". Pinkie squinted at rainbow for a moment, then brightened.
Pinkie wants her name capitalized too!
I also suggest that you break the sentence up more. Maybe make it two sentences? And perhaps get rid of the word "then" and replace if with a comma. If she didn’t agree, Pinkie would keep annoying her. But if she did then she might just be in for one very awkward night.
The first period should either be changed to a comma, or the word "and" should be capitalized.
See'ya has gotta be capitalized.
Yes, I'm looking at your one word sentence.
Looks like someone pressed the shift key for too long, since Pinkie's name has the first two letters capitalized.
Even Tank and Gummy want their names capitalized!
The word "explained" shouldn't be capitalized. Also, you put the h before the s in Fluttershy's name. Which leads us to Section 2...
Section 2: Flutterhsy
Section 3: Dialogue ending:
So, I think I read somewhere that if the statement would normally end in a period, and the speaker is identified after it's said without an action in place, it should now end with a comma. But there were a couple of times where you had sentence using that format, but ended it with a period.
According the those rules it should be “Good morning Pinkie,” said Fluttershy meekly.
Same rule. Plus, I think it would work better if there was a comma after the word "oh". “Oh, physics,” said Pinkie Pie dismissively.
If that was supposed to be a question, it should have a question mark. Otherwise, I think it would fit Pinkie better if an exclamation mark was used. And perhaps a comma after oh. And a comma before bouncing. But then it might be better is the word Pinkiewas before said. So: “Oh, you have a crush on her too!/?” Pinkie said, bouncing even higher. If you want, you could change said to another word, but that's not necessarily necessary. I've always wanted to say "necessarily necessary".
“Oh come on Pinkie, it’ll be fun,” said Twilight, still blushing.
That being said, I'm still gonna mention them, since I think some sentences could sound better.
Section 4: Sentence Flow (Mostly IMO)
Most of the things mentioned in this section can be to replied to with the statement "That's just, like, your opinion, man".
A comma after Um?
Maybe take out the then and replace it with a comma. “Well if you’re alright, do you feel like getting some breakfast?
A comma after visiting?
The second sentence is kinda run-on. You could try splitting it into two. I asked the author in my obligatory shattering of the fourth wall. But that’s not important. Or maybe add a comma there. I asked the author in my obligatory shattering of the fourth wall, but that’s not important.
I think the second comma should be a period instead. “Don’t worry about physics, they’re not important. What is important is Rainbow Dash practically sneaking out of your cottage in the wee hours of the morning.”
Could use a comma after jealous. Maybe after after no. So, something like: “Ooh, jealous are we? No, I mean she has a crush on you.”
A comma after actually?
I think there should be a comma after why. Also, perhaps consider an exclamation mark instead of a period. I think it would Pinkie better in this situation. "Why, you and Rainbow Dash of course!”
There probably shouldn't be a comma after pegasus, but there should be one after nice. Breakfast had been nice, although Rainbow had been able to tell that the yellow pegasus had other things on her mind.
Seems kinda run-on. Try: It wasn’t long before the sky was perfectly clear. That left one cyan pegasus was bored and wondering how to spend the rest of her day.
A comma after sighed?
Try a period instead of the first comma. Also, dunno if there should be a space after the ellipsis. …or a cyan maniac smashing through her garden gate and colliding with her at nearly the speed of sound. That would do it, every time.
I ran out of space during Section 5, so I'll post that with a new post.
Continuation!
Section 5: Other
Shouldn't have a space after the quotation mark.
Not sure if ponies were actually staring at them, or typo.
I think you meant stars.
I have a funny story about this! If you want to read it, go ahead. If not, you look at the correction.
Then, I found a typo in the dictionary! The sentence said: the state of being mal e or female. Mal e. MAL E! Hah! Everyone was asleep, so I couldn't show them. But even if they were awake, I still couldn't tell them, because of the word it was under. 
Regardless, I still showed my sister today. ANYWAY, yeah, it should be straight.
So, anyway. I was pretty sure you meant straight instead of strait, but I couldn't google it because my internet wasn't working. So, I checked my dictionary. I was flipping through the pages, but being my immature self, I got distracted by a certain word that starts with an s and ends with an x.
Rainbow just flew straight up.
Should have a the word I after would. Dunno if in to should be into or not, so eh.
then I would drop it.”
Google tells me the word non-platonic should have a hyphen. But it always says it can be two words. So it doesn't matter. I'm just posting it anyway to try and make up for my mistake. THIS SHOULD BE IN SECTION 4!
And I can't edit my old post to add it there because I'm pretty sure there isn't enough space. Even if they were, it would mean I would have to stop writing this. Sure, I could copy and paste. But that would mean I couldn't copy and paste the sentence without losing this all. Either way, YOU GOT THE EMAIL! YOU WOULD FOREVER KNOW OF MY MISTAKE ANYWAY! Hey, I should probably get to the point right about now. Yeah, so, anyway you should consider adding a comma after way. In truth, she had caught herself looking at Fluttershy a few times in a very non platonic way, but had always wrenched her gaze away.
That's all I got. BASK IN THE GLORY OF MY NEW SYSTEM!
Also, I lied. I found either two or three of them to be completely unnecessary, and so they weren't put in these posts. And sorry for the loooong time I took to get around to posting these. My family kept yelling at me to do stuff, and kept getting distracted by ponies. 
I didn't even go other parts of FiMFiction, but the ponies are EVERYWHERE, man! Also, I had to format this and type it all up. Sorry! I promise I won't do this next time! 
. I usually add either 
or 
after giving anyone edits, because without them I seem harsher. I don't want to seem rude or mean, I truly like their fics! I just want to help! And those two are the most fitting. Maybe I could start using 
. I wish there were a fitting RD emoticon, 'cause RD is best pony. 
Anyway, 
. Also, 
Anyway, obligatory
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Thank you for all the help with that. you were right on pretty much everything. Funny story by the way. 
Also, I apologise to FlutterSHY for constantly misspelling her name. I tend to type too fast and I always seem to hit the h before the s. 
Oh well. Thanks again. 
1557268 You're awesome! Just have to get that out of the way right now.
(Additional note on the whole Flutterhsy thing: I've set word's auto-correct to change Flutterhsy to Fluttershy, should it ever come up, so hopefully you will never see that mistake again.)
1557434 Well, thank you!
I think that you're pretty awesome too! And I believe Fluttershy will approve of your new methods.
Almost forgot: Adding to this to the FlutterDash folder in the Shipping Group!
Random Observation! Did you know that every member of the mane six have six emoticons on FiMFiction EXCEPT Rarity and Applejack?
It's a conspiracy
1557592 That's only because the other four emoticons feature them doing things that it's not appropriate for everypony to see them doing.
(Yes I ship Rarijack.)
1557666 Rarijack? Good. I approve. But Flutterdash is better. I also believe that that is a feasible theory on why Applejack and Rarity have one less than the rest...
To the Fanfic-Mobile! AWAY!
Oh wait, there are already fanfics for that.
is pinkie blind?
how can she not see appledash?!
1578737 Because she is under the command of the most crazy insane Flutterdash shipper there is.
oh that sounds adroable, a pinkie pie date
TAMMY IS BEST SHIP!
But for all seriousness, this was really cute! ^^
not to mention I always like to see some Twipie and Rarijack in my Flutterdash
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Sorry, but some of your suggestions are incorrect, or at the least, very questionable. I pointed out the ones that really grate on my nerves. Actually, it's just one and involves the word "but". Much less fun than "butt" =(
>If she didn’t agree, Pinkie would keep annoying her. But if she did then she might just be in for one very awkward night.
Negative, Ghostrider. That ends up with you starting a sentence with a conjunction. Use a comma before the "but". You also should have a comma before "then" as that's still a dependent clause preceding its independent clause.
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> You could try splitting it into two. I asked the author in my obligatory shattering of the fourth wall. But that’s not important.
You really like suggesting people abuse conjunctions, huh? At least this time you said put a comma there as an option. That really should be the default response. If you see a "but" and there isn't a comma in front of it, odds are good there should be.
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A comma after sighed?
Yes. A comma before "but" is pretty much the rule. Also, "okay" not "ok".
This has been a late-night, drunken, OCD fueled nitpick.
/Basic rule is never start a sentence with a conjunction
//But you can ignore these rules in dialogue
///Which is why I didn't get onto you for starting a sentence with "And"
////Also, very close in 3rd person pov
/////Or first person
//////SLASHIES
1672362 I've never really been much good with the whole "but can act as a comma" rules as they don't seem terribly consistent as they were explained to me. I'm not sure I understood correctly but the way one of my English teachers explained it, it sounded like "but" can act as a comma. I'm not, on the whole, very good with commas at any rate but I will look in to it.
1667809 Don't know what Tammy is.
Anyhow, glad you liked it. I do love to put a little Twipie and Rarijack in to everything. Rarijack is just so cute (though not as cute as Flutterdash of course.)
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Of course!
Tammy was Tank + Gummy, I was being silly
1676680 Ooooohhhhhh
gotcha. I like this ship name, I HATH DECREED IT A KEEPER. 
Who knows, one day I might actually write that story. 
May I have your permission to edit this story? I can help fix a few of the grammar issues to polish up the prose =3.
OMG!!!! U SHIP EVERYONE I SHIP!!!!!!!! I thought I was the only one!!!!!
FLUTTERDASH4LIFE!!!
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Then there wouldn't be Flutterdash!!