Eight Minutes
Eight Minutes
Written By: Secret_Shadows
Edited By: Avorin
24 Hours, 32 Minutes, 14 Seconds
"Eight Minutes?! That's it!?" Rainbow Dash yelled in protest. "This has to be a joke!"
Rarity put her hoof on Rainbow Dash's shoulder, "I don't think it's a joke darling."
"But, what's g-going to h-happen when those eight minutes are up?" Fluttershy asked.
"Bad things sugar cube, bad things." Applejack said.
Twilight was silent, she stood in horror at what she just read. Could it be a joke? No, why would the princess send something like that as a joke? It could be a test. But a test of what? And why this? So many questions, so little time. Even if she could make it to Canterlot before it happened, the Princess was no longer accepting audiences with anypony, not even her most faithful student.
"Twilight..." Pinkie spoke in a very soft tone, softer than she had even spoken before. Twilight turned and look at her.
"Isn't there something you can do?" She asked.
Twilight turned away and shook her head. The princess never taught her how to control the sun, and even if she had, there was no way she'd be strong enough. Before Celestia it took several unicorns just to keep the sun shining let alone stop it from going supernova.
"There, there is nothing we can do but wait, and hope." Twilight said.
"The elements, if we-" Rainbow was cut off.
"The Elements wouldn't do us any good here, at this point anything we do would make it worse. I think..." Twilight paused. "...I think its best if we all go to our families...and enjoy the little time we have left."
All six ponies in the room looked at each other. Fluttershy was crying. Pinkie had tears in her eyes as well. Rarity and Applejack both hung their heads low. Twilight couldn't even face any of them. Rainbow's eyes started to tear up, she stopped.
"No!" She yelled as she flew through an open window away from the library. She wasn't going to let it end like that.
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8 Minutes, 30 Seconds
Twilight was sitting in the park, watching all of the foals play. Parents, fillies, colts, none of them knew what was going to happen. Twilight half expected to be at home by now, with her family. But a train to Canterlot on such short notice, was an impossible feat. And it was more than a days walk.
She got up from the park bench and over to spike who was lounging under a small oak tree. He knew what was going to happen, but it didn’t even phase him.
Twilight sat down next to him, she opened her mouth to speak when she saw a flash in the sky. All of the ponies in the park looked up in awe at the array of colors emanating from the sun. Twilight could only glare in disgust at the ball of light that had incubated their planet for so long.
“And so it begins.” Twilight whispered to herself.
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7 Minutes, 48 Seconds
Fluttershy hid on her bed under the covers. She had been there crying since the day before. The blinding light that flashed into her window was sign enough of what was going on. She peeked out from under her covers and saw a small bird on her window with a broken wing. She got up from her bed and walked over still in a daze from crying.
She slid the latch open and let the bird climb up onto her hoof. Fluttershy spread her wings and floated to a small first aid box. She pulled out some bandages for the birds wing.
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7 Minutes, 20 Seconds
Pinkie Pie sat in her room. A table with party decorations set up. Balloons were hung. All but one chair was empty. A pink pony sat at the head of the table. Mane and tail deflated. She poked at a piece of cake. Eventually pushing it away.
Gummy stood on the table, staring at Pinkie, this made her give a weak smile. She turned to the window to look out, seeing the array of colors in the sky, the ever expanding sun.
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6 Minutes, 52 Seconds
Rarity and Sweetie sat in the boutique. Rarity couldn’t let this happen to her sister. Her sister would never get her cutie mark, fall in love, have a family of her own, it wasn’t fair.
Rarity heard Sweetie singing to herself through her tears. She knew what she had to do. She started to sing along with Sweetie. Entertaining the fact that everypony knew Sweetie’s talent was singing. It was the one thing she could do for her sister that would really mean the world to her.
Sweetie stopped singing for a moment as she looked to Rarity, but quickly picked back up in the song. Soon after a small flash of light, and a pink music note would make the world for Sweetie.
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5 Minutes, 58 Seconds
Applejack, Apple Bloom, Big Macintosh, and Granny Smith sat around the kitchen table in their farm house. The four sat silently. For it would be their last time together in this world. Apple Bloom extended her hooves out to either side of her. Applejack reached her hoof out to hold on to Apple Bloom’s extended hoof. Granny Smith on the other side did the same. Big Macintosh even joined in holding Granny Smith and Applejack’s hooves. Apple Bloom closed her eyes tightly trying to remember all of the good things, and forget all of the bad.
The candle in the center of the table started to flicker and move about as a gentle draft moved through the house. They looked at each other, acknowledging the all wrongdoings were forgiven, and that all that mattered now was that they were here, together.
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5 Minutes, 23 Seconds
Rainbow Dash had finally found Scootaloo. She knew neither of them had anypony but each other in this world. After Rainbow had told Scootaloo about the disaster, Scootaloo ran off. Rainbow had finally found her and was going to make her last moments as best as they could be, a Flightless pegasus would get to fly.
Rainbow took to the skies, the orange filly on her back. She flew as fast as she could in the sky doing tricks. Scootaloo smiled forgetting the doom that loomed over head.
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4 Minutes, 36 Seconds
Fluttershy had now wrapped the bandages around the birds wing. It was still injured, she had to act fast. She would make this birds last moments as good as they could be, so she wouldn’t have to come to the realization that it was her end.
The bird quietly waited in a small nest Fluttershy had built. Fluttershy approached with bird seed and hoof fed the bird as she quietly awaited the rays of the never ending light.
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3 Minutes, 52 Seconds
Rarity and Sweetie had made their way to their parents. Rarity still didn’t have the heart to tell her parents of the impending doom, but she would make them proud and happy. She would make all three of them happy.
Rarity had used her magic to quickly assemble a small stage in the living room of her parents house. Then she sat with her mother and father as they listened to Sweetie’s beautiful singing voice, her talent. Rarity would cater to that talent, giving Sweetie the best last moments.
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3 Minutes, 23 Seconds
The Apple family sat around their table. Speechless, Apple Bloom got up from the table letting go of her family's hooves. She walked over to a cabinet and returned to the table with four zap apples that they had saved in magical jars to prevent them from going bad. She gave an apple to all three ponies, and one to herself. It was said that the consuming of a raw zap apple was the best tasting thing in the world, but consuming one would bring bad fortune on the next harvest.
Apple Bloom decided she would taste this best tasting apple with her family, the fruit of their labors. And it was then she realised that family was most important in the end, and she got her cutie mark, that of a zap apple.
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2 Minutes, 38 Seconds
Pinkie Pie had started up music, she decided if she was going to go out, she would go out partying. And that's what she did. She danced after pulling Vinyl Scratch seemingly out of no where to DJ for her. And she would party, like she had never partied before.
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1 Minute, 23 Seconds
Rainbow Dash had counted the minutes, she knew how long she had left, and she was going to make the last minute and a half the best for the filly she now had in tow. She climbed as high into the sky as she could. She banked to the left and let the filly fall off of her back.
Rainbow started to fly down with Scootaloo, she gestured for Scootaloo to open her wings. And she did, and for that minute and a half, Scootaloo fell with style, one would almost say she was flying, and enjoying every minute of it. And out of that fall she got her cutie mark, a pair of angel wings.
She looked to Rainbow and smiled in appreciation at what she had done for her. She flapped her wings, and thrust forward engaging in a race with the fastest pegasus in Equestria, and she would win.
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0 Minutes, 45 Seconds
Twilight looked up to see Rainbow and Scootaloo flying together. She smiled. At least she knew some of her friends were making the most of it. She turned to spike. He had disappeared.
Twilight panicked, he decided to wander off at the last moment. But then he returned from behind a small bush, he had a small box. He gave it to Twilight and she used her magic to open it. It was a picture of her and spike back in Canterlot, with Shining Armor, both of her parents, Cadence, and Princess Celestia. It was when she left to be the Princess’s personal protege. Twilight smiled and hugged Spike.
After the embrace, she looked up once more, seeing Scootaloo and Rainbow flying, she could imagine Pinkie partying, Rarity probably did something generous for her sister. The Apples at home as a family. Fluttershy helping an injured animal. Even she was in the park with Spike, enjoying the clear weather.
Each pony lived those last moments to the best they could, because they all knew, those moments would never come again.
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I'm going to read this. It's a Complete story. And short. I shall read.
Oops, gotta go, will read later, kthxbye!
Interesting, Interesting..... *kliks read later*
Btw, Same avatar
Oh my... You are quite the feels-hitter. I must admit, I started tearing up a bit when Sweetie got her cutie mark, and even more so when Applebloom got hers. And then Scootaloo... I can't say enough good things about this story. Well done.
^Try playing this while reading^
A very emotional story. I think we've all stopped to ponder how we would live if this was our last day, even if it's only an exercise in critical thinking. Your themes really made me smile. I'd like to believe that all of us would spend our last moments like our favorite ponies did. Consumed with love, acceptance, and even if there might be fear, we know that we aren't alone. There are a few minor spelling/grammar errors, such as Spike's name needing to be capitalized in the final section, but overall it's a very enjoyable little story.
Wow, great story.
so sad
Hnnnnng damnit
why must they die?
Made me cry... true story.
Am I the only one counting down to it getting featured? This, this is gold, man...
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The feels
They burn
Well that wasn't much fun
Man. Talk about sad.
If this doesn't get featured, then nothing should.
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Wow. The feels man, DA FEEELS. I was so sad the whole time.
BUCKING. AMAZING. This had better get featured, or I'm going to go nuts.
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Awesome story!
NNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
sorry had to get it out
great story but sad.....
This made me cry and thinking about how I would spend my last 8 minute's
W-wow....that has to be the best response to one of my stories ever....
Well if this gets featured, I will be very surprised considering I only have 12 hours invested into this story.
Honestly, if my schedule was more clear....and I wasn't working on 3 other stories, this would have been much better, lol.
I really wasn't expecting so many "This better get featured" comments. lol.
Well done
I'd like to thank everyone who said this story was good, I would have thanked you all individually as you posted comments but I was up all night writing this so, I had taken a nap.
Lets just say waking up three hours later to sixty five notifications is a great way to start the rest of your day, again, I am very grateful for all of your support, and kind words.
I uh, didn't write a speech for this one...lol.........well I don't ever write a speech, its a figure of speech to say I didn't write a speech....well I just made it awkward......
Anyway, uh, making this as, well honest as I can, because I really didn't think this was uh, that good....I was expecting the kind of Response that I got to flight........you know the standard ten likes, one dislike, and maybe three or four comments, lol. (Thats usually what I get when I write something short...)
So again thank you all very much, Know I have read each and every one of your comments and that I am appreciative of every single one. Honestly if it wasn't for your support and feedback, I would still be writing noob stories....I am grateful for any creative criticism you might have on this so my future endeavors can pull even more emotions, because my ultimate goal is to write the most emotional story ever...
Well this is unnecessarily long and I don't quite know how to end it...so, uh.....end of post?
P.S. If anyone spots errors, which some of you have already, I will try to correct them asap! Thanks for spotting them and then letting me know!
Noooo! The sun can't go Red giant so fast! I hate you!
Have a thumbs up.
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Well...being the science geek that I am....
The proper term is "Super Nova" and well, if the sun goes super nova, you're screwed, because not only does it take the earth (Equestria in this case) with it, but it also takes everything within a 1 light year radius. Or something like that.
Lets just say, Pluto little Pluto would be the only planet for about an hour while the sun expanded.
And the reason it happened in Eight minutes, is that's how fast it takes for the light and heat to travel from the sun, and if the sun expands at the speed of light, which it does when it goes super nova, you got Eight minutes till you are vaporized.
But that's just science....
Science... You little bastard.
I had a dream like this once. But it was a missile I created that caused the sun to go boom...
Stories like this really make you think about life and what it means. What is our purpose in life? Why are we here? What is our meaning? And so on...
This also makes us realize that our time is so short compared to the rest of the cosmos. We live like what? 70 to 80 years? Then we're gone. How did we spend that short time? Was it worth it all in the end? How did we spend the last moments of our life?
In the end, does it all really matter?
My answer is YES! It does matter in the end. We were put here for a reason. Let's figure it out.
You may never know, figuring it all out may come down to the last 8.5 minutes.
That or else I'm just being really philosophical right now...
Damn that I-Doser Black Sunshine track. Makes ya think really hard on the deep junk...
This story just helped to deepen it.
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Must...resist...nerdiness...gah!
The sun doesn't have enough mass to go supernova. At best, it'll slowly swell into a red giant as it exhausts it's fuel before collapsing into a white dwarf. There is currently debate as to whether the Earth would survive. As the sun expands, so too would the Earth's orbit and it would be a race between the two. By that point, we'll more then likely have FTL drives so there won't be any Apocalypses going on.
No, the real danger has to be a Gamma Ray Burst. A burst of radiation from a collapsing star or a black hole's accretion disk that's so powerful, it would burn through 25% of the Earth's o-zone layer and would kill bacteria that are 2,000 times more resistant to radiation then we are. And we have no way of stopping it.
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It won't get featured because there are to many clop fics and sex crazed people on the internet.
Frankly I'm fine with it not being featured, as I didn't expect a response like this, but still...its a nice thought.
SO....CLOSE....TO...THAT....BIG....FEATURE....BOX!
Oh no wait, a new clopfic came out, well this is bumped 4 stories down the list now.....
I know it sucks that it works that way.......but it just does.
lol
1693463 *Sighs* There should be some rule that makes it impossible for clop to get into the featured box.
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Go read my most recent blog post, I think you'll like it. lol
1693639 Ooh! Complaints about the feature box? I'm in! *Grabs popcorn*
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I honestly just think there should be a separate one, even if you turn the mature filter off, you can still see the mature fictions in it............And even then, I don't want to turn mature off because some people over rate their stories.... (Can't think of an example right now) But still. Even then its too much, there should atleast be a limit so that no more than half of the feature box can be clop.
That feeling in my chest. It's off-centre, just to the left... Is that my heart? And my eyes...
THEFEELSTHEFEELSTHEFEELS
Let's see, when was the last time I had feels on this level... The last time Glim updated, but that's pretty obligatory... I don't even know. Instead, have a poem.
Because I could not stop for Death,
He kindly stopped for me;
The carriage held but just ourselves
And Immortality.
We slowly drove, he knew no haste,
And I had put away
My labor, and my leisure too,
For his civility.
We passed the school, where children strove
At recess, in the ring;
We passed the fields of gazing grain,
We passed the setting sun.
Or rather, he passed us;
The dews grew quivering and chill,
For only gossamer my gown,
My tippet only tulle.
We paused before a house that seemed
A swelling of the ground;
The roof was scarcely visible,
The cornice but a mound.
Since then 'tis centuries, and yet each
Feels shorter than the day
I first surmised the horses' heads
Were toward eternity.
Because Emily Dickinson is relevant to everything.
To all of you who said this should be featured. I have submitted it to EqD, as much as I hate EqD for telling me my other story has countless grammatical errors when I ran it through both google documents and microsoft word, AND the spell check on firefox, and then I even had three different, independent, proofreaders read it...
Sorry got off topic, I have submitted this story to EqD, its doomed to fail because its about 475 Words short of their word requirement for one shots, but I figured it worth a shot since you all like it so much.
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I wish there was a like feature in the comments section, I would like this post so hard it wouldn't know what hit it.
A poem...that has to be the nicest thing anyone has commented on my story ever......poems are nice things, I want more!
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More poems? Got it.
There once was a man from Peru
Who dreamed he was eating his shoe
He awoke with a fright
In the middle of the night
To find that his dream had come true
Just messing with ya. Have some more Dickinson, though.
I heard a fly buzz when I died;
The stillness round my form
Was like the stillness in the air
Between the heaves of storm.
The eyes beside had wrung them dry,
And breaths were gathering sure
For that last onset, when the king
Be witnessed in his power.
I willed my keepsakes, signed away
What portion of me I
Could make assignable,-and then
There interposed a fly,
With blue, uncertain, stumbling buzz,
Between the light and me;
And then the windows failed, and then
I could not see to see.
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Thats deep. I have no idea the meanings because I'm half asleep right now because I have been up for like 4 straight days....but that's deep man.
1694210 When you've been awake for 4 days, make like an elephant and get poached!
That... Sentence got away from me...
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EqD has turned this story down due to "this story contains numerous persistent grammar and punctuation errors which disqualify it for posting."
So again, I'd like to know were said errors are.............this is the second time they have rejected one of my stories for the reason, I wish they would tell me what errors........
Anyway, people, lets help me get these grammar errors fixed! lol.......they "Aren't Interested In Posting This Story" but they did look at it even though it was below the minimum word count. I do not think it received a strike so I feel with the community working together to point out as many errors as you can find, we can get this story somewhere that people can enjoy it. My goal here is to spread the feels.......I haven't spread the feels enough, I won't be happy until I'm told people have had the feels.
I don't know if anyone's posted this before, but to my knowledge, the sun would take more than eight minutes to destroy a planet. To do so, it would have to expand at lightspeed, and I don't think that stars supernova at lightspeed. Still a great story either way, you got my eyes to tear a bit at the end, good job.
Rarity put her hoof on Rainbow Dash's shoulder, "I don't think its a joke, darling."
"Bad things sugar cube, bad things," Applejack said.
No, why would the princess send something like that as a joke?
Before Celestia it took several unicorns just to keep the sun shining, let alone stop it from going supernova.
"The Elements wouldn't do us any good here, at this point anything we do would make it worse. I think..." Twilight paused, "...I think it's best if we all go to our families...and enjoy the little time we have left."
Now I might be wrong in this stuff, I'm only a self-proclaimed grammar Nazi so I don't know if I'm right, but I should be.
These aren't all the mistakes, just the ones in the first part before the first break.
EDIT: Red marks show where changes were made.
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Thanks I will fix it, but the one "Unicorns" Unicorn is plural already. Its like the word deer, its plural and singular. At least that's my understanding of it.
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Alright I have fixed the errors you pointed out, if you happen to see anymore in the rest of the story let me know.
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Ye hath stolen my Avatar that I hath stolen from google.
1697724 Oh, well I guess I learned something new today.
1697724 Wait are you sure about that? Microsoft word gave me a green squiggly when I used just unicorn and told me to make it plural with an S
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Really? I was also told it was one of them weird plural words? Must be a regional thing then?
1699159 according to three out of four sources I can find it is "unicorns" but I did find one that did say "unicorn" so there is something there. I'd say for now add the "s" to be safe.
also I've learned I need to get more sleep before I edit if I missed those.
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haha alright, I'll do that.
Btw get on crisis 2 doc.
Edit*: Edited it, but the word "Unicorns" to me sounds like saying "Deers" or "Meats" or "Livestalks" It just doesn't work and drives my spell check crazy, lol.
This is one of the greatest stories I've ever heard. I can't tell you how beautiful I think it was