Through a series of unusual events, Humans from our world are spontaneously thrust into Ponyville along with their homes. With no immediate way back home and in bodies they don't fully understand, both the natives and 'new-comers' are both forced to co-exist with each other. And with differences in culture and ideas, what could possibly go wrong? But when a mysterious figure threatens the new co-existence, it is up to Daniel Freeman, a teenage 'Human new-comer', and his new-found friends to stop it before things get out of hoof.
Chapters (11)
Another generic self-insert. At least this is the first one today.
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This is sort of a self-insert, but not completely. For one, I changed all the names and the personalities of each character, including the main character.
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Putting any representation of yourself in a story is a self-insert. If you kill a friendly man with a knife, and a timid man with a flamethrower, they're still both kills.
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Okay, so it is. Thanks for the clarification. I initially assumed that a self-insert just meant that the author used themselves as characters with no modifications to the actual character that was used.
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It can also mean that, but the term "self-insert" in its essence simply means the author putting himself in a story (i.e. Akira Toriyama in his series Dr. Slump.
Hmm interesting! an "oops" catching a sizable number of occupied houses in its wake. Very ambitious!
Will the pets also have been changed by being boosted to Equestrian standards of intelligence as well? (most small animals there show sometimes disturbing levels of intelligence. Even Shy-shy's featherbrained chickens appear to understand speech despite being unable to talk)
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Thanks for your comment. But since school has started up for me, it has slowed my progress down a bit. But I haven't abandoned the project.
As for your question about the pets, yes they would. I have a reason for it, but I want to save the reason for it for later on, since I don't want to give any spoilers away.
im not sure how to react to this whether to cry, or laugh very hard.
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I was experimenting with the story a bit. Did I have the funny scene and emotional scene too close together?
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well the emotional scene was kinda weird to me, but other than that I thought it was good but I like everything so I'm not a good judge.
I've been waiting for the this to update. Was clearing out a lot of stories I was watching and I'm glad I didn't clear this one. I like what I've read so far and its different and I like different.
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Thanks. Is there any particular parts that you liked?
Will read.
2798622 Just the fact that instead of one human or a small group you more or less dropped an entire town of human turned ponies into Equestria. Also, none of the turned humans know how to be ponies and they're all going through a roller coster of emotions right now, case in point the dad doesn't know what to take this. It also shows not everyone is happy to be a pony. So I'm interested in seeing where this is going and how the rest of the new ponies are taking to their new bodies.
Very good, my good sir. It's an Intresting idea to say the least. Had one similar a while back, just never did it. You get a fave since I don't know how to follow stories
this story would have been so much better with a non real world town. No TV show FIM to go from and no first person narration
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Technically, the way that I have set it up, is that the new arrivals are not from any single town/city, but instead was picked from a variety of towns/cities, so no one is from the same place. I did this to make things a bit more interesting if no one knew each other. And besides, I don't remember specifying any specific town/city in my story (if I'm wrong, then please let me know).
And as for the multiple POVs in my story, I already have been taking steps to hopefully reduce it to only the first person perspective.
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the first person narration is what I like the least, and it was the real world nature of the people you'd brought it that bother me, as in they could have heard of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. I think it would be far more entertaining without the comparison/familiarity with the show done by any transformed humans
Continue and update soon, please. Imagine Daniel's father face when seeing how his wife and son become love their new forms and shock when hearing his wife tell something in style is better to be pony and hooves is better as hands/feet and more.