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Dr. Whooves is Ponyville's esteemed clockmaker. Well, he's the clockmaker when he isn't busy defeating evil aliens and adventuring through all of time and space. One day, he meets a strange mare in his TARDIS, and she just won't leave. What's the poor Time Lord to do?
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I literally submitted this five minutes ago. What the hell just happened.
2026713 INSTANT APPROVAL
Well that was a fun romp.
Now please excuse me while I wipe the Coca-cola off my monitor.
Also, is this the 9th, 10th or 11th Doctor? Since they have such different personalities.
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I like to think that all good Doctors are the 10th Doctor.
2026713
They streamlined the approval process, apparently, or something.
2026741
Neither, it's the pony Doctor!
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Poni poni poni poni poniponiponi!
You didn't...
I like.
This made me smile. Also, I need to retrieve my mind from the gutter.
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Sadly this didn't include the part where she says "Its smaller on the outside".
The way you portrayed Derpy/Ditzy reminds me of Clara Oswin Oswald.
Goody. A Doctor Who fic by you. This should be a fun romp.
Really? I find that many stories are entirely about the Doctor and Derpy meeting.
Not bad. Have a fave and a stache.
Quick! Don‘t ask questions! Just accept this review from: Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: Get out of my TARDIS!
Grammar score out of 10: 9 I don’t think anyone’s grammar is perfect, but yours is still pretty good.
Pros:
Doctor Whooves is always welcome when it’s written well.
The Doctor was spot on.
I would rather like to see where this story could go.
Cons:
His companion is almost always Derpy. It’s become a boring cliché by now.
It felt like it could have been longer.
There isn’t really a number three…
Notes Section:
Not a whole lot to say here. For the most part, you did a good job. I don’t think I need to reiterate my pros section, now do I? BUT, I’m pretty sure you want me to talk about the cons, eh?
Too Bad.
…
Just kidding, I’ll totally elaborate.
Anyways, I shall start at the top. I understand that being the other half of what I call the “brony-made duo,” it makes sense for Derpy to be the companion. And it can still work, provided you write the story well enough. All I’m saying is it would be nice to see some other pony get to travel with the doctor. It wouldn’t have to be one of the mane six, either. It could be another background pony who was adopted by bronies, like maybe Lyra, or Vinyl. Heck, I’ll even give you a title for a Vinyl Scratch traveling with Doctor Whooves story: Wubs for the Doctor. Doesn’t that sound awesome?
(Psst. Hey, whoever is reading this. If you actually decide to use that idea, it’d be pretty awesome if you gave me a shout out for it. Just sayin‘.)
The second con isn’t really as straightforward as it sounds. What I meant was, it feels like there should be more to this story. I don’t know if there will be, so that may go away in time.
Overall, good job! You certainly earned a favorite and up vote from me!
Enjoy your review! I‘d really appreciate if you checked out my : Que Sera, Sera
I like it
Actually, it's the fifteenth since the original, so it would be new-new-new-new-new, new-new-new-new,new-new-new-new-new-new-new Equestria.
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Yes, but that's a mouthful, so they just shortened it to New Equestria.
or New (15) Equestria.
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I like it too.
2026713 I guess everypony just like these kinds of stories
This is extremely silly.
Derpy X Doctor Hooves. My life is complete.
I love you for this. Now give us more.
*looks at the chapter post dates*
I suppose the rest will be for January 2015?
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Heh heh heh
It's still being written, just... very slowly. I don't have a cutie mark in time management...
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Hmm. Seems that with the new update, they still haven't fixed the notification problem
Basically, people don't get notifications of replies if the reply isn't in the same chapter as the comment that's being replied to. My comment was made on chapter 1. Your reply, probably made on the main page of the fic, ended up in the last chapter, meaning I got no notification of it. I only found your message because I decided to check back here after a few hours.
So yeah. Keep that in mind when replying to comments
5126497
Ah, don't worry, I'm the same. Was basically just making sure it wasn't another ghost town fic. Your reply was enough for me to decide it's worth investing my time and emotions into.
Hah. I love this interaction
> Nieghngland
As pun on England, I think you have to write the "Neigh" part correctly. You switched the 'e' and the 'i'.
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Shhhh that's intentional...
Now excuse me while I go edit something that TOTALLY isn't that because I don't make mistakes.
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Oh, and thanks for the tip on replying, my friend! That problem could have caused some awkward or frustrating situations had it not been addressed.
Huh. I had expected Pinkie Pie to have taken it over. Then again, maybe I just read too much Slice of Life comic.
See, that's what I like about Doctor Who - all those silly Noodle Incidents
Ahh. The plot commences!
Remarks and corrections:
> Keep your head down and try not be be noticed.
Double "be". Should be "try not [to] be noticed."
> His sentence was cut short when he turns around.
Keep consistent tense. (Yes, even in a time travel story!) Should be "when he [turned] around."
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At this rate, I should just make you my editor. Thanks for pointing these things out!
Booyah!
Bug people and tube ponies! The plot thickens!
Remarks and corrections:
> She's be trapped in a box
"[She'd] be trapped in a box"
> Surely whoever put her here would want to keep her alive long enough to do whatever it is they wanted to do to her
Missing period behind the sentence. Also, tense inconsistency: "whatever it [was] they wanted to do to her".
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Thanks! Corrected all those mistakes.
Looks like the TARDIS' influence reaches quite far
Really? You went there? Reversing the Star-Trek-damned polarity?
Clever girl. And then I mean the TARDIS, not Derpy.
Remarks and corrections:
> before the remnants become to stale to track!
"become [too] stale to track!"
> Whoosh...
Isn't the accepted onomatopoeia "vworp vworp vworp"?
By the way, you forgot the "h" in the last of these three. Don't know if that was intentional or a mistake.
> When I was done that
Should be "When I was done [with] that".
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Fixed.
Hah!
Never a dull moment with Derpy around. She either saves the day... or plunges it into chaos all by herself!
This whole thing SO needs to end with a gag of them coming back only a minute after leaving
I adore these silly time gags
Right, right, but I'm not sure medical degrees from before the banishment of Nightmare Moon are still accepted here. Medical practices evolved a bit since then, you know. Did that even include nano-treatments?
Ohey, the good old psychic paper
Remarks and corrections:
> "How did you manage to both to both set a fire and flood the market at the same time?"
-Double "to both"
-The expression is "to set fire to", so that should be "to both [set fire to] and flood the market"
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Fixed. And don't worry, the next chapter is being typed up as we speak.
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Well, I consider it a free service. I notice these errors anyway, so, why not make sure they get fixed too, hm?
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The fact the chapter indication on the main listing is now a link straight to the post in the actual chapter comments makes it a lot less awkward than it was... though the notifications should really point to that link too, instead of the one on the main page view
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Well, I appreciate it anyway. Now, if you like this story, you'll probably like my other story, Moondrop, as well.
They're not similar in the slightest, I'm just shamelessly self-promoting. Don't judge me, an author's gotta get out there somehow.
Doesn't it actually work by showing them what they want to see?
Oooh-kay, seems his psychic paper works slightly different than the Doctor Who canon one, then?
...oh. I see what you did there
Hah! For Derpy's sake, though, he might want to say "portable phones" instead
Remarks and corrections:
> “Show's them what I want them to see
"[Shows] them what"
> a coupon to Cheesy Crust's pizzaria down the street
"pizzeria"
> she wen through a phase in her teenage years
"she [went] through"
5127431
Fixed.
it's alive! it's ALIIIVVEEE