It seems like Mac would have a bit more reaction, finding out you shagged a bug and oh yeah now you have kids! No, you don't get to name them, that's mommy's job, silly! How come they can talk perfectly fine just out of the egg? And finally, as addictions go, surely there are worse ones to have.
She was obviously intelligent and likely could understand ... science behind the hybridization that produced the particular breeds of apple they offered.
Oh, trust me, she definitely understands the science of hybridization involving Apples.
I forgot how the egg-laying works exactly. Does Twilight lay eggs every time she has sex?
I think it would be hilarious to see a scene where Twilight and Mac are relaxing in bed after sex, and she just starts shitting out slimy green eggs all under the covers, and Twilight turns to Big Mac and says, "Look, Mac! More kids!".
Woo! Double points for both Overwatch and Whisper! Good t' know that they're likable changelings I know I did suggest "Talon" as well, but I didn't really add any descriptors for her/him, so that doesn't count. Still, it's good to know that my suggestions helped you!
Anyway, about the chapter. I'll be honest here and say that I've never really been a fan of introductory chapters in pretty much any fic that I read. Nothing on you, but it's hard for me to enjoy having a new character that I know nothing about introduced with little except a name, especially if a lot of new characters have to be introduced in such a short time like in this chapter, but I'm hoping that you'll be able to develop their personalities as you continue writing and make them really entertaining and likable characters. This is a tall order for many writers, especially for eight brand new guardians, but I have full confidence you'll be up to the task!
That being said, I would really like to see how much of Nosh's, Overwatch's, and Whisper's descriptions you're going to follow (and maybe any other OCs that you've added). I hope to be able to read your next chapter soon!
I don't know if you're gonna have any more guardians as I'm know I'm late on the 'draw'. I forgot to add for Escon that he's on the smaller side, preferring to use deceit and espionage to achieve his goals.
3715110 IKR! But it is twilight miss analytical mind herself and its probably a little hard to have motherly feelings toward something the size of yourself. Even if she just hatched them.
AND SO A HUGE CRISIS WAS ADVERTED WITH THE LETTER!
Now, Twilight will explain Celestia what's going on if her disguised filight is something to tell about it
It seems like Mac would have a bit more reaction, finding out you shagged a bug and oh yeah now you have kids! No, you don't get to name them, that's mommy's job, silly! How come they can talk perfectly fine just out of the egg? And finally, as addictions go, surely there are worse ones to have.
Oh, trust me, she definitely understands the science of hybridization involving Apples.
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Inherited memories, they said that.
Woo! You're using Nosh! I can see it now, Rarity trying to tell him what to do with decorations while he tells her what they can do with the bedroom
Well that's a shame. I honestly thought Carapace had a chance. Better luck next time I suppose^^'
big mac like changeling i love it
I forgot how the egg-laying works exactly. Does Twilight lay eggs every time she has sex?
I think it would be hilarious to see a scene where Twilight and Mac are relaxing in bed after sex, and she just starts shitting out slimy green eggs all under the covers, and Twilight turns to Big Mac and says, "Look, Mac! More kids!".
Twilight's all like , but Big Mac is all like .
Woo! Double points for both Overwatch and Whisper! Good t' know that they're likable changelings
I know I did suggest "Talon" as well, but I didn't really add any descriptors for her/him, so that doesn't count. Still, it's good to know that my suggestions helped you!
Anyway, about the chapter. I'll be honest here and say that I've never really been a fan of introductory chapters in pretty much any fic that I read. Nothing on you, but it's hard for me to enjoy having a new character that I know nothing about introduced with little except a name, especially if a lot of new characters have to be introduced in such a short time like in this chapter, but I'm hoping that you'll be able to develop their personalities as you continue writing and make them really entertaining and likable characters. This is a tall order for many writers, especially for eight brand new guardians, but I have full confidence you'll be up to the task!
That being said, I would really like to see how much of Nosh's, Overwatch's, and Whisper's descriptions you're going to follow (and maybe any other OCs that you've added). I hope to be able to read your next chapter soon!
I don't know if you're gonna have any more guardians as I'm know I'm late on the 'draw'.
I forgot to add for Escon that he's on the smaller side, preferring to use deceit and espionage to achieve his goals.
theres a spah creepin around here
What, they don't even get a nuzzle from Twilight?
3715110 IKR! But it is twilight miss analytical mind herself and its probably a little hard to have motherly feelings toward something the size of yourself. Even if she just hatched them.
Good on you spike!
Interesting, bootstrapped intelligence is quite tricky.