30 years old closet brony from the center of Europe. Just happily doing my thing in my corner of the internet.
"Cogito ergo sum" - I think therefore I am (Descartes)
Some things are simple and obvious when you are a rational and smart pony like Twilight Sparkle. But when you try to make a crazy mare like Pinkie Pie obey the rules of logic, you should expect at least some challenge.
But that's not a story about logic. It was supposed to be, but it isn't. Or at least not anymore. I think it's just a story about two friends spending some time together...
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Minor spoilers ahead, do read the story, it's worth it; no matter what Pinkie and Twi' may tell you in that regard.
Personally, I really like the idea of Pinkie being philosophical and knowing about that they are just characters presented in some medium. This was explored in a short comic which your story reminded me of (Pt1, Pt2). How you handled Pinkie knowing about the 4th wall and asking the reader to recursively re-read Twilights decision, to see if it changed, was great. It was not too exaggerated nor too suble, instead she was kept as a humorous character which was completely in tune with what was happening to her and her friend. The perfect example was this:
Was that really the writers decision to put that line, or did Pinkie, the character, actually break the wall for a moment and add her actual feelings?
Heh, I digress. I really like this concept, call it experimental but it was well executed. Fav' and thumb from me.
There are some minor typos as well as capitalizations missing, e.g. Twilight is written as twilight in some places. But overall, good story!
So, what is the verdict of the experimentation? Does your hypothesis verify?
It looked well executed enough, it could yield result, no?
I came because of Twilight and Pinkie Pie.
I stayed because the existential despair doesn't let me move.
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Bummer!
TO THE FEATURED BOX!!!
This is brilliant!
Off to the featured box!
I would recommend a few typo corrections tho.
For example
I'm pretty sure this is supposed to be hoof.
Great story, and great work XD
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Thanks. Glad you could enjoy it
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Yes it was. Thanks for pointing it out. I'll go look for the other mistakes.
I wouldn't hold my breath. I'm just glad the story wasn't hated.
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Thanks
. Still, I'm mostly simply glad you liked it. That's the important thing here.
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. For some reason, I can't not connect the conclusion with the first "noble truth" of buddhism.
Fun comics
It's just crazy how the pain can be a lot of fun to live through.
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Thanks.
Actually, I meant experimental more on a stylistic level. I'm experimenting with a different style of writing that the one I've been using until now. As for the hypothesis of the story, it was that I could get the reader to put his own existence into question. But it could maybe have had a chance to succeed if I hadn't made Pinkie say "we don't exist" for the first revelation of the idea instead of the "you don't exist" I've put in its place this morning.
I think most reader have/will go through the story ignoring the possibility the story could actually be about them and not just the ponies, in an inception kinda way.
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The worst is, I now remember having read those comics (through EQD). It's true what they say: a picture is worth a thousand words...
I can only wonder how many people actually did it... it must be a weird experience. That's where I didn't go far enough. I could have made a lot of hints toward what was going to happen to make reading it the Pinkie way more rewarding.
I could still put a few hints/rewards in there...
I couldn't say. It's one of those stories that write themselves. I was already a bit drunk and was putting most of my efforts in keeping the flow of the story focused. But the idea of Pinkie influencing the story she is written in goes along with the second short comic you linked. Maybe I did indeed was just a puppet used to allow their story to be seen. That would explain the urge to write...
Thanks a lot
. I'm so glad you could enjoy it.
Woah. Meta.
This was fun, here's to every wierd creature out there giving ponies chance to think .
Hmmmm.
But then, what is existence? Twilight may not be able to escape predestination, but does she not exist nonetheless by virtue of having been written about? Would not a lack of existence imply that FiM had never been conceived or recorded?
no
She can't cook
meh... not very rational