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2518503 No. I happen to like him.
Do you have an editor? I don't remember if you do or not. There are a lot of little grammar errors I spotted in this chapter. While they don't disrupt the story, many of them are very basic things that you, as a fluent Engish user, really don't have any excuse for not knowing by now. As an example, take one paragraph:
This is what it should look like:
As you can see, "atleast" should be two words, you shouldn't use apostrophes to show plural words, and you were missing a comma.
2518587 I'm in a lot of stress at the moment. I'll go back and fix them on your very whim, sir. Oh, and you forgot the 'l' in English.
HES BACK
AND HES GOT A NEW TRICK
MAGICAL CAMO IS TEN TIMES AS SLICK AS THE LAST TIME
THE LAST TIME YOU SAW HIM
NOW I CAN SEE WHY YOU REALLY ADORE HIM
2518587 Sorry if that sounded snappish. Which it did... But I was caught up in the moment. I keep getting memories from Dog Days, how I started a useless comment war. I apologize for what I said. I'm just really nervous about my math SOL coming up; I felt sick waiting to know if I passed my history one. But, thanks for calling the error's out.
Peace.
2518835 I'm not usually very tactful anyway. Using kind words tends to blow up in my face. I'm not sure why. Since I started being blunt, this is only the second time I've had a negative reaction, and neither have been big reactions.
F***ing keyboard. I gotta learn to not type so quickly.
2518975 Hey, it happens to the best of us. Especially me, but then I get to re-read my chapter and see if it's to face paced. And, I ate a banana and I feel better.
2519009 Ah, dangit. You had to mention bananas, didn't you? Do you know the significance of bananas in the brony fanbase?! One word: Trollestia.
2519066 Don't forget RoosterTeeth~
2519084 Okay, that I don't get. The only Rooster Teeth things I follow are Red vs. Blue and an occasional Achievement Hunter video. Their other videos don't interest me, and their comics... For some reason, their comics make my browser freeze if I'm on the page for more than a minute at most. Usually less. I'm not sure why.
2519117 Oh, it was an animated adventure. It had I think it was Ray having a panic attack, and a nurse gave him potassium. Like in banana's. Did I mention I like bananas? Because I do.
2519128 "So you're a mmmmb*** who likes mmmmmmbananas? Well, that's good, 'cause you're about to go bananas ON THE MOOOOOOOOOON!!!"
It's not easy making that reference, due to my obsessive-compulsive tendency to refrain from such strong language, but it sure is fun.
I'm Surprised he didn't yell "Property Damage" while jumping through that window.
Wow girls have the same problem? If guys will never understand girls, and girls will never understand guys. How the hell are we supposed to work together.
Theme music for the next chapter XD
Out of all the characters in this story, Drone is my favorite. He gets some of the best character development, and he is very believable (especially in this chapter) when he shows feelings like guilt, sadness or remorse. I commend you for creating such a complex character, and for doing such a good job with him. Please keep on writing; I want to see more of this story.
2519683 I didn't mean it as an insult to the female gender. It was just right for the situation, even the fellow male characters stared at him.
I can imagine Luna and Celly's faces will look something akin to this after Camo survives.
i.imgur.com/sz3wvef.jpg
Aw, poor Drone. Poor guy's trying his best. Also, I'm kind of imagining that Twilight will end up doing all the saving herself. The rescue party seems a bit too... if you know what I mean
2522413 What? No, they got it all under control. *takes some of Pinkies special sugar* Whoo! Look at my hand... Why is it blue? Heh... Heh... Heh...
2522420 Okay... I'll go and get a fire-extinguisher. And a med kit. I think we're going to need them by the end of this arc
2522446 Whee! I'm spinning in my-njsjfdsdhn
*wakes up a minute later*
Um... I may or may not have just hit my face on the keyboard. Hey... Where's the letter that comes after y on this... Oh. It's on my cheek. Nevermind.
2521943 No no no no no no no. no insults whatsoever!!!!!
I was talking about how boys will never understand girls, wondering if they had the same problem, if they did it would be impossible to work with each other
-Kenny Chesney; Young
2531069 Oh. Well... I'm an idiot. Thank you for the info on that.
2531130 an idiot couldn't write this awesome story
No problem
2531212 Oh uh... Thank you. And, um... For educating the public.
2531237 lol XD
Get back to doing whatever you were doing so you have more free time
Stories don't right themselves! Ding!
Da fuq?! My next chapter just popped into existence
Just a warning kids, don't tempt fate or Murphy's law
Camo should get his own story, he's awesome.
I was just watching dick figures and Camo reminds me of blue/red/lord Tourette's
Drone is growing.