30 years old closet brony from the center of Europe. Just happily doing my thing in my corner of the internet.
Sweetie Belle writes a sentence during class. Just a simple sentence over a simple piece of paper. But soon, that sentence begins to obsess her. As nopony seems to understand her, she begins to run away with the obligation to find out the answer to the question:
"Why would a simple sentence have so much importance?"
A very simple story with a very simple idea.
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I know them feels, Sweetie.
Wut?
interesting
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I'll translate it as a confirmation that I succeeded (even partially) in describing that kind of feeling. Because I want to, or need to, I don't know...
1794819
I hear that in some comments. I'm just not sure why. I wonder how what I write could be considered interesting. I just intend it to be entertaining.
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That was good, bravo.
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Thanks. Happy you enjoyed it.
Lay. "She went to the window and glanced outside where her future lay." Lay.
1795165
You're right. I'll go correct that now. (well, in past time, so laid, no?)
Oh english, why are you so hard to use?
Thanks.
ps: the worst but funniest thing in this is that I put the window/widow in only to make fun of how many mistakes I make when writing. Oh life... so ironic.
1795238
... er, no that sounds wrong. Her future lies out the window, that is where it lay. I'm going to lay down, that is where I laid. Here is a page of the various permutations of lie/lay. Lay is both present tense lay and past tense lie.
English, man, how does that work?
EDIT#3: Except 'to lie' as in to fib, which is 'lied' instead of 'lay' or 'laid.' Seriously, what is up with this language?
1795257
Okay, I went with "lay". Should be entirely corrected. Well, I decided to write in english, I should better assume the consequences of my choice.
Thank you again for the correction and the informations.
1795287
No problem. You write really well otherwise. I just wanted to point that out since it was the focus of the work.
I have to say, when I went blindly browsing around the newest fanfics looking for somthing to devert myself for a minute, I never expected somthing of this quality.
I can honestly say that this may have inspired me to finish my current story, and believe me, thats not an easy feat.
have a like my friend, you've most definatly earned it.
The one thing that did keep throwing me out of this fic was "Sweetie Bell" rather then "Sweetie Belle". I enjoyed it otherwise, though.
Profound.
Shrimps.
Wut?
1796304
Happy to hear it. Mad scientists stories aren't easy to write, I envy you a little, I haven't had the courage yet to try one. (maybe you won't mind if I put my nose in it...)
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Oh god... I'm sorry, really sorry. I just realized how silly "Sweetie Bell" sounds for an english speaker. I made the mistake because "Sweetie Belle" sounded too "french". My fault. Should be corrected.
1794945 I'm with you. My story got featured and all I heard from a lot of people in PMs is that it was "interesting". That leaves so much up for debate. It could interesting in a good OR a bad way. I personally like it when people use these words "I enjoyed this story" or "I liked this".
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No problem. I'd imagine it's meant to sound French, with her being related to Rarity.
Looks good, though you missed one in the description. And don't worry, I wouldn't have favorited it if I didn't enjoy it anyways...
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Yup, Or even "Good potential, but missused" or "I like the concept, but I think you did it wrong". But in the end, people say what they want. I'm actually surprised so many people are taking the time to comment my stories, even if only for a "interesting".
And as I'm the one to leave so much freedom to the reader to interpret the story as he wishes, I shouldn't complain to have to interpret the comments the way I want to.
Still...
1798177
Corrected the description. I should stop doing twenty things at the same time. Still feels funny english speaker would want things to sound french (like Trixie saying "moi" with the strangest accent). The relation between english speaker and french is still a mystery to me.
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Well, with Trixie, I've seen her portrayed as coming from Neigh Orleans before, the Equestria version of New Orleans, and there's a sizable population of French speakers there.
Also, "belle" is also a word in English that was borrowed from French. Though the main time you'd hear it would be in cases like the song "Becoming Popular" with the lyrics: "I'll be the belle of the ball, the star of the show." Of course, I suspect with Rarity being Sweetie Belle's sister that Belle is also her family name, giving a nice double meaning to those lyrics.
(But don't mind me. If I let myself run on long enough, I might start talking about the Norman conquest of England, and the effect that had in bringing French words into English.
)
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Well, I wouldn't mind that much. I actually find it interesting to learn more about how enlish is built and the subtilities of the language. Would it only be because I intent to use that language at the best of my (poor) abilities to write.
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Well, to be honest, I'm not that sure of my ability to lecture at length on subjects I read about a few years back, but I can talk about it a bit, I suppose. Just keep in mind that I could easily be misremembering details. Just basically figure I'm not a scholar on history, just someone who's interested in languages. (Though, oddly, not enough to actually get around to learning other languages...
)
Two quotes to keep in mind with English:
"English is the result of Norman men-at-arms attempting to pick up Saxon barmaids and is no more legitimate than any of the other results."
--H. Beam Piper
"The problem with defending the purity of the English language is that English is about as pure as a cribhouse whore. We don't just borrow words; on occasion, English has pursued other languages down alleyways to beat them unconscious and rifle their pockets for new vocabulary."
-- James Nicoll
Basically, a bunch of Germanic tribes invaded the area currently known as England. They brought the Anglo-Saxon language with them, which was obviously close to German. A few hundred of those words still survive in English, and they are a lot of the most basic English words. There was a bunch of conquering back and forth, and the language picked up words back and forth. The Vikings brought along their own languages with their raids.
Eventually William the Conqueror with the Normans came along. He conquered England, and set up French as the language of government. All the aristocrats and nobles had to speak French, but everyone else was left to their own devices to speak English. So a lot of loan words drifted from French into English, and they were mostly ones the aristocracy would use.
As such, most words involving government are French, as are a number of words involving high culture. If you note that "cow" is an animal, where the same animal as food is "beef", and the same for "pig", and "pork", the French words got adopted, but applied only to meat rather then the animal itself. Figure the peasants dealt with the animal, and the nobles dealt with the final meal...
Of course, what ended up happening was that the dialect of French used in France and in England drifted away from each other, to the point that the French thought that the version spoken in England was hilarious. So, more and more, the nobles started using english instead, and became proud of the language.
Of course, english steals from all sorts of sources, Latin and Greek being fairly common ones. The nice thing is that when english picks up multiple words for the same thing, it often ends up with subtle differences between them, in tone and connotation, if nothing else. It ends up being a very expressive language for that reason.
Anyways, not sure if that helps. I read a good book on the subject quite a while back, but I have no idea where it is at the moment...
Aside from the author interrupting the story parts (they annoyed the heck out of me), it was an interesting and compelling concept.
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Thanks
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Then I strongly advise you not to read anything else I've written (not that I would mind, on the contrary
), because this is something I do all the time. So I doubt you would enjoy it.
Sorry it annoyed you, wasn't my goal...
... but I should think about it to see if I'm not doing it completely wrong (after so many stories, would be about time to realize it :P)
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It's just something I will have to get over. It doesn't seem to irk anyone else.
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
1796304 Witch one of your stories is that?
5316921 if you'll look on my profile you'll see it ("my little mad scientist: revenge is magic"), unfortunately while I have managed to get out two chapters, I'd lost my work on the third one and currently I haven't really gotten back into writing it (if I do end up going back to it i'm considering a re-write) so, that's unfortunate, still I got it posted and hopefully that foreray (along with this comment) will help me to feel more comfortable writing and posting more stories.
and thanks for the reply, good to see someone taking an interest
There is way too much telling in the narration. Makes this really hard to read.