In the grim darkness, of the far future there is only war! Soon, the Great Tournament will take place in Canterlot, to choose best commander. Everypony are gathering their armies to meet enemies on blood-stained ground. This will end in slaugher thousands miniatures. Beside other generals, there are some creatures, hiding in the shadows, waiting for perfect opportunity to take revenge. Clock is ticking, and soon this will all end in the biggest battle Equestria ever known. Diced will be cursed, broken rules blamed and Luna will roll more one's than binary.
In shortcut : Ponies start playing Warhammer 40.000 Tabletop. Goddess-Empress, please bless my story-writing!
# Title based on "Galaxy in Flames" by Ben Counter.
# First story written in english, post-commy country origin with language skill lack... Goddess-Empress, seriously bless me.
# Rated Teen, because of violence that appear in "Not-Real Ones" parts.
Praise the Empress, i have finally finished! I want to thanks everybody who read entire chapter and enjoy it. It really matters to me, that i could give you fun (or FUUUUN!
). If you found something that is bad just write it in Comments, i really want to improve this story to higher level ( not even talking about my terrible english ). Basically, feel absolutly free to make your own opinions, i appreciate that. As you will probably spotted : My biggest problem is that my English stays at really low level, cause it's my secondary language. Probably, story contains a lot of mistakes, i would be really glad if you could point them out.
Some things to explain :
# It's 23th Edition of WH40k, so many rules changed, some new added, some removed. I will explain it more in next chapters.
# Orkz =/= Orks =/= Orcs. Seriously.
# I didn't make perfect calculation for point value of each army, please do not take it serious.
# Same with rules. This story is based on Tabletop version of WH40k, but i will not follow rules in 100% ( and some i will interpretate in my own way ).
Besides that, i want to thanks :
My friend, editor and pre-reader Fluttershy - For a lot of work in editing my story. Seriously, this story would never appeared, if not his heroic intervention. He re-editted only first 1/6 of story, but still i really appreciate that. By the way, if there is anybody who could help me with that problem, i would be really glad.
Entire My Little Pony and Warhammer 40.000 Community - You are awesome. No more reasons needed.
So yea, stay awesome.
Verlax
Warhammer 40K (With the odd rule thrown out the window) crossed with MLP.
Welp, you've got my fav.
The fact that I love this story also helped in faving.
Just by reading the description, I began taking guesses at Who would play what army... (discounting AJ as she was leading Imperial Guardsmen in the cover image) And no, I won't explain my guessing. That takes the fun out of it for others. (if you really want me to then I guess I can tell, but this helps a little to let others question my decision and make their own)
Twilight = Chaos Space Marines/Daemons; more specifically, Tzeentch
Rarity = Eldar; second guess, Necrons
Fluttershy = Tyranids; second guess, Tau
Rainbow Dash = Space Wolves; second guess, Grey Knights
Pinkie Pie = Space Orkz (I was right!)
Celestia = Ultramarines; second/third guesses, Blood Angels/Dark Angels
Luna = Night Lords; second/third guesses, Black Legion/Emperor's Children
This is a very interesting idea that I will be following, though you should get an editor to get the grammar more in line. The short snips of an On-the-Field point of view to jump over the dice rolling and effective results makes it easy to keep the readers attention. The conspiracy with the scatter dice is a nice touch of humor. Somewhat surprising that Rainbow enjoys a hobby-miniatures game, though I do suppose that would fall out of line for the intention of the story. I think I'm most looking forward to seeing what Fluttershy/Rarity plays and how they play. Keep it up, I look forward to the possibility of a 10,000 point battle happening at some point. (hopes and dreams)
Side note: I feel you Applejack, those plasma guns seem to hate people in general at the place I work.
All in all, a good story. Still, grammar needs some work. Get hold of another proofreader and do some edits and it'll really shine. As for the plasma gun explosion theory, I agree. Plasma guns seem to explode at the worst possible times. Though lately i've had some pretty good luck with them
I can't wait for the next part, I really enjoyed this ^^, and yeah plasma weapons for some reason always overheat when you need them the most....
This grammar is REALLY bad.
Try studying. ( I'd offer to edit, but I'm shit at editing)
By the way, what's your first language?
This story has soo much potential, even though it's hard for me to read at times. I don't even know anything about WH40K! You're a good writer, even with all your mistakes. You earned yourself a favorite.
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# Your guessing :
# How Mane Six have got into hobby ( including RD ) i will explain later.
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Thanks guys! I appreciate that. Before realase of next chapter, i try find someone who could help me with dat language problem.
Next chapter will "probably" appear ( probably is key word ) in next weekend.
Stay Awesome
Verlax
1724367 Relax about the grammar its readable so that isn't that big of a problem
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What is wrong with my guessing? Am I right? Am I wrong? Or would that be too spoiler like?
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Seriously, Try to learn about articles.
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I guess, it is possible to read it, but i think it's still possible to upgrade level of language in that story.
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Too many spoilers. Actually, Mane Six armies will be not such a mystery, but later there will be a lot of suprises, and i don't wanna just throw in your faces names of all armies. I cannot comment your guessing... i can only point that you forgot two really important facts ( and no, i will not reveal them
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Yea, I will.
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Bah, curse you.... You make me more anticipated for the coming chapters with that little teaser....
1728435 but i am big fan of east European style of speech.
Really cool idea and I think your story is quite readable. Then again, I am not a native speaker either.
Also, I had an idea what could fit into Applejack's army: The best plasma unit in the Imperial guard, and arguably in the game - a Leman Russ Executor with Commander Pask.
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I want to really thank you for pointing out my mistakes in chapter, but next time could you do not write them in perfectly visable Comment section?
I think that you spoil a bit too much information by writing stuff from still not-published chapter. Still, thank you a lot bro.
English comparing to polish is so easy that you can learn it in a one day.
Stay Awesome
Verlax
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Sorry about that. Derp on my part, I didn't think it actually would get posted here, I thought it was some kind of seperate editing thing.
Still, this is a nice concept. Don't let a silly thing like a language barrier stop you.
Edit: Feel free to delete the giant post. I won't mind.
love this
Really enjoying the story, keep up the great work!
Yea, next chapter is here!
Thank You Section :
S0nic Rainb00m - Hmm, how to start it. This guy is so awesome, that i can't describe his awesomeness ( mostly, because my English sucks, but hey! ). This guy is responsible for making this Act able to read. May the Empress bless you, big thanks to you.
McKnight - This bro helped mi a bit with a story too + His own story is wonderful, go check it out! Stay Awesome.
Entire My Little Pony and Warhammer 40.000 Community - You are awesome, no more reasons needed.
Talking about story, Prologue is quite boring to me, i can't handle thoughts about awesomeness of next chapters. I'm gonna make this stuff LEGENDARY, so ya, just brace yourself.
Actually, base of this story are references to DoW, DoW 2, Tabletop game, 1d4 community and miniwargaming.com, so if you don't get all epic references i made, just ask. By the way, little contest. Try to find ALL references i made. Enjoy.
Backing to the "core" of story. Every army I mention in story have their OWN codex. Explanation : In our real life, All Regiments of Imperial Guard use same Codex, but in Equestria all Regiments have their own. Awesome, isn't it?
If you have any question, feel free to ask.
If you spot any mistake, feel free to point out.
Don't forget to do all stuff related with FimFiction.net. You know, thumbs up, comments, reccomend to other bronies and favourites?
Yea, i know that my English still is bad, even with correcting by pre-readers. Act I is still NOT corrected, but i will back to this chapter in about... two weeks. I actually don't know when i will do this, but I Pinkie Promise that i will correct it one day!
By the way, looking for better cover image, cause it not fits this story in 100%. May the Empress bless your artistic skill.
If my passion will hold, next chapter will appear in two weeks. If not, read this sentence again.
Stay Awesome
Verlax
ah the ultra marines also known as the ward bearers
(Joke) Alt. Title: WAR! What Is It Good For!? FanFiction Plots!
Rainbow getting interested through the Horus Heresy series....
why didn't I see that coming?... 
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I was also off with Rainbow Dash's army specifics. It's still Space Marines, but not the chapters I guessed.
If 'Dau' = Tau, then I got Fluttershy right with my second guess! I feel proud somehow.... And yes, she would need some back bone in the form of Angel Bunny if she would ever be a good commander. (no offense Fluttershy...
1799606 Amazing as always ^^ Can't wait for the next part
Hi guys!
Again, i want to thanks my pre-readers : McKnight and S0nicRainb00m for making entire story able to read. You are awesome.
It's the last chapter from Prologue section. You probably already guessed that next chapters will take place in the Canterlot.
If you have a problem with understanding references i made from WH40k universe I suggest you to visit www.1d4chan.org
Next chapter will probably appear in two weeks.
Stay Awesome
Verlax
Luna is playing Sons/Daughters of Hourus/Nightmare Moon. Which she will be wearing the armor to be in character.
Your grammar and spelling are getting better!
Keep up the good work!
personally i think twilight would play eldar uthan army, dash with white scars and rarity with slannesh
1843573 Keep up the good work man, you're doing a great job on this ^^. Also, I love your Luna avatar ^^.
Blood Ravens for the win!
Brace Yourself Bronies, because Epicness is climbing higher!
Again, I want to really thanks McKnight and S0nicRainb00m for helping with corrections of my stupid mistakes. Big Bro-hoof for you.
Tournament began, so shit will go crazy. I also want to ask you a question : What Armies or What Ponies you want too see on the battlefield? I want to introduce a bit of my first idea of the story ( Epic Pony Battle Reports of History ) and yea, it's a question for you. Feel free to suggest, I will read it all for sure. However, I think next chapter will arrive later than usual, because I'm also writing second story in the same time.
Also, please help this story with thumbs up, favouriting and such. Give this story love, and I will make it truly awesome. Thank you all, guys.
Stay Awesome
Verlax
Flesh tearers the blood wills it
And anything with kharn in it "BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE"
DEATH TO THE WARD BEARERS
1892354 Will the Chaos space marines make any appearance?
,Keep up the good work man, your doing a fine job ^^.
Pinkie pie... THAT CHEATER, Mass painting and producing an army Like that?
On the what armies appearing, as my name sake I would Like a Guard 1st and Only regiment in play. Camo cloaks and silver blades for every one!
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I don't confirmed, but i don't deny it.
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Talking about First And Only
I don't confirmed, but i don't deny their appearance during the story.
Hello! This review is from Authors helping Authors.
Name: Equestria in flames
Grammar: 6.5
Pro: Interesting concept
Good pace for story
I like the battle scene in earlier chapters
Con: Grammar and English needs to be clean up
Due to grammar it a little hard to understand
Notes: Too be honest, I neither like or dislike the story. Never played War Hammer so some of the story is flying over my head. Your English in general need to be work on. I think an early comment stated that you're not a native English speaker so to be fair the story is readable even if it a little hard to understand. To sum it up, the story have some potential, but the grammar is holding it back. I highly recommend having a editor look the next chapter over before posting.
Hope you like the review and that it is helpful. Do me a favor and review my story A Choice.
Plot Twister brings back Discord as part of his plan and after multiple tedious talks, Plot Twister gets discord to make a surprised visit and forces Celestia to play in the most high stakes game of warhammer 40k in all the world.
Discord should have a daemon army of Tzeentch and Celestia should have an eldar army.
Good work by the by the way.
Good story, but needs some CREEEEEEEEEED moments
I'm sorry but
Look! Rhinos! RRRRRRHHHHIIIIIIINNNNNOOOSSSSS! Our enemies hide in METAL BAWKSES, DA KOWARDZ! TEH FEWLZ!!