The young Eight year old filly Midnight Shadows is followed in this story as she explores what it is to be different. Through her travels she suffers incontinence and will have to deal with bullies who do not like that she is different.
Characters will be added as they appear in the story.
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A short note: I did not take part in writing this, I am only a proof reader and editor, but it was decided by the group that it should go on my account since I am unbiased.
Rated teen, just to be safe, I don't think anything is necessarily bad in this, but it was a group decision to rate it teen.
Chapters (1)
Optima !
Haec fabula optima est.
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(Assuming this is Spanish, and "fabula" means good.)
Gracias.
This is a very cute story!
I'll be watching this one.
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Thank you.
2358365 Thank you sir.
2355202 And Thank you! I do not speak your language though
It was latin, the message meant "Eccelent ! This story is very good" ( 2 years of Classic studies ftw
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Thunder said google translate said it was Italian, lol....
But anyway, thank you very much!
This is a cute story so far. I can't wait to see the next part...
...However, the biggest flaw I saw was that Midnight always seems to be crying, which makes reading her dialogue a bit harder.
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Well what do you expect, she's incontinent and is bullied often, her feelings are shot and so are her nerves... but I'll make sure to check that before the next chapter goes up.
Midnight Shadows eh. Did you take the character from Midnight Shadows' stories on FimFic? Or is my brain just making coincidences. Also, this has allot of DAWW
Tagalog: Well Tapos na!Mahal ko ang kwentong ito! Higit pa?
Translation: Well done! I love this story! More?
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If you read the credits, I'm only the editor for this story, it was written by my little sister Midnight Shadows (Who is the Midnight you are referring too.) And ThunderChaser23. It's only on my account cause... well they told me to put it on my account.
2360422 All shall be revealed soon. and by soon I mean possibly in chapter 2. Plus as Sec said Midnight is bullied a lot and she's incontinent. Let that sink in for a moment. an incontinent 8 almost 9 year old being bullied, pretty sure you'd cry a lot too, Not to mention Midnight is kinda a filly.
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What is this... I don't even.
Yes Secret has permission to use my OC because it's my story, just on his account because there is more than one author. Also the fact that he is my older brother may help... with him being allowed to use my OC.
2361229 Ah, thx, so, how's your other fanfics coming? Also, that would explain the similar usernames.
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They are coming along. That much is sure, it's taking a bit of time for me because I'm writing multiple stories right now.
I find the excessive amount of stammering to be rather annoying and at times, difficult to read, but other than that
Awwww
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We are working on that, as I do agree a bit with that statement, the stammering is a bit excessive but it's more trying to convey that she is crying, and that's how it would sound if it was real speaking, more or less, but thank you for the comment and thank you for the "Awww" It means a lot to all of us involved
I'm afraid that I must take this fanfiction off the internet, because it exceeds the amount of adorableness that is healthy for the average person. Haha, on a more serious note, can't wait to see what happens next! I have a feeling the sleepover is going to be amazing for both of them, and Monday will bring some possible bully flank-kicking action. Anyway, make sure you keep it up, or I will cry.
So yeah, keep it up. (How many times have I said that? O_o)
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Thank you very much! We are however going to be trying to avoid conflict... (Will we? Probably not...) lol.
But thank you very much! We are trying to write this to the best of our combined abilities, your complement is well received!
2432477 Aww thanks! That comment really means a lot
More!
We need MORE!
MORE! MORE! MORE!
2706296 We are working on it. Midnight and I were busy with some things, and our editor has been away recently
I am sincerely hoping this updates. This is one of 2 stories I've ever actually read. That one died too almost 2 years ago, though I still converse with the author.
I look forward to the continuation. I have much in common with Midnight. I had bowel problems from age 10-15 due to complications from being severely burned when i was 10. The bowel troubles were bad enough, but the challenges and frustrations of being a burn survivor never end. But i keep the faith.
Can't wait to see how the sleepover goes.
I... WANT... MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAR!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a good story. Please continue
please make a new chapter! PLEAAAAAAAAASE!
3000936 Man that is harsh... I'm gald this story speaks to you on a level.
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Soon guys! Sheesh! Take it none of you have read my blog post about inactivity.
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Well I'm sorry that happened
3236237 you replied to a comment that was made 3 weeks before your blog post. :P i get it already.
Edit: 5 weeks now.
I could say something here but instead I'm going to post music
NO REGRETS!
half a year since the story was release. :P (i'm not rushing you, but try writing some more stories to soothe your writer block.)
Don't kill me but PPPLLLLEEEAAAASSSEEE write soon!!!
So... what's the difference between the Midnight of this story and the one in your sisters' fics? Also, is there any artwork for the filly Midnight at all?
This is actually a fun little story compared to its peers... It's not as abrasively set on what its content is, in this case incontinence, but actually gets you to feel for its main character. For possibly the first time, I actually want more from this kind of thing. Please don't feel too pressured into rushing, though; I'd like to see how well you guys can actually make this.
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There is plenty of artwork for Midnight!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/11733890/
Snow Blitz is in there too. (He was introduced already right?)
Anyways, the reason it's taking so long for another chapter to come out is the following: It is originally an RP by Thunderchaser and Midnight which means it needs to be converted to regular story text. This first chapter was originally only 5000 words, lol. Now its 15000.
That's actually how we accomplished it not being as... how to put this in a way that doesn't upset people unintentionally... 'mature' is the word I am going to use here. While roleplaying it can get carried away, when transferring it to text we have the opportunity to remove anything that is 'bad'. At the same time we also get the opportunity to increase the amount of character in each character because they are pretty much reflections of someone instead of just being written down from a set idea. Each person controlling said character is mainly responsible for just that character so you get a sort of, actual emotion/response instead of something that was 'expected' you get real emotion, how they would feel if they were actually there.
This in my opinion is what makes people able to relate to it, because someone who doesn't like the idea of it can still find that they sympathize and even feel for the character without really liking the story.
Now this is all just really my opinion though. lol. So it may all be off. But yeah. I am glad you want to see where it goes!
There is actually like 100,000 words worth of roleplay that needs to be transferred to story but that is what is taking the time lol. It's becoming harder as the story progresses because when 5,000 words turns into 15,000... 100,000 words is turning into like 250,000 words and it's just too long lol.
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Yeah, he was. First in conversation between Midnight and Starlight, then later also in the shopping part of the chapter. Honestly, I was actually disappointed that we weren't going to see the sleepover mentioned, because it sounds like an interesting part of the story. Oh well, at least we'll see more depth to the story when it happens.
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I am fairly sure you get to see the sleepover... I don't think that was cut, I mean it was cut from the first chapter but I'm fairly sure its in the next chapter... I think...
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Just as long as it's published, it'll be fine. Also, when is your sister going to update 'Midnight's Holiday Surprise'? Do you know? I'd pose the question to her instead of you, but you're logged in and she isn't.
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Not sure, she has stuff going on aside from that and I honestly don't know if she is going to finish it or not.
So... can we call it dead?
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No, The story is dead when it says "Cancelled" On it, it does not say that. It's on a small hiatus, I really wish, people would stop calling stories on my account dead.
4301818 It's called being on Hiatus. Midnight and I are rather busy, this story is not at the top of our "To be updated list".
Great story so far and will be a good read from what we see so far
So...what's taking so long for an update?
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The length of the story and having to cut out parts, then deciding we wanted that part in so to save space having to cut out a different part, that we decided we wanted to keep in.
That, and it's hard to get several people in different timezones together all at one time.
Patience young grasshopper.
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You're not working with someone from across the Atlantic, are you? I know you're in the East Coast region, so you really shouldn't need to worry if you're working with people from here in the US.
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Different countries yes. Time zone difference. Plus while no we don't have the problem with across the atlantic, we have the problem of it's more than just 2 people. And trying to get all of these people together when they are all in different timezones is very hard.
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Come to think of it, don't you guys use Gdocs? Proper management of the sharing system and some ground rules should allow you to circumvent the time zone differences you have. What's your process?