Well, that went well. Glad as always to see this update. I certainly was interested upon hearing Fluttershy has been a Changeling, too. I look forward to how Applejack comes around. Keep writing, as I will always look forward to this story!
Oh AJ, you seem to be a favorite choice for a stereotypical dumb, angry redneck. The truth stone seemed a bit deux ex machina, but to be honest, i got no clue how else you could introduce Queen Twilight to the rest without excessive drama.
Okay, Scootaloo I could buy, and I can suspend my disbelief to say that yes, the mane 6 minus Applejack could all accept Twilight as a changeling that quickly, but Fluttershy? No. Just no. That's just too much. Aside from your usual pacing issues and the information overload in this short chapter, you can't just say, 'oh yeah Fluttershy was a changeling all along'. That's just too much to take in all at once! And the backstory! A couple of sentences, no flashback, no detailed explanation, no nothing! You can't do that! It's not how storytelling works! Good god!
*deep breath*
I suggest you look back on this chapter and ask yourself if Fluttershy's revelation was really a good idea. It could've been saved for the climax, or Twilight could've turned her, or really anything, but the way you did it it seems like you just wanted to field as many bugs as possible as quickly as possible. It's lazy. It's boring. You've got the skills, I've seen them before, why aren't you using them now?
2497441 I blame a lack of sleep and forethought. It's gone now. Things will slow down quite a bit soon in the story, but really, when nothing's happening there's just a lot of NOTHING HAPPENING and I don't think writing Twilight going through her morning grooming is entertaining. Information overload is what Twilight does.
Applejack if you get Twi Killed... well you won't really be able to forgive yourself. that is to say the least. anyway good chapter and better update schedule.
oh SHIT, this is exactly why you don't sleep with your friends siblings... EVER!?! Now as for Pinkie Pie, AJ that's being a dick... some may call it being a bitch.
Even when I still keep reading about Fluttershy being a Changeling, I belive this whole confusion is because the author forgot to specificate that that statement was made by Pinkie Pie, not Fluttershy; This missunderstanding train has been derailed for a while already!
And Applejack couldn't make a more stupud thing to ad to her very long list of screw ups, and for what, because she is technically going to be an aunt already!
I'm confused. I've tried re-reading this chapter and I still don't see where Fluttershy was turned into a changeling or even where she admits she is one. Pinkie Pie plainly states she is while Fluttershy just faints. Did I miss an edit and only catch the latest version?
As for the "letter", which is going to one pony, not the national press... what exactly is Celestia going to do? Two of the Elements of Harmony can't exactly be locked up or banished, how are you going to use the hardware with two [ex-]ponies missing? Pull another Twilight and Pinkie Pie out of your back pocket?
And if Celestia is magnanimous as she tends to be, I don't see why she won't grant this new "hive" asylum in Equestria. If she's being generous, Celestia could even grant Twilight and her drones protection as a critically endangered species. Twilight might be the best thing that ever happened to the changelings.
Now if Twilight could just get a handle on her heat cycle... before she goes and pounces another hapless stallion.
Personally, I can't wait for more shenanigans. And Pinkie Pie-changeling fun? Oh... My...
Hmm... a request for Changeling OCs... I would suggest one but I somewhat doubt you would want B Sharpe the singing changeling who doesn't feed on romantic love.
2498750 There was a previous version where fluttershy revealed she was a changeling. That was redacted. This is the version of the chapter we're going on with.
Personality: warmonger, hotheaded, is pathologically insane with no mercy and no compassion, only loyal to a twilight. Suffers from extreme bouts of violence and once he has started to kill there is no way to stop him he will even kill own troops if they are close.
I was kind of upset that Spike was gonna sleep through his whole scene, but then it turned out you had a plan all along! He's going to feel very betrayed by Applejack when he finds out she's getting him to betray his best friend.
Nosh is a perverted changeling who's favorite method of feeding is in the bedroom(or kitchen table, or pool, or the middle of town square on a busy day). He's very charismatic and prefers to talk his way out of confrentations. If words fail, he relies on quick light strikes that, despite being weak, can do great damage when chained in combos. If fighting isn't an option, he is talanted at evasion (perfected by runing from pissed off fathers, brothers, and/or husbands).
To be honest, although the Truth Stone did seem to come out of nowhere, I feel like it helped to qualify Twilight's statements and give the scene a bit more feels. I'm not really finding any glaring issues with the plot so far, so keep it up!
Also, what exactly are you looking for in an OC? Name? Personality? Gender? Because I feel like the personality of a changling OC can't really be taken into account here.
2508412 Name mostly, maybe a little personality. They are self-aware guardians after all, there is variation (for example Stoic happens to be basically Big Mac as Changeling, so he is fucking huge.)
2508745 So are you going to announce who's OCs are going to be used or are you going to just use them? Cause I wouldn't mind to read a future chapter and suddenly see my OC there. I'd be a nice surprise.
Well I was going to let it go but unfortunately the last bit needs a reaction. One racist hick stereo type check. Seriously I was going to let it slide because she was also dealing with her brother ducking her best friend, but nope you went there.
Well, that went well. Glad as always to see this update. I certainly was interested upon hearing Fluttershy has been a Changeling, too. I look forward to how Applejack comes around.
Keep writing, as I will always look forward to this story!
Wait, no one is even slightly surprised that Fluttershy is a changeling?
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I think they're still getting over Twilight and Pinkie being one that Fluttershy turning out to be one was just, "Oh..."
THis isn't going to be one of those fics where everyone ends up becoming a changeling is it? We've already got half of the Mane 6 converted.
fucksake applejack. it's always you thats wrecks everything isnt it? every god damn fic.i0.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/011/363/aa%20GRToYS.png
Oh AJ, you seem to be a favorite choice for a stereotypical dumb, angry redneck.
The truth stone seemed a bit deux ex machina, but to be honest, i got no clue how else you could introduce Queen Twilight to the rest without excessive drama.
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It's an entire species built on lies and lying. She's the element of Honesty. Of course she's gonna be pissed.
Plus Twilight did just admit that she fucked her brother.
Oh Applejack....
... Seriously AJ, seriously?
Dammit, Applejack
HAHA Oh AJ...
Well shit, that's gonna cause problems.
Okay, Scootaloo I could buy, and I can suspend my disbelief to say that yes, the mane 6 minus Applejack could all accept Twilight as a changeling that quickly, but Fluttershy? No. Just no. That's just too much. Aside from your usual pacing issues and the information overload in this short chapter, you can't just say, 'oh yeah Fluttershy was a changeling all along'. That's just too much to take in all at once! And the backstory! A couple of sentences, no flashback, no detailed explanation, no nothing! You can't do that! It's not how storytelling works! Good god!
*deep breath*
I suggest you look back on this chapter and ask yourself if Fluttershy's revelation was really a good idea. It could've been saved for the climax, or Twilight could've turned her, or really anything, but the way you did it it seems like you just wanted to field as many bugs as possible as quickly as possible. It's lazy. It's boring. You've got the skills, I've seen them before, why aren't you using them now?
2497441
I blame a lack of sleep and forethought. It's gone now. Things will slow down quite a bit soon in the story, but really, when nothing's happening there's just a lot of NOTHING HAPPENING and I don't think writing Twilight going through her morning grooming is entertaining. Information overload is what Twilight does.
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My thoughts exactly!
2497051 i see Rainbow Dash doing it in aloot more fics than applejack.
Nice update to the tale as I was surprised to see Fluttershy as a changeling. Still Applejack may make things a bit worse for every pony.
Keep up the good work on such a great tale.
Applejack if you get Twi Killed... well you won't really be able to forgive yourself. that is to say the least. anyway good chapter and better update schedule.
oh SHIT, this is exactly why you don't sleep with your friends siblings... EVER!?! Now as for Pinkie Pie, AJ that's being a dick... some may call it being a bitch.
Even when I still keep reading about Fluttershy being a Changeling, I belive this whole confusion is because the author forgot to specificate that that statement was made by Pinkie Pie, not Fluttershy; This missunderstanding train has been derailed for a while already!
And Applejack couldn't make a more stupud thing to ad to her very long list of screw ups, and for what, because she is technically going to be an aunt already!
2497558 Applejack YOU DUMB SON OF A BITCH! this is going to go oh so so so very wrong.
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I'm confused. I've tried re-reading this chapter and I still don't see where Fluttershy was turned into a changeling or even where she admits she is one. Pinkie Pie plainly states she is while Fluttershy just faints. Did I miss an edit and only catch the latest version?
As for the "letter", which is going to one pony, not the national press... what exactly is Celestia going to do? Two of the Elements of Harmony can't exactly be locked up or banished, how are you going to use the hardware with two [ex-]ponies missing? Pull another Twilight and Pinkie Pie out of your back pocket?
And if Celestia is magnanimous as she tends to be, I don't see why she won't grant this new "hive" asylum in Equestria. If she's being generous, Celestia could even grant Twilight and her drones protection as a critically endangered species. Twilight might be the best thing that ever happened to the changelings.
Now if Twilight could just get a handle on her heat cycle... before she goes and pounces another hapless stallion.
Personally, I can't wait for more shenanigans. And Pinkie Pie-changeling fun? Oh... My...
Hmm... a request for Changeling OCs... I would suggest one but I somewhat doubt you would want B Sharpe the singing changeling who doesn't feed on romantic love.
2498750
There was a previous version where fluttershy revealed she was a changeling.
That was redacted.
This is the version of the chapter we're going on with.
crap
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Regardless, she is generally the wisest of the six.
2498750 I wholeheartly agree with you on this
In the immortal words of Scooby Doo: Ruh-Roh!
2497068 That and she made him forget about it.
2498829 I was wondering about that, thanks for clearing it up.
Good chapter.
Changeling OC
Name: Angron
Sex: male
Weight: 480lbs
Height: 145cm
Personality: warmonger, hotheaded, is pathologically insane with no mercy and no compassion, only loyal to a twilight. Suffers from extreme bouts of violence and once he has started to kill there is no way to stop him he will even kill own troops if they are close.
This story gets better and better!^^
By the way, will you be letting us know which OC's you will be using in this story?
I was kind of upset that Spike was gonna sleep through his whole scene, but then it turned out you had a plan all along! He's going to feel very betrayed by Applejack when he finds out she's getting him to betray his best friend.
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I half expected your user picture to be rarity covered in chocolate syrup and whipped cream when I read your user name.
Name: Nosh
Sex: male
Nosh is a perverted changeling who's favorite method of feeding is in the bedroom(or kitchen table, or pool, or the middle of town square on a busy day). He's very charismatic and prefers to talk his way out of confrentations. If words fail, he relies on quick light strikes that, despite being weak, can do great damage when chained in combos. If fighting isn't an option, he is talanted at evasion (perfected by runing from pissed off fathers, brothers, and/or husbands).
To be honest, although the Truth Stone did seem to come out of nowhere, I feel like it helped to qualify Twilight's statements and give the scene a bit more feels. I'm not really finding any glaring issues with the plot so far, so keep it up!
Also, what exactly are you looking for in an OC? Name? Personality? Gender? Because I feel like the personality of a changling OC can't really be taken into account here.
2508412
Name mostly, maybe a little personality. They are self-aware guardians after all, there is variation (for example Stoic happens to be basically Big Mac as Changeling, so he is fucking huge.)
Well, a girl's got to stick to her principles, for good or for ill.
Looking forward to more, especially how this changes the situation.
2508745 So are you going to announce who's OCs are going to be used or are you going to just use them? Cause I wouldn't mind to read a future chapter and suddenly see my OC there. I'd be a nice surprise.
Damnit Applejack...
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2508745
I heard you r request and I've had this one for a while.
Escon, it's short for Escondido which is Gaelic (I think) for hidden.
i cant beleive im saying this again but
god damit applejack.....
Well, Buck
And once again, Applejack over reacts in a fanfic
Well I was going to let it go but unfortunately the last bit needs a reaction. One racist hick stereo type check. Seriously I was going to let it slide because she was also dealing with her brother ducking her best friend, but nope you went there.
Always trust the background pony to be one dimensional we guess...